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Can "slow" be a verb?
Metformin slows glucose absorption. Can I write it this way instead of Metformin slows down glucose absorption?
The exact term "slows glucose absorption" has more than 200,000 hits in Google, but only two (2) if I search with site:gov "slow the passage of food" is much more common than "slow down the passage of food," though. "Slow the speed" is also common. It seems to me that "slow" alone can be used when things are obviously moving already. "Glucose absorption" does not sound so movable and my first example can be actually a bit awkward.
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'Slow/s/ed' is fine as a verb:
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/slow 'Slow down' is more an idiom: http://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/slow+down I'd rather see 'slow/s' than 'slow down' in academic writing (although others may differ). On choices of the base form (slow) or the s form (slows), this link may be hepful as it shows why the base form of a verb (eg slow) is chosen over the s form (slows). It's all to do with number, poeple, mood etc: http://grammar.about.com/od/ab/g/baseformterm.htm But in general: The man (3rd person single) slows his pace The people (3rd person plural) slow their pace. I run (1st person single) She runs (3rd person single) They run (3rd person plural) Which is probably why: Metformin (3rd person uncount) slows glucose abosorbtion sounds better than: Metformin slow glucose absorbtion Metformin doesn't take an 's', otherwise "Metformins slow glucose" would sound better on the ear. As it doesn't and it represents a whole substance, the verb 'slows' sounds better. This is purely how I see it working. Other AWs will let you know if I'm wrong. I'm not suggesting alternatives for 'slow' as it's not what you asked
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Oh, slow/slows is not my problem at all, that's easy. But you say "slow" alone, not "slow down," could do.
What about "fasten" or "quicken" (to make faster), do they sound right? You can fasten the delivery of the post by... or You can quicken the delivery of the post by...
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No. "Quicken" has a distinct meaning (see "quickening"), and "fasten" means to close (as in "fastening a coat").
Try "accelerate".
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There's no such word as 'fasten' in the sense of 'to make faster', as far as I know.
Try 'hasten' or 'speed' It all depends upon context.
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"hasten the absorption of oxygen" "Speed" (not "speed up," right?) is even better.
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Hasten is fairly common. As for 'speed' and 'speed up' I'd opt for 'accelerate'.
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Fallen, or anyone other, when you are looking for a health information for yourself in a nonacademic, but serious health article, do you want to read accelerate or speed growth, healing or whatever...I mean pure English vs. latine-derived words?
Mayoclinic.com, a very popular health website, is famous for their simplified language: Supplemental oxygen can speed the absorption process. Is it something wrong with simpler words? Do they sound annoying or amateurish? I usually write for the "end users," so not doctors or researchers. I just want to hear this from someone who is English. Some (educated) online Indian and Chinese people were constantly warning me to write in a more understandable language.
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Aim not for simplicity, but clarity.
Don't substitute the right word for a simpler one; but if the simple one is the right one, then use that instead of something complex. Knowing which one is the "right" one is the bit that takes experience and talent.
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Entirely putting aside the many problems with referring to "simple people" in such a context, let's look at the basic aspect of writing for different audiences. There are many simple words that are perfectly acceptable for people with "some education and intelligence." And in many cases, using a more complex word will make the writer look like someone with less education and intelligence... because it's the wrong word. Use the right word for the situation and for the audience. A particularly literate audience may expand your choices; an audience educated in a particular field ought to give you many choices in field-specific terminology; and an audience reading for serious academic purpose may prefer complex, compact sentences to taking several simpler sentences to express the same concept. But it would be foolish to choose more complex words and more complex sentences simply on the basis of believing that complexity is somehow superior, or a sign of a more "advanced" text in some way. Complexity should be used because it's necessary--for style, clarity, conciseness, or otherwise--and not for its own sake. (Note that if you're dealing with an audience that associates complexity with superiority, then in that case you are, in fact, using it for reasons of style.) |
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Clarity is king, and simplicity is the key to clarity.
Simplicity in terms of saying exactly what you mean and meaning what you say. Your main difficulty seems to be you don't always know how to say things simply and clearly - and that is always going to lead to misunderstanding. Especially in a medical atmosphere where it's essential for folk to understand what you mean. We can, and are glad to help when we can, but it would be very advisable to consider having these articles vetted by someone who knew your intended audience well. To be constantly warned to write in a more understandable language seems to me to be a warning sign that should not be ignored.
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Fae and one make some really good points up there.
Just on a side note, I understand where you're coming from. When it comes to anything medical, I'm a simple person; I like things explained in ways that don't need a knife to cut through through the thickness of the words. But at the same time, English is my first language, I've been to university etc, and I've grown up knowing the difference between (and within) registers, so I get to know (purely by default sometimes) the subtle differences in word choice. I'd be happy with accelerate, hasten etc. But not every reader is the same and you're right to consider your target audience as a whole and try and get a good balance between techincal and accesible. Like you say, you're not writing for doctors and medical researchers, so I wouldn't expect it to be at the more lexically dense end of the technical scale. In the context you gave, 'speed' would be fine. Which is what Bufty was saying too, and he makes a good point on making sure you do know your target audience.
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That is in fact the best way to write that.
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My last articles are about nutrition and my readers may be Pinoys, Scandinavians...occasional 12-year kids, but mostly adult Americans, who have digestive problems, are vegetarians etc., so they are usually familiar with related topics, but not necessary with all medical terms, so I write "stomach" instead of "gastric" diseases and so.
Now, I was thinking to start to "translate" some nonmedical Latin terms ("speed" instead of "accelerate"), because - why would someone want to read a complicated word if a simple one is available. I'm not a fan of the mayoclinic.com oversimplified style and I'm not about to invent a new word for a stethoscope, for example.
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In your medical example: "slows glucose absorption", the verb "retards" would perhaps be a little more precise. Or maybe "suppresses". But there's nothing grammatically incorrect about the use of "slows".
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Suppresses is an exact but "complicated" word. Retards - yes. I was also considering "hampers," but I believe most people would understand "slows."
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Not. "Suppress" is a commonly used verb in everyday English, which any literate person would understand, without specific technical knowledge. And remember the audience for whom you are writing here. Not likely you're going to have anybody who would have to seek a dictionary to understand it.
We have pharmaceutical ads on TV with regularity that cite "suppression of the immune system" as a warning about side-effects of certain medicines. In fact, the more I think about it, "suppresses" is exactly the word you're looking for in this particular example. caw
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A 15-year old boy from London understands "suppress" without a blink? One Indian teacher would yell at me that he understands nothing so he will not read further.
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Mostly for English-speaking people, 15+, including those whose English is not their first language, and who have personal needs to find useful health information online. I don't care about style or rich vocabulary. For a random reader my articles are boring, really.
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