RESULTS -- Opposites Contest

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First, a warm congratulations to all the poets; you did a grand job with a nebulous topic.

Second, a hearty thanks to all the voters; I hope you enjoyed the reading. Your interest and participation have earned our gratitude.

Third, a deep thanks to MacAllister for donating the second- and third-place prizes. Your generosity and support are wonderful and deeply appreciated.

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Finally, here are the podium placings of the Opposites contest:
1st place: Pat~
for poem #15, Sands of Time


2nd place (TIE): DeadElectric
for poem #5, A Collision of Physics

2nd place (TIE): Teena
for poem #19,
SOUL MATES - A Love Story in Two Sentences
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The second-place winners will each get one of the second- and third-place prizes. I'll conduct a tie-breaker with them.

I will contact the winners by PM to arrange delivery of their prizes.

I have updated the contest entries with poets' names. To the entrants: If you don't want your name listed, please let me know right away.

A more complete list of results is in the next post.

Thank you, everyone!
 
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FULL RESULTS

Here are the total scores for the poems receiving votes. Three points per first-place vote, two per second-place vote, and one for a third-place vote.

I've also added the poets' names next to their entries.

Points...Number....Title.................................Poet
..21.......15......Sands of Time.........................Pat~
. 10........5......A Collision of Physics................DeadElectric
..10.......19......SOUL MATES - A Love Story.............Teena
...9........6......Winnie the Pooh and Christopher Too...poetprncess
...8.......11......A Conversation with the Preacher......Norman D Gutter
...8........7......LOVE..................................rhymegirl
...7.......13......Posterity - his and hers..............Dylan
...6.......12......Choices...............................JRH
...5........3......Hot Mama..............................sanssouci
...4........8......Imperfect Perfection..................D.J.
...3.......18......Mind Eternal, Body Frail..............dclary
...2........1......I Sing of Thee........................Curtis Putnam
...2........4......Challenge.............................PrettySpecialGal
...2.......14......Gone Separate Ways....................nerdsRus
...1........9......Sublime Surrender.....................kdnxdr
...1.......16......Blink.................................RSCDoug
 

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Congrats to all the winners, there were some good poems in this contest.

Wow, last place...That was fun...I've got my work cut out for me I guess...Now I just want to try harder, it's been a while since I have actually tried to write a poem so, next time lookout..
 

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Wow, last place...That was fun...I've got my work cut out for me I guess...Now I just want to try harder, it's been a while since I have actually tried to write a poem so, next time lookout..


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Right next to ya in the bottom of the barrel, Doug. The same place I was at in the Epitaph contest. We could try to look at the bright side - it's warm and dark down there, protected from the elements, lots of privacy. And we won't have to make any Sally Field speeches anytime soon (you like me, you really like me . . . ). Those acceptance speeches are such a pain to put together.

:D

(Oy. I'll either try harder next time or give up . . . it'll probably depend on how masochistic I'm feeling when the next contest rolls around. ;) )
 

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And,

:Sun:CONGRATULATIONS TO ALL !!!!!!!!:Sun:
 

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Congratulation to Pat, Deadelectric and Teena for their marvellous poems :tongue, and to everyone who participated.

Wow, last place...That was fun...I've got my work cut out for me I guess...

No, I think I'm last because I didn't even make the list!

I would be happy if people can tell me all that's wrong with the poem I wrote. I'm glad that I participated. I naturally feel a bit down right now though :e2drown:.
 

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Congrats to the winners!


No, I think I'm last because I didn't even make the list!
I would be happy if people can tell me all that's wrong with the poem I wrote. ... I naturally feel a bit down right now though :e2drown:.
Don't feel down! There's only so many voters and fierce competition. You entered, and that's what's important. As a writer, you'll get a zillion rejections, but the acceptances won't come unless you're willing to take the risk.
(if it makes you feel better-no one voted for mine in the last contest)

You can post your poem for critique if you want feedback.
 

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Thank you, all who read and voted, and also all who contributed to this contest. It was a challenging subject, and I truly enjoyed reading what everyone came up with! There were several I especially loved, simply because they struck an emotional chord, or I loved the style of writing (aside from the other winners, "Mind Eternal, Body Frail" and "Choices" come to mind and got my votes), so congrats to everyone for a job well done!
 
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Congratulations Winners


and thumbs up to every who submitted - a good job had by all -

Best Wishes, Liz


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Just a few notes for each poem regarding my thought process on choosing the poems selected and what worked for me and what didn't -

: I Sing of Thee -- Curtis Putnam

“...as for me, Give me Liberty or give me death!” Patrick Henry

“I think it was one of the dumbest and most inappropriate things
I’ve seen since I’ve been in government.” Michael Chertoff



There is a fatal flaw in thought
That thinks to give but takes
Liberty, a given state of mind,
Demands of mine high stakes.

Fatal, there is a flaw in thought,
Designs of mind in evil wrought
Which ill considers my security
A lack of import do you see.
Freedom lost, no willing game,
Concede not inches to the foe.
What we have won is ours
Give up not what cost us so.

Lost no freedom, willing, game
Security gives sparkle to our name.
Without it we dwell rank in fear
Tremble in our fortress dear.


I like how this poet developed the contrasting views about homeland security is well done. Making use of simular words to enhance the multiple meanings. The quatrains are done in a smooth, easy off the tongue rhythm. Although this poem was one of the several poems I considered, I think, for me, it lacked the 'emotional' intensity that the subject surely can stir and that was something I used in my deciding process. Over all, the poem, I thought met the requirements of opposition and gave the reader enough information and feedback to support both views.

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2 : Rhyme, Thyme and Wildebeest -- Youth_from_the_Shrub

Sir, you claim that’s all we need:
Rhyme, thyme and wildebeest
Objects and words
And you know I was quite poor and unlucky
If I could speak to anyone, it would be you
If I could toss the knife to anyone, it would be you
I could be chopped in sea-rhymes
[You may have seen my boat upturned on the sand]
And then I’d float in the sky like a tiny star
I don’t know how to begin
I am a youth from the shrub
I don’t know your town habits
My feet are naked

I am quite a child in what I see
I think the world is flat
You may shake your grey locks
But I think the world is flat
Just like the soles of my feet
All land masses are revealed
All men grow old
But you still know the earth is sort of round
Dancing across the sun and all
Man is pleased with what has been achieved

Rhyme, thyme and wildebeest are a lion’s dreams
The unruly ruler of the Serengeti
I seek something truer
I seek God
I am a youth from the shrub
I know your inventions and methods
I’ve seen your skyscrapers and bombs
I was on a walk, sir
I was on a walk to retrieve my humanity
I was searching for the One
The adhan flowed, shook me, and cast me into the sea
I sat on a boat till I saw you
You were gazing at the horizon
As if life had no purpose
This is our Book, sir
I unravel it twice from my breast to recite

This gave me a lot to think about. There is originality in the subject, and some strong imagery that emphasizes the subject - some nicely drawn words, however I was unsure as to where the contrast of view or perception was not too convinced it met the requirements. I did also feel it might use some weeding out of unnecessary repetitions. I did feel this poem holds very powerful possibilities with some revision and weeding out. Over all, the poem was received with interest and I thought quite unique in subject.


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3
: Hot Mama -- sanssouci

She is Malibu rum, blowing a kiss.
She is long cigarette, static hairdo.
She is open-toe shoe, hands on her hips.
She is white leather pants, flower tattoo,

strutting her stuff,
flashing her wares,
she is sixties shag carpet,

putting on airs.

She is white poodle napping,
fern patterned drapes, laxative
taking, geriatric blind date.

The poem conveys a continuous contrast in one person's qualities - there is a depth of positive/negative traits that seem to attract the narrator, but there is also a sense of distration in the attraction. I liked this point, but felt the poem was a string of these contrasts and could use improvement.

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4 : Challenge -- PrettySpecialGal

Towering mountain
One sees hope—other, despair
Polar positions

This reminded me of a Faux-Ku, simular to a Haiku, but not about nature or seasons, but rather metaphorical of people, position and power (or the lack of it) ... There is conflict and depth in such short poem. I consider this one, but went with "LOVE" instead for the story line.
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5 : A Collision of Physics -- DeadElectric

your lips are warm : your fingers are cold
-a ratio
of sea green irises and the road map
you find on the bottom of my feet.
The anxiety
is sweeter than the waiting
sweeter than the cake-
go ahead,
smudge my makeup.
Wrap me in
barbed wire and feathers.
We're a ratio of incorrect
proportion
to the world in your head.
You say I think
in color. You think
in force like oceans and the cold
of October grass on my bare feet.
A ratio-
lighter than midnight
and darker than our days.
your lips are warm : your fingers are cold,

I don't mind at all.

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This poem was interesting. There is some contrasting images, but over all - I kept straying from the intended meaning of the poem. However, I would like to see this in critique, as I think it's potential is strong and just needs some working through it.



6 : Winnie the Pooh and Christopher Too -- poetprncess

Winnie the Pooh View ...

The years had passed so fast. I wonder could
it be you truly have forgotten me?
They sold off every acre of the wood
from where the woozles weren't, to my tree
and eeyore's gloomy place. Where might he be?
You left me sitting on the windowsill
and promised to return by count of three.
Although you didn't look behind, I still
continue to believe ... one day you will.

Chrisopher Robin's point of view ...


I miss you silly old pooh. If I could
go back in time, I would take you with me.
Yet father flew me away from the wood
to tend to school, far from the Sanderz tree,
so quick I couldn't say goodbye. A bee
had buzzed and teased outside my window sill
beckoning me; stay. I'm all grown up with three
kids of my own. They may not know you; still
don't worry - I've left them you in my will!


Not only would I never vote for my own poem, compared to those I did vote for, I felt this poem's opposition was a bit weaker than I thought. It wasn't til after submitted that I realized the over all conflict wasn't as clear as I hoped it would be. The intention, was a contrast in perception- sort of like, when a woman is attracted to a man and he never talks to her, she perceives this as disinterest, so she puts distance from him, while he is so lost in her that he freezes like a deer in the headlights, and finds he cannot speak when he is near her because he is attracted.

The idea was to show how Winnie the Pooh felt abandoned, left and that Christopher never said goodbye or looked back and remembered him. While Christopher reveals in his grief in missing pooh that it was not by his choice, that he never forgot him and he longs to pass on all the wonder of the magical adventures to his children, along with pooh.

I think that this needs some enhancing of that meaning and more contrast to emphasize the loss and misunderstanding - Also, At poem's end, I wondered ... why hasn't he gone back in adulthood to get pooh... obviously he knows where he is... Needs work.

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7 : LOVE -- rhymegirl

LOVE: Her View

Why do I love him?
Maybe it’s because he’s blessed with
all those math skills and auto smarts,
and that bottle opening, Mr. Fix-it know-how
I’m sorely lacking.

Why do I love him?
Even when his blunt words
smack me down
like a lead pipe
All because he’s angry
all because of traffic
Or all because his heroes
are losing
on that little square box
that matters more than I do
sometimes.

Why do I love him?
Despite his faults,
his so opposing tastes,
his disinterest in poetry
and the way words
can splash across a page
like colors on a canvas,
touching my heart and soul
but leaving him untouched,
yawning, and scrambling
for some fast cars,
bloody fights,
and vampires on the screen.

Why do I love him?
Maybe it’s his smile
or his uncanny knack for saying
the very thing I’m thinking
at the very same time.
Or maybe it’s that fiendish way
he looks at me and touches me
when he wants me
Making me feel
desirable and loved.

Why do I love him
even when I don’t want to?
Maybe it’s because
of all these things
or despite these things...
Because maybe love
really can’t be defined,
explained,
or fathomed
by anybody.


LOVE: His View

You ask me why I love her?
She's the perfect one for me,
And gives me everything I need
Unconditionally.


This is one of the poems I voted for - I especially felt the opposition was done with a skillful pen. Even the lengths of 'viewpoints' indicate contrast - it emphasizes the contrast between how woman perceive things and how men perceive ... it shows contrast in thinking patterns, expectations and behaviors ... I felt this really met the contests expectations and offered strong imagery to compliment that contrast.





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8 : Imperfect Perfection -- D.J.

I brought all life
You brought true death.
I offered those hope
You offered them doubt.
I created the cross
You created the need.

The subject and opposition is strong. The way the voice is perceived as God, speaking to Satan, Good / Evil ... I did however, feel it could have been stronger with less ... and in present tense... and although ILOVE that final line, I felt something more intense than cross, perhaps I created forgiveness, you created the need. Just thoughts.

Example:

I give life
you bring death
I offer hope,
you seed doubt -
I created forgiveness,
because you created the need...

Of course this is just suggestions of what came to mind while interpretting this poem.
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9 : Sublime Surrender -- kdnxdr

this way
or that
is such a spat
couples often engage in:
on a whim
"just to win"
it's her or him;
every word
an enemy's sword,
every look
mistakenly took;
if peace is the price
to have it nice,
he'll have to agree,
the winner is she.

I wasn't sure of this poem. I didn't sense any closure at poem's end. The poem, for me, lacked real substance. However the inner rhymes and some very lovely passages made me believe this poem, with some planning is a part of a larger poem or part of a series and would be enhanced by a fuller story line.



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10 : Listen -- dobiwon

In the quiet of youthful togetherness

"I love you"
screamed his genitals.


"I love you"
whispered her heart

In the quiet of youthful togetherness.

This poem made me smile... there is much deep truth found in this tongue in cheek capture. There is a nicely formed conflict between how woman perceive and how men perceive ... how each differ in expressing inner emotions... and how youthful passions can arouse such conflicting desires... she wants to love, while he wants to experience... ;) I liked this very much, and it was one that I battled in my decision... What weighted it out was I felt this could have been developed further with some showing images and allowing the middle contrasting lines to be the endings for 2 separate stanzas...


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11 : A Conversation with the Preacher -- Norman D Gutter

The preacher said, “Miss Hannah Hight
taught me in Sunday School.
And Herbert Hood, that godly man,
maintained our city pool.
Old Mayor Green gave leadership
in an upstanding way.
And Mrs. Jones, in second grade,
made each a special day.
Then there was Joe, the business man,
who gave me my first work.
He showed the worth of industry
even to a soda jerk.
I watched Bill Roy, through character,
turn trials into a song.
And Sammy Smith, a blind black man,
he taught me right from wrong.
My pastor, Joseph Wood, proclaimed
God’s message bold and clear.
His words helped me to hear the call
late in my freshman year.”

Then afterwards at the church door
we shook each other’s hand.
I said, “I need a minute of
your time, good Reverend.
Please, sir, I really need to know,
why in this hallowed place,
you found it necessary to
tell us of Sammy’s race?”
“Well, he was black. I mean no ill.
He was a man quite rare
He reached me as a wayward boy
and showed me love and care.
I stole some items from his shop,
aware he couldn’t see.
Somehow he knew what I had done
and called the cops on me.
But then he had me work for him;
no damage did he claim.
He spoke of honesty to me,
and helped me feel deep shame.”
“All that is well and good, and yet
I must point out this lack:
The only time you mentioned race
was when the man was black.”
“Surely you aren’t claiming I
committed some great sin
to accurately state to you
the color of his skin.”
“Of course not so, but tell me this:
the dear Miss Hannah Hight,
what color did her flesh reflect?”
“Well, she, of course, was white.”
“Then as you sang the praise of those
who showed you God’s great grace,
I think you should describe for us
the color of each face.”
“But why should I? The others were
in the majority.”
“Oh how I wish to make you see
your clear hypocrisy!
The fact that he was black has no
importance, so you state.
So if you tell the race of one
then each race please relate.
If race means much or naught to you,
just speak consistently.
If you feel otherwise we must
agree to disagree.”

At that we parted for the day
each to his residence,
assured that we had made our case
with brimming confidence.
So who is right? Preacher or me?
I hope someday we’ll find
if as regards to race we should
be seeing or be blind.


The subtle exposure of racism is done well in this, and the conflict for the narrator, as he looks on someone who is supposed to instill good will to all, godliness in seeing everyone for their qualities and not position or race, and the conflict is developed intently here as the narrator battles with it. What I felt really worked with this poem was the debate between the two ... seeking their side of perception to be seen righteously. The rhythm and voice is done exceptionally well. The rhymes through out are unforced and are complimented by inner rhymes through out. What I felt the poem lacked that was a deciding factor in my vote was some ending twist or 'ahhh haaa' moment. This is a well written poem that, in my opinion, needs some a little jolt to take the reader from the expected to the unexpected.




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12 : Choices -- JRH

Noone knew what Someone felt,
When Someone's life was changed,
For Noone was a Someone too,
Before that dark cruel day,
When fate had struck a terrible blow
And taken his legs away.

No hope had he to walk again,
And so, Noone despaired,
For he foresaw a bitter end,
Where no one knew or cared.

But Someone was of stronger stuff,
Refusing to give in,
And swore he'd find another way
To claim his life again.

He found new means to get around,
And rearranged his life,
Depending more and more on friends,
Who helped him in his plight.

And he survived....indeed, he thrived,
And focused on his dreams,
For his trials had strangely strengthened him,
And his will had forged the means.

Not all can face the trials they're set,
Not all will pay the cost.
Someone found another way.

Alas....Noone was lost.




This left me a bit confused. I had a difficult time understanding the opposition, but more so, a harder time following the 'no one's ' and someone's' and making sense of the poem. It seemed that there is some very profound idea's that the narrator is trying to express, but to me, just barely reaches the goal. With some further working out of intention, I believe this poem could reach a higher potential.



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13 : Posterity - his and hers -- Dylan

After the softly whispered oaths,
an embarrassment of toasts
in static air, warm with ghosts

you almost smiled into
the placid porcelain blue
of October. And I knew

that this day would always stalk
my days. Stone-set, white and black
I watched it close
with a tiny
click.

The
sound of
a life ending.
With smiles of syrup and candy
flavoured kisses, the wedding

drops around me like a shawl
no longer needed. The fall
of leaves becomes a symbol

of my constant disbelief
at the reality beneath
this unreal day. As we leave,
exactly who have I deceived?

There is amazing imagery and details that feed each other through this poem. The subject is intense and intriguing. All though it was one I teetered with a while before making my choices, I decided this had needed some strong line breaks and although there is conflict within the narrator, to my ear, I felt this conflict needed further developing.



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14 : Gone Separate Ways -- nerdsRus

For years
He rode his horse
Like an aristocrat
This farmer boy
Tails of his plaid, flannel shirts
Flying

Then they fell
Far from the farmhouse
He should be home by now
Shut off the burners
Leave supper on the stove
Find him

His parents found the two
Aristocrats
Dying.
Horse and rider
While corn turned to gold
And sun turned to ash.

I would like him
Buried
Here on the farm
His mother announced.

I would not
His father said.

Then you didn't love him
As well as I.

I loved him so much
That I can't have him that close.

She became a harridan
Her grief a profession
He withdrew.
He thought over all their years
Of colliding points of view.

They circle each other
As strangers
Unable to leave.


Just before submitting my votes, this poem was my #3 along with "Love" and I put them in a hat and drew one ... What I liked about this was the contrast of human nature, the variables and the storyline. I did however feel this could be improved with some more 'meat' in the loss of the son, and further detailing the despare and opposition of how each parent handles their grief in opposing ways... in order to enhance that excellent ending stanza.


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15 : Sands of Time -- Pat~


in my youth I outpaced
the sun as it loitered
in the sky
but
now
I amble as
it sprints across
that looming horizon





I voted for this. As my 2nd choice, although that was chosen through picking out of a hat, because I teetered between this and Soul Mates too long and still couldn't decide. This, in my opinion, truly met the 'opposites' expectations in the contest... There is profound truths in the words, the contrast between how we live our lives and how life, reacts around us ... how in youth we are speeding through, too fast to see our direction or truly take in the experiences we are racing through ... while the days dwaddle along, slowly burning, turning ... we spend our youth's wishing and impatiently waiting to become ... 16, then 18 and then, 21 ... and so on ...The ending really gives this reader something to ponder about life, about how it races while in our mature years, we try to hard to slow it down and how it becomes quick sinking sands in the hour glass... Great poem.



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16 : Blink -- RSCDoug


Light
A fire in the mind of a soul
Lost in the dark
The last flickers of hope resonate
On the eyes
The dimmest of the body parts
Refusing to give up on the light
Flickering
Last chances, gone


Dark
Empty…no, black
Creeping through the veins
Slowly swallowing the light
You can feel it now
Dragging, Pulling, begging
It’s partner, silence, forces you to hear
Your thoughts
You can’t focus on what you can’t see
So you focus on your mind



This poem left me unsure of the contrast, sort of slightly disappointing, as when I saw the contrast between light/dark, I was expecting a deeper look into the realms of how light/dark effect either the soul, our lives, our perceptions or even the material world between light and darkness... However, I found that stanza could have offered a more conflicting viewpoint and the inner turmoil of the mind is a subject that offers many intensified paths open to improve this poem over all...




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17 : More than a Room Apart -- NeuroFizz


“All he wants to do on weekends is watch football.”
“She’s trying to limit me to one ball game per day.”
“He’s so tight, I have to fill out an application to buy a new dress.”
“She’d limit all our credit cards, if I’d let her.”
“He eats like a pig; I can’t stand to watch.”
“Her cooking’s so bad I have to stuff it down for fear of tasting it.”
“He leaves his stinky shoes in the living room.”
“She has a wall-full of shoes, but not the elusive periwinkle pumps.”
“I can tell when he falls asleep—he finally stops belching.”
“She can’t just rip one; she slips out silent stealth stank, without warning.”
“He hopes for it every night, and expects it at least twice each week.”
“She likes it when she gets into it, but that happens about once a month.”
“His idea of romance is to put his tongue in my ear and then grab my breasts.”
“She wants so much cuddling beforehand, my hand starts looking good.”
“He’s starting to get a gut.”
“Her butt’s starting to spread.”
“That little island of hair in front is about to declare its independence.”
“I have to take a second mortgage for the hair dye, conditioners and mousse.”
“He never looks in my eyes with ‘that look’ anymore.”
“She won’t take a shower with me anymore.”
“Divorce? No. He’s a great provider, and he’ll make a fantastic father.”
“Divorce? No way. When I get a few drinks in her, she swallows.”


This most certainly had a great aspect of opposition and contrast in views - I loved the duality of the poem and how each line contrasted the next and of course, the humorous punch at the poems end really gave this high points for me... This was also on my top 5, indecisive teetering on voting ... but what swayed me to choose another poem was I did feel this is a great poem, but needs some weeding out of unnecessary words to heighten the strength of each line's conflicting partnership... This is a most read again poem either way ...
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18 : Mind Eternal, Body Frail -- dclary

It is a strange thing
his mind eternal, immortal says,
this sensation,
this thing they call pain.

It does not stagger him;
how could it?
A mind eternal, immortal is beyond such things
and yet,
and yet how much of this could any body,
mortal and frail
endure?

It does not dissuade him;
how could it?
A mind eternal, immortal can put aside these things
and yet,
and yet it remains:
this all-consuming anguish that tears away even
an immortal mind’s best defenses.

“Father!” he cries, the mortal and frail body’s last gasp.
“Why have you forsaken me?”
The peace that comes is a reassurance.
He is mortal and frail
but also immortal, eternal
and the victory will come soon.

This poem, although I felt had quite an intense subject and, although a little needed tweaking of some lines and reconsideration of line breaks, it gave substance. I especially liked the pickup of intensity in the final stanza. However, I felt the opposition, the conflict could have been further developed...


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19 : SOUL MATES - A Love Story in Two Sentences -- Teena

He could not, no he must not,
risk the happiness of those
whose lives were intertwined with his
and so, therefore, he chose
to say "adieu" to one he loved
who loved him in return,
whose whispered words
and softest touch
would linger there
to burn
upon his soul for all his days,
the future cold and bare
devoid of her, the sparkling one,
who always had been there.


She turned away and staggered home,
their parting barely done
and yet she knew her heart had died
because she lost the one
who made her laugh,
and love,
and live,
whose essence kept her whole,
whose face and memory were seared
into her very soul,
nor ever could she put behind,
forget
and learn to care
for someone else instead of he
who never would be there.




This was my #1 vote - I felt it met the contests requirements with excellence, the subject was one, I myself, could relate with, which allows this reader to be stirred by the context and images ... I felt it met with emotions and crisp meaning and intent... and the ending was quite fitting. Over all, I thought this poem a worthy and powerful poem.





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I wanted to give a little commentary to each poem to 'show' how one reader/voter approached each poem and weighed the merits and aspects of each poem in making a voting decision. Over all, I think each poem has great merit ...

Best Regards and best wishes to the winners, Liz
 
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Congrats to the winners.

Pat, I've entered three AW poetry contests, and you won two of them. I'm not going to enter the next one unless you promise to skip it.

Liz: That was a lot of work. Thanks for the comments on mine.

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Congratulations to all, particularly to Pat, DeadElectric and Teena. All in all, I'd call it a rather successful Contest. Well Done.

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Thanks so much everyone who read and voted. Congrats to the winners and to all of those who entered. Putting yourself in front of others - especially when someone else gives you the tune to which you must dance -- that's not always easy.

Liz, I'm overwhelmed. You did alot of work on your comments and I really appreciate the ones you made on "Soul Mates." Glad you could relate to the emotion....I've been there!

Thanks!

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poetprincess, I appreciate your observations. Gone Separate Ways is about real people and a real incident within my own family, and it's always been much too painful to write about. When the challenge of Opposites came up, I'd planned initially to sit it out, but then I remembered the terrible division within a couple that can come with the death of a child, and it seemed a place where I might be able put a few words.

I'll think about your comment about length - that there perhaps should have been a little more. I was afraid of having it go on too long - didn't want to lose people. And, living through it, time really did collapse, with things seeming to go from one to the other terribly fast in real life. I watched this couple, my own family, reduced to the condition of strangers within less than two days.

This matters to me, because I've wanted to address the thing in short story form for years and couldn't bring myself to do it. I think attempting this contest challenge has allowed me to test the waters. Maybe a long poem, maybe a story, I don't know yet. But I know it's helped me to move forward, and I appreciate your taking the time to comment.
 

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Congratulations to Pat~, DeadElectric, and Teena!

PoetPrincess, thanks for you comments on my poem (and on all the others--that was quite an udertaking).

Rob, thanks for doing this. I really enjoyed both participating in it and reading the other entries.
 

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CONGRATULATIONS!!! To Pat and the other winners. And thank you to all who participated. And thank you again Rob for your time and efforts to keep us inspired, interested and involved. (take a prize out of the hopper fer yerself! You deserve it :D)
 

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Congratulations Pat, DeadElectric and Teena!

Now that we've had two great contests, Rob, can we have another?????

They're always so much fun!

Thanks to all who made the contest by submitting and by voting, you're the ones who make it great.

:e2cheer: Rob, you're the best!
 

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Congratulations Pat, Dead Electric and Teena. This contest was a lot of fun. Thanks for your comments Poet Princess.
 

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Congrats to Pat and all of you who did so well! Thanks for all of you who posted! Thanks to Rob!!!!!!
I'm not really a poet but like words and found this fun!
 

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Congratulations Pat, DeadElectric and Teena! Brilliant :e2cheer:
 

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Everyone is welcome for the commentary's I sort of enjoyed getting the opportunity to 'think' about each poem and learn from the process of what stands out in poetry and what needs improvement, especially in my own work.

Everyone did a great job and I enjoyed being apart of it...

Best wishes, Liz
 

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This reminded me of a Faux-Ku, simular to a Haiku, but not about nature or seasons, but rather metaphorical of people, position and power (or the lack of it) ... There is conflict and depth in such short poem. I consider this one, but went with "LOVE" instead for the story line.
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Do you mean Senryu? Haiku form, but human Nature?

(Funny, you should mention love-- that was the basis for this poem)

Thanks for the time in sharing your thought.
 

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Congrats to everyone on your poems. It takes a lot of guts to enter these things- I know! I was just excited to see the number "2" next to my entry. Thanks for the vote, whoever gave it.
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