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Old 12-28-2012, 07:11 AM   #1
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Show Don't Tell Help

So I've gotten better at showing when I do my work but it still feels bad. Can someone give me a site about to improve my showing when I write a story or give me an example. I want it to be better.

Please and Thank you
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Old 12-28-2012, 11:16 AM   #2
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There are many threads about this particular subject right here on AW. Here are just a couple:

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=248510

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=213219

And a blog post by an AW member about the subject.
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Old 12-28-2012, 11:37 AM   #3
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There are many threads about this particular subject right here on AW. Here are just a couple:

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=248510

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=213219

And a blog post by an AW member about the subject.
Thanks so much ^_^
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Old 01-04-2013, 03:06 PM   #4
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On that note, which sounds better?

"It was raining"

or

"She stared into the darkness as another flash of lightning lit up the sky, her vision obscured by the raindrops hitting the window pane."

Bad example, I know, but it gets the point across.
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Old 01-09-2013, 10:07 PM   #5
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Great links, L.Y!
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