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Old 11-28-2012, 07:01 AM   #1
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A New Sentence Game
Hi, all...

It's been a while since I started a thread.

I don't know if this has been done. I did a search and couldn't find anything.

So, here be da rules.

1) I will start with a sentence starting the story.
2) The next person will follow up with a COMPLETE sentence. (and I'll be watching...so if anyone messes it up, I bring out the Dalek...).
3) The sentence can be funny or serious, as long as it connects to the previous sentence in some way.
4) Dialogue can be used, but sparingly.
5) Try not to chance tenses or POV in the middle of a story.
6) After 25 sentences or so, a person may end the story so another individual can start a new one. Alternatively, we may find that we have a never-ending story in this thread.

Example --

Person 1: The moon was bright, and the monkeys came out to play.
Person 2: The monkeys brought bananas and danced in the moonlight, hitting me with tree branches as they frolicked joyfully.

See? Okay...for realsies this time. Have fun!

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One day, a hippopotamus was walking across whatever hippos walk on, and he realized he was hungry.
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Old 11-28-2012, 07:16 AM   #2
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Thankfully, what he was walking on turned out to be small rodents, and these proved tasty, once he had spatulaed them off the airport's runway tarmac.
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Old 11-28-2012, 07:20 AM   #3
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The hippo was not watching where he was going, however, and he nearly got hit by an airplane on the runway.
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Old 11-28-2012, 07:25 AM   #4
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He tried to charge the plane with assault, but it flew away before he could read the license plate.
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Old 11-28-2012, 07:48 AM   #5
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The hippo knew exactly what to do, he needed to contact Elliot Ness and the untouchables.
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Old 11-28-2012, 09:54 AM   #6
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The hippo, whose name was Mort, had no change for the phone, so he had to place a collect call to Ness.
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Old 11-28-2012, 09:56 AM   #7
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Ness, sufficed to say, was not pleased.
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Old 11-28-2012, 10:21 AM   #8
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Ness and Mort, in an attempt to converse about the matter at hand, somehow wound up arguing about Twilight.
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Old 11-28-2012, 07:45 PM   #9
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Ness was Team Jacob, and Mort was Team Edward.
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Mort didn't want to admit he sometimes slapped in a set of fake fangs, slathered his majestic hippo-ness in glitter, and tried to pick up lady-hippos.
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Old 11-29-2012, 08:21 AM   #11
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He also tried to convince the lady-hippos that he won the Powerball, but it turned out he was instead $1 million in debt.
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...and that's when the airplane fuel exploded!
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Old 11-29-2012, 08:28 AM   #13
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If only he'd had opposable thumbs, he would've staged a bank heist with his friend the zebra.
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Old 12-04-2012, 11:10 PM   #14
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If he had opposable thumbs, he would have continued his story by now.
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Old 12-05-2012, 12:53 AM   #15
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Alas, it is a sad fact of life that hippos don't have thumbs, nor a running narrative in their head - or do they?
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Regardless of the answer to that philosophical question, Mort and Ness understood that it was time to leave the airport once and for all.
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They decided to leave it by hijacking a plane and driving it through the walls, cutting a rough-edged groove through the building that extended from tarmac to taxi stand.
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Old 12-07-2012, 03:36 AM   #18
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Mort was still shaking after evading a hit from the CIA, yet Ness was stoic as a librarian.
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There was a reason for that, and the reason was quaaludes, but Ness' self-medication did not turn out to be sufficient to keep her calm through what happened to them next.
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After spending years of wallowing, she had to ditch the drugs, Mort was counting on her.
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