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Hi Everyone,
I would like to get everyone's thoughts on an idea that was presented to me by one of my beta readers. He was critiquing my mystery set in ancient China, called The Spring and Autumn Murders. While the majority of the criticisms were well founded (he pointed out a major plot flaw ). This idea puzzled me a bit.Keep in mind, that I am paraphrasing here. My memory doesn't allow for a direct quote this morning. One of his critiques was that my characters didn't come across as the "typical" Chinese, and that I should put more stuff in that would make people know that they were Chinese. When I asked him for further clarification, he basically indicated that I should use more of the recognized stereotypes when it comes to the Chinese people. For example, they're short, have slanty eyes, are extremely productive, unforgiving, demanding, are excellent in math and science.... etc. In the story I purposely moved away from the typical western stereotypical view of the Chinese and their culture simply because I wanted to sh ow that China and its people are much more dynamic and varied than most westerns realize. But now I wonder, can a stereotype be useful? Does something like describing a typical stereotypical China Doll have it's place in the story? Would it help with the marketability of the book in the long run? Any thoughts or ideas would be appreciated. Thanks, Laura
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He's bonkers, I think.
Is there any particular reason to trust his opinion on this? I can make a good case for archetypes, but stereotypes tend to read as exactly what they are, imho. Unless it's satire or something, I'm thinking he gets a big fat No
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If it's set in Ancient China he's maybe pointing out that you are not grounding/covering the characters properly in relation to the time period - I don't know.
Speaking generally in relation to foreign characters, why should characters be portrayed as 'typical'? As long as I know they're Chinese, Russian, Irish or whatever - if that's what you want me to know - that's sufficient - they should then be characters in their own right, with their individual mannerisms and personality in the same way as any other characters. If it was necessary, personal attributes could no doubt incorporate things that are known to be specific to people from that country.
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I find stereotypes useful; if it's a heavily ingrained stereotype, it makes it much easier to seem original if you deviate from it, even slightly.
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Cultural stereotypes usually have a basis in reality. Go to Europe and pick out the under-dressed Americans, it's easy. In my interactions with Germans they reliably have fantastic posture.
I don't know if these are "stereotypes" or just commonalities, or if there's even a difference, but they tend to hold above random chance. As someone pointed out above it's very easy to cross the line into satire, so they must be used subtly.
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The question is [and I know squat about Chinese history] how different are the people of ancient China to modern day China? What historical events have shaped modern perceptions? How has colonialism etc effected physical characteristics?
It would be like me writing Romans based on modern Italians, or Picts on modern Scots.
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It doesn't mean you should resort to stereotypes. But if characters of different races/cultures act, talk, and think exactly the same, then their race feels like a gesture of tokenism. Of course your Chinese character could be American-born and raised in a primarily white mixed-European suburb or whatever and be virtually indistinguishable from others of their community save for physical differences, and if that's the character you want to write, then write it. But perhaps what your beta reader saw was a missed opportunity to explore Chinese culture and racial identity. I disagree entirely that you should resort to stereotypes to "Chinesify" the character. But does the character have any links to Chinese culture that are important to them? Beware cliches here--the wise grandparent who spouts Chinese proverbs and stubbornly refuses to embrace Western culture, etc.
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Stereotypes, and I use the technical term here and not the perjorative term, is shorthand sometimes that lets you set a stage quickly without a lot of extra description. Say you want to portray a 1940 scene from Shanghai, then you could mention the rickshaws and the short chinese. But, and this is where it gets tricky, the more developed your character is, the less stereotypical s/he should be. So, for a walk-on part you might have a rickshaw driver, but for a side-kick or a main character, you need to know your stuff and make the character interesting.
But you, of course, also have to make the character believable. An emancipated woman in that 1940s Shanghai scenario would have to be very, very thought out because Mulan is not real, and characters are influenced by society to a great extent. You would have to know about the state of women in pre-revolution China, and then construct a plausible reason for that character to be emancipated. This within the confines of the chinese culture of the time. Maybe that's what you beta picked up - that your Chinese character was not really culturally Chinese at all?
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You know, no one in the Chinese half of my family has slanty eyes. No one. And in some cases, these stereotypes can be really silly. Should all uneducated Chinese farmers be good at science? Having said that, your setting shouldn't feel anything like modern-day North America. Maybe this is a weakness of your story? How much research have you done on ancient China? And have you read novels set in historical China to see how the setting is handled? One author I quite like is Lisa See. Her novels are set in a number of different time periods, and she handles it very well. You can see the different cultural values in every line of dialogue. (For example, daughters are treated completely differently from sons.) |
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What the hey?
The story is set in China. The characters are all Chinese. I don't understand why your characters would have to conform to (really obnoxious) stereotypes to be believable. They're Chinese people in China, for Frig's sake!!! If ever there was a story where you should be free to show the infinite variety of interests and looks and personality that all of humanity is heir to, this is it. Sheesh. |
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Well, there's a thin line to walk here.
When I was in Italy I was astounded by how stereotypical it all was on the surface--elderly men playing chess, large families running around eating lots of food in public, being all so--Italian. Anyone who'd ever been told what "Italians are like" would have been able to guess where they were instantaneously. But I didn't get to know any of those people personally. And I'm sure if I did those stereotypical aspects would have faded into the background and become less important to my overall perception of that one person. So, I agree that a lot of stereotypes have a basis of some sort in reality--they often are (but not always) characteristics shared by a large group. But that doesn't mean that each individual can be defined by them. So, perhaps this is a show-don't-tell moment? If you tell me someone is in China and is Chinese, that's great--but I'm not going to feel that unless I get a glimpse of the culture. Now, those glimpses could be somewhat typical (what a westerner thinks of as typical), but they don't have to be. And, frankly, it's more interesting if they're not typical, but are still recognizably Chinese. Hope that made some sense and was a little helpful.
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Thanks, everyone for chiming in.
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The other factor is the idea that many people have is that China is filled with one homogeneous bunch of people. It isn't, and it never was. Despite what is presented in today's media, China is filled with different ethnic groups, races, even cultures. This factor was even more true during the Spring and Autumn period. I worry that in an effort to make the story "sound more Chinese" to the western mind, I'll loose some of the historical authenticity. Quote:
I actually have read some of Lisa See's work. She is quite good, isn't she? Again, thanks everyone! ![]() Laura
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Don't listen to him! That all sounds stupid. You can have Chinese cultural traditions to show you've done research and to make sure the story doesn't sound like it's taking place in North America, but do not stereotype the characters themselves. No two people are ever really the exact same in real life (They can be very similar, but there's usually something that sets them apart and makes them unique).
Such stereotypes like them all being short, extremely productive, unforgiving, demanding, and excellent in math and science is just that. Stereotypes. Not everyone is like that. Even in ancient times, I doubt you could define an entire population with a few set attributes. Besides, who the hell wants to be typical? You're allowed to shatter stereotypes and go against what people think of certain races. |
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If the story is clearly set in Ancient China and the reader is told nothing to the contrary it doesn't seem unreasonable to assume the characters are Chinese.
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I also think you should discard that bit of advice instantly. If your book gets published, you will have angry people calling you racist, not your beta reader.
If all your characters are Chinese, and in China, then they're not going to see each other as short, are they? They'll see each other as normal in height. And they're not going to think of one another as having exoticly-shaped eyes. Again, they'll see each other as looking normal. They're going to see each other as regular people, not members of a category. You had it right the first time; never use stereotypes. Your beta reader might have had lots of good suggestions, but that one bit of advice was both wrong-headed and quite offensive. |
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Your "Chinese" details should be based on your research NOT stereotypes. This is what will make your story sound authentic for the time and place. Quote:
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It sounds like you have it covered. All I can think to add is that maybe you could remind the reader the characters are in China during long stretches of dialogue, family life, etc. via setting. Maybe food. Do you intersperse Chinese words throughout? I tend to like that.
But if some readers fall into forgetting that characters aren't Western because they default to that strongly, that ends up being their own problem mostly, imho.
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Toughen up.
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It sounds to me that you're covering all the bases.
Which reminds me of when I read the latest Simon Scarrow book. I don't think I've came across such English Roman's before. I LOLed.
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A lot of person's mannerisms and ways of thinking (though not necessarily their thoughts) come from culture. For example, when I was in Japan, my host family put the donna (comforter) underneath the blanket, as a sheet. They thought I was crazy for putting the sheet and blanket down first.
So I think rather than falling back on stereotypes, you should rely on detail to get culture across. It's woman-like to drink with your hand supporting the teacup in Japan, and frowned upon if you just pick it up in one hand. Now, if you have a Japanese main character, they don't have act this way - but the reactions of those surrounding them will be different, because they're acting differently from the expected. Similarly, it might be cool for a young woman who has mostly male friends to drink her tea the "male way", and they'd notice if she changed. There are always reasons behind details, whether it be culture, family or the people you interact with. It because details are generally (thought not always) learned behaviours. Humans are humans, but they act differently in the detail depending on where they come from. If you learn that detail, then you won't be falling back of stereotypes, you'll be creating characters.
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I agree with what others have been saying here; there's a difference between being aware of the culture and stereotyping. Different societies value different things, on average, but that doesn't mean everyone within the society will conform to those values.
For instance, American culture (and I'm aware that I'm making a huge generalization here) tends to be very individualistic, focused on self-actualization and "doing" as opposed to being. That doesn't, of course, mean that every American character should be a rugged individualist in a cowboy hat, but it does mean that the value placed on certain qualities will in some way play a role in that character's life. Same goes for Chinese characters. Whether they do or don't embrace the culture's values, it will probably impact them in some way, even if it's a subtle way.
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Some food for thought: Can you do a global search & replace for "China" to "India" and the story or the details still work? How important are the details pertaining to the then China in your novel? Does it make a difference if they sat on chairs or on their ankles on the floor? Does it matter if they had long hair or short? Does it matter if widows could remarry? |
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How is someone "Chinese?" I have to wonder if the person who said that had a frame of reference. Were things not available in that time and place for them to have that world view like "wouldn't buy that, they didn't know what it was..." or were they really just totally off base?
I love breaking stereotypes. Because maybe 1% of the people I met in real life were stereotypical. And they sure as heck weren't interesting enough to write about. It's the people that break the mould that are interesting, and it's the one that are so far from what you expect when you first see/describe them that are the ones worth reading/writing about. EDIT: Ok, with a tiny bit of thought now, not just reaction. Can you ask the beta-reader for specifics? Was it just "unexpected" (which would be good). Or was there something consistently off about the character that made them feel it was "off" about what China culture in that time period and setting was like compared to how they were written (maybe bad). In absence of context of the beta-readers comment, it's hard to say if the criticism was important, or shallow meaningless nonsense. Last edited by badlandz; 01-08-2012 at 01:07 PM. |
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Fifteen years ago I did a psychiatric night shift with a Chinese nurse. She was a lesbian and she was heavily into Kabbalah. Not Buddhism, not Daoism...Kabbalah. So much for Chinese conformity!
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Is your beta really talking about character, or is he wishing for more background and more cultural detail? Maybe he feels a lack of Chinese-ness and can't think of any other way to describe it, but what he really wants is scenery.
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