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Hi! I hope this is the place for personal essays as well as memoirs/life stories.
I need help with an opening sentence for a short essay for a women's market. It's about my friend and her bags. Well, it's a story about growing up, but, on the surface, I talk about her collection of bags.
I'm really struggling with the opening, and, so far, I have...
My friend Joanne has more pocketbooks than Chinatown. Big bags, small bags, cute little monogrammed bags, from Coach, Kenneth Cole, Express. She’s even got a big bag to hold the others!
I need to know if anyone outside of NY gets the analogy. Chinatown is known for selling designer and designer knock-off bags. Shopping there is actually quite an experience (worth a story itself!) Anyway.. help? Suggestions, comments, critiques?
Thanks!!
P.S. I didn't post this in SYW because I don't need the whole piece critiqued, just my opening line. I hope that's okay.
Dawn
I need help with an opening sentence for a short essay for a women's market. It's about my friend and her bags. Well, it's a story about growing up, but, on the surface, I talk about her collection of bags.
I'm really struggling with the opening, and, so far, I have...
My friend Joanne has more pocketbooks than Chinatown. Big bags, small bags, cute little monogrammed bags, from Coach, Kenneth Cole, Express. She’s even got a big bag to hold the others!
I need to know if anyone outside of NY gets the analogy. Chinatown is known for selling designer and designer knock-off bags. Shopping there is actually quite an experience (worth a story itself!) Anyway.. help? Suggestions, comments, critiques?
Thanks!!
P.S. I didn't post this in SYW because I don't need the whole piece critiqued, just my opening line. I hope that's okay.
Dawn