Suggestions needed - why is he on the run?

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Gurney

Hi everyone.

I've got a character who's on the run, with a new identity. I've been musing on why he's on the run, but it's all obvious stuff, like:
  • he's a mafioso informant
  • he's a major witness to a serious crime
  • he's in the CIA/NSA or they're after him
  • he's a terrorist
None of these will be much of a surprise to the reader. Can anyone think of an alternative for his secret identity, other than that he's a super hero or an abused spouse?

Any suggestions gratefully received!
 

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Maybe he's got no real reason to be on the run. Maybe he's paranoid. It's all in his head.
 

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There's some beauty in what Zarch just suggested - have there BE no reason. If you can pull that off, and keep them guessing till the end :)
 

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Have you figured out the end of the book yet? If you know why he STOPS running, it might give you some ideas about why he started. Or if the character has a sidekick or confidante or at least a secondary character who's on his side, presumably someone who is NOT running, but is very tied to a given location, and you know why he/she has ties, then you can come up with parallel or mirroring reasons for the protagonist to be footloose. Or perhaps the very reason that one character is tied to a location is the sort of thing that would, in the other character's personality, cause him to avoid ties.

Another option: give yourself fifteen minutes to write down all the possibilities you can think of, regardless of how silly they seem. You've got the first handful already. Make yourself keep going, at least to a dozen, maybe 15 or 20. Don't stop and think, just write them as fast as you can. Then take a break, go away and forget about it for a bit. When you come back to the list, the first few will be cliche, and a few will be totally insane, but somewhere in there, you'll find something interesting that can work, although it might need some tweaking.

You might want to do this exercise long-hand, not on a computer. There's some theory out there that writing with pen & paper calls on different, potentially more creative, parts of the brain.

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MidnightMuse said:
There's some beauty in what Zarch just suggested - have there BE no reason. If you can pull that off, and keep them guessing till the end :)

The fun of this would be, every time the matter comes up throughout the book, have him allude to a different reason for being on the run. One time, he's escaped the witness protection program, another time, he's a criminal, another time, he's on the run from the mob. Never really point out from any other point of view that he keeps contradicting himself, just keep stating different views as if they're all true. It's a very subtle way of making the reader realize your guy's a little cracked... :)
 

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I had a good idea. He could be a doctor on the run.

Maybe he is running because he just snapped. Fugue state.
 

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Need more info

How relevant to the story is his reason for being on the run? If totally irrelevant my instinct would be not to say, or to indicate that he doesn't know. My favorite so far is that he's just paranoid/mentally imbalanced, but it depends on what the story needs from this character as to whether it can be used. Other ideas, that he has committed some major crime, has been brainwashed, is an extraterrestrial etc could quickly become cheesy if not handled right.
BTW and off the subject, the past posts on this board have been enormously helpful to me in writing my first novel (now complete) and have for better or worse made me a much more critical reader, so thanks everybody!
 

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The best use of the paranoid/on the run situation was the movie Conspiracy Theory where we laugh at him thinking everyone's out to get him...except that everyone is out to get him.

...of course, now the problem becomes, that's already been done.
 

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My favorite keep-em-guessing-till-the-end movie was Memento.

I would KILL to have been the writer who came up with that one.
 

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MidnightMuse said:
My favorite keep-em-guessing-till-the-end movie was Memento.

I would KILL to have been the writer who came up with that one.

God, Momento was brilliant. I adore that film.
 

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Gurney - is this a story you've though through beginning to end, and you just need a better reason for the running - or is this just a vague story idea you have, and you need the anchor to start ?
 

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You know, I was thinking of Memento myself when I posted. But the whole point of Memento is that you do find out this guy's history and it becomes the end of the movie. If that's the case with this story then you need the end before even starting to write in my humble opinion. If it doesn't matter to his actions through the book...but how could it not? Is this a principal character?
 

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Now I want to read a story about a guy running from nothing. It's a lot better than finding out there actually are people chasing the character, like in Conspiracy Theory. Someone must have written this story already, unless it was just invented in this thread. Sounds like it could be really funny.
 

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He' sick of his life. It's always been planned for him, even his wife is someone picked for him. In fact, its that time in the future where you can choose the type of kids you have, and now he wants out. He wants to return the way things were, and is bailing out.
 

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Maybe he doesn't know why he's on the run, just that he IS. Jason Bourne knew if he stopped running he'd get killed, but he didn't figure out WHY until quite a way into the book.

Then again, maybe it's a game show, like Stephen King's Running Man.
 

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Naw.

Completely kill superhero/domestic violence; those are so common [not to mention redundant] they want to make me puke.

Doctor running from malpractice suit? Sounds........ frumpy.
Tsk. tsk. I'd trade anything for that sort of writer's block.

Running from a bad life sounds good, but it you do, go for a she instead of a he on the main character front.
Or you could try this;
Man's not running; he's chasing an old flame [collage, highschool, if you like]
Either that, or he can be in big trouble for stealing things from an employer; new computer tech; secret vaccine, something like that.

But hey, don't listen to me; find yourself a white space and think about it. It'll come to you, trust me, they always do.
 

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Run

Maybe he doens't know why he's on the run. He's just knows he can't allow himself to be caught. . .but who's trying to catch him? He doesn't know this, either.
 

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Perhaps he's running from aliens. Just add a copper tubing hat, and there you go!

or

He's a slightly unhinged astronomer who believes he knows when the next big meteor storms will hit, and wants to avoid death via large falling objects.
 

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Innkeeper already mentioned creditors, so my other ideas:

-He is, or used to be, really famous for something, and he's trying to distance himself from that act. Maybe he was credited with preventing an assasination or terrorist attack or something, but he knows it was actually just luck/an accident, so he's sick of being called a hero. Or he's a sports or movie star, or a famous doctor who everyone's always asking to perform some proceedure that he's the best in the world at, and he doesn't want to do it anymore (if you use this last one though, don't tell the WB. And be sure not to call him Andy Brown).

-He is, or used to be, really infamous for something. Like he was a photographer trying to get a picture of a beloved public figure, and said figure was killed trying to escape him. Or his negligence caused a school to burn down. Maybe he was an accountant at an enron-type company, and he either blew the whistle or knew there was something going on and didn't.
 

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He could be a bogus literary agent, who ripped off so many writers and now there is no place that he can hide.;)
 

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I saw a quite odd programme a few years ago about people who just up and left comfortable, and seemingly perfect, lives.
The lady I particularly remember had a lovely bungalow and no money worries, and one day she just walked out of the house and kept walking. She never touched the money in her bank account. She never called any family or friends. When she was finally tracked down, she was working as a washer up in a hotel and living in a cheap bedsit - and said she'd never been happier. She'd felt trapped by her comfortable life.
 

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He is an informant who has had a gay relationship with the Godfather!

What can I tell you my Mafia is an up to date socio-political orginization.
 
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