log line practice 4 all

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scryptreader

here is the challenge... write a log line, 25 words or less for two of your favorite (well known) movies... then write a logline for your best screenplay...

u can learn a lot from the feedback... i.e.

a frumpy mannerless female fbi agent is forced to take an undercover assignment as a beauty pageant contestant in order to catch a killer. (ms congeniality)

a moody suspenseful murder mystery that forces three adult male friends to confront a traumatic childhood experience.
(mystic river)

a nerdy young highschool freshman embarks on a disastrous mission to join the "cool" crowd in order to impress a girl.
(great wall of pigtown)

see its that simple - your turn... go for it.


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Hamboogul

scryptreader,

You seem to know very much about the biz. I hope that you'll continue to post so that we may all learn.

Thanks. :)
 

scryptreader

go for it... lets see what you got... also, help me fix the ones i wrote - again, good practice for all.
 

angelinalovesyou

Ham i like how encuoragin you are to your fello writers. i have a script would you like to trade scripts with me we could trade each others scripts and read them

angelina
 

scryptreader

thanx - u have good posts too - maybe we can all learn from each other... i am a writer and a reader in hollywood. can always use more info to pass on.
 

scryptreader

give it a shot pipe - lets see what ya got - it can help all of us.
 

A Pathetic Writer

a frumpy mannerless female fbi agent is forced to take an undercover assignment as a beauty pageant contestant in order to catch a killer. (ms congeniality)

a moody suspenseful murder mystery that forces three adult male friends to confront a traumatic childhood experience.
(mystic river)

a nerdy young highschool freshman embarks on a disastrous mission to join the "cool" crowd in order to impress a girl.
(great wall of pigtown)
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These are all setups. Not Loglines. A setup gives us stakes, goals, and gives the reader a reason to want to request your script. None of these do this.
 

scryptreader

can u offer us a proper logline for the above two movies? it will help everyone...
 

A Pathetic Writer

can u offer us a proper logline for the above two movies? it will help everyone...
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I'm pretty sure I listed 3 movies.

And I don't write loglines. That's what my agent's for.
 

scryptreader

write it out as a story at least before u approach disney - that way you will have something to discuss... and stay at it.
 

angelinalovesyou

i have the hole story in my head just didnt wont to write it all down here in case someone steals it i hear there is a lot of that in hollwyood
 

scryptreader

sorry, i didn't see them posted with your reply, will look again.
 

Hamboogul

PRINCESS DAIRIES

After being told by Julie Andrews "They won't buy the cow if they can get the milk for free," Princess decides to start a dairy. Will the cream rise to the top or will her venture turn sour?
 

scryptreader

not as much as people think but its still a good idea to get your work registered - good luck.
 

scryptreader

how did u get your agent to write loglines? you are one of the lucky ones...
 

A Pathetic Writer

I'm the writer. I write the scripts. He's the agent. He sells the scripts. Loglines are a selling tool.

Do the math, because you sure as hell can't do the spelling.
 

angelinalovesyou

ham will you read my script?????? i will read urs too and tell u what i think of it
 

Hamboogul

APW,

There is no need to use insults. This board was created to foster new writers like myself and it's awesome that industry professionals such as scryptreader can find the time to dispense helpful advice.

So let's all play nice. :)
 

angelinalovesyou

pathetic that is mean why u gotta be so mean that is not nice to say a thing about ur fellow writer u should be encuroaging him not slaggin him off shame on u

hamboogul will u read my script??????
 

Hamboogul

angelina,

i'm trying to gather the subtext of your message. What is it?
 

angelinalovesyou

i dont have no subtext i just want someone to read my script and u seem like a helpful guy who knos what he is talkin about

:ack
 
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