It's literary fiction, and I've been thrashing the query letter in that forum. Title is TARA BORN OF TEARS. I need some feedback on the first 25 pages or so and help picking out the right scene to begin it.
Here's the query:
Thank you for looking at this query for my 90,000 word crossover novel TARA BORN OF TEARS.
A year ago Alice Goode’s five year old son Bobby drowned. Now she is receiving messages that his spirit is trapped between lives, searching for her. A shaman tells her that she must find the right man to have her son’s reincarnation. She tries, but with the wrong man and has a miscarriage. Doctors warn her that another pregnancy is dangerous. She may have one more chance, but with no idea how to find the right man, Alice becomes desperate. She doesn’t even know his name.
It is Theodore Amer. Beneath a comic mask of irony, he conceals an anguish even from himself. A misfit genius, he possesses the gift of revealing a person’s essence with a secret name. He can show someone their path in life and forge a bond. Though he desperately needs to use this ability, he is unaware of it. This isolates him, lunacy scratching at his door, left with an ache of the soul which he must pretend does not exist. After a shattering personal loss, he surrenders to madness, abandons his life, and finds himself living naked in a junkyard. Only one woman can bring him peace, a hospice nurse named Alice Goode.
Any help is appreciated.
Here's the query:
Thank you for looking at this query for my 90,000 word crossover novel TARA BORN OF TEARS.
A year ago Alice Goode’s five year old son Bobby drowned. Now she is receiving messages that his spirit is trapped between lives, searching for her. A shaman tells her that she must find the right man to have her son’s reincarnation. She tries, but with the wrong man and has a miscarriage. Doctors warn her that another pregnancy is dangerous. She may have one more chance, but with no idea how to find the right man, Alice becomes desperate. She doesn’t even know his name.
It is Theodore Amer. Beneath a comic mask of irony, he conceals an anguish even from himself. A misfit genius, he possesses the gift of revealing a person’s essence with a secret name. He can show someone their path in life and forge a bond. Though he desperately needs to use this ability, he is unaware of it. This isolates him, lunacy scratching at his door, left with an ache of the soul which he must pretend does not exist. After a shattering personal loss, he surrenders to madness, abandons his life, and finds himself living naked in a junkyard. Only one woman can bring him peace, a hospice nurse named Alice Goode.
Any help is appreciated.