[Beta Reader Needed][Erotica][Swap=Yes!] Looking for female readers to make sure the story "works".

MyBrainReallyHurts · 11-20-2012, 03:48 AM

I've completed one of three erotic novella's. (All three stories will be related, but can be read independently.)

I like to write my first draft, have someone read it and give their opinion, and then I start my second draft. I have limited time so this method helps me make as many improvements as possible on the next pass.

I'm not concerned with spelling or grammar. I would just like your opinion if it "worked" for you or not. I basically just need someone to read the juicy bits. Maybe there is a something that happens that takes you out of the story, or kills the mood for you. Maybe I am missing a feeling or a sensation that you can fill me in on. While I may be male, I usually write from the woman's perspective and yes, I miss the mark from time to time.

If interested, this section of the book deals mostly with D/s but it is soft as this is the first time the protagonist is trying this.

If you would like to trade, I am happy to offer my opinions on just about anything. I try to be fair and balanced in my critiques.

Thank you in advance.

EDIT: Forgot to mention that it is currently at 18K words.

Maryn · 11-20-2012, 04:37 AM

Although I write erotica, I'm not sure this arrangement would work for me. I find I cannot set aside issues of writing mechanics to see whether the underlying story works for me.

Maybe I'm an elitist, but I'd prefer not to see work for feedback until it's as good as the author can make it without my help.

I hope you can find people who are able to help you with the Big Picture issues, but I'm afraid I must demur.

Maryn, all demure (that's a laugh)

Chase · 11-20-2012, 05:45 AM

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Originally Posted by MyBrainReallyHurts

I'm not concerned with spelling or grammar. I would just like your opinion if it "worked" for you or not. . . . Thank you in advance.

You're welcome in advance, but also in advance I have to agree with Maryn, the demure.

No piece of writing ever works for me without the best spelling, punctuation, and grammar a writer can manage. When those elements are not worth the bother, you can bet your laptop other elements are also not worth the bother.

MyBrainReallyHurts · 11-20-2012, 05:49 AM

I completely understand, and I respect that. That is why I made the disclaimer.

If no one wants to read it in this condition, I will clean it up and then see if you have time to look it over.

Thank you for the reply.

L.Blake · 11-29-2012, 04:19 PM

pm'd you.

L.

ElectricLights · 11-30-2012, 03:08 AM

I'll take a look. I don't mind the grammar and spelling so much unless it's consistent and I really can't read without coming across something that seriously distracts. PM please

11-20-2012, 03:48 AM	#1
MyBrainReallyHurts No, it really doesn't. Join Date: Nov 2012 Location: Ohio Posts: 15	[Beta Reader Needed][Erotica][Swap=Yes!] Looking for female readers to make sure the story "works". I've completed one of three erotic novella's. (All three stories will be related, but can be read independently.) I like to write my first draft, have someone read it and give their opinion, and then I start my second draft. I have limited time so this method helps me make as many improvements as possible on the next pass. I'm not concerned with spelling or grammar. I would just like your opinion if it "worked" for you or not. I basically just need someone to read the juicy bits. Maybe there is a something that happens that takes you out of the story, or kills the mood for you. Maybe I am missing a feeling or a sensation that you can fill me in on. While I may be male, I usually write from the woman's perspective and yes, I miss the mark from time to time. If interested, this section of the book deals mostly with D/s but it is soft as this is the first time the protagonist is trying this. If you would like to trade, I am happy to offer my opinions on just about anything. I try to be fair and balanced in my critiques. Thank you in advance. EDIT: Forgot to mention that it is currently at 18K words.

11-20-2012, 04:37 AM	#2
Maryn Purple Sparkles for the Win AW Moderator Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Western New York Posts: 25,797	Although I write erotica, I'm not sure this arrangement would work for me. I find I cannot set aside issues of writing mechanics to see whether the underlying story works for me. Maybe I'm an elitist, but I'd prefer not to see work for feedback until it's as good as the author can make it without my help. I hope you can find people who are able to help you with the Big Picture issues, but I'm afraid I must demur. Maryn, all demure (that's a laugh) __________________ Incorrigible. Please do not attempt corridge.

11-29-2012, 04:19 PM	#5
L.Blake Soaking up information. Join Date: Feb 2012 Location: a state of contentment Posts: 170	pm'd you. L. __________________ WIP Cirque: First draft done WIP Dirty Desires: Starting over 2013 500K Challenge...working on it Monstre 42,746

11-30-2012, 03:08 AM	#6
ElectricLights figuring it all out Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 84	I'll take a look. I don't mind the grammar and spelling so much unless it's consistent and I really can't read without coming across something that seriously distracts. PM please __________________ A word for the wise

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11-20-2012, 05:49 AM	#4
MyBrainReallyHurts No, it really doesn't. Join Date: Nov 2012 Location: Ohio Posts: 15	I completely understand, and I respect that. That is why I made the disclaimer. If no one wants to read it in this condition, I will clean it up and then see if you have time to look it over. Thank you for the reply.