Elena said:
Being only fourteen.... I don't have as much experience as most of the other members. However, I am currently working on my sixth novel attempt, (all of the others failed sadly...) Knowing that most editors/agents won't even look at a young teens work, I am going for the goal of just FINISHING my novel.
I was hoping some people could give some advice on anything from building characters to sentence fluency. It would be most helpful. Thanks.
BUILDING CHARACTERS: Make sure every character has a voice of her/his own. Don't have everybody be a wise philosohpher, using all the same vocabulary. develop a feel for the different ways each character talks. Also, make sure that each character has more on his/her mind than the plot. Throw in other dimensions. Everybody has a personal problem. On top of that, you may have... say a tough-guy, but show a different side - perhaps he lost his mother. Perhaps he has a passion for flowers, or bugs, or math. Mix it up. Give bit characters at least a side problem that they mention, but give main characters three dimensions - three unrelated personality traits - one or two of which may be buried beneath their facade, but allude to them. Let us know they are human.l
SENTENCE FLUENCY: That's tougher. The primary objective is to be clear in your descriptions of places, events, and dialogue. Avoid overuse of the same word. Avoid overly complex wording. Avoid gigantic words that come from a thesaurus.
Don't overuse pronouns, "She did this. She did that. She did the other."
Try to consolodate action, "She did this, that, and the other."
Keep to the plot and the characterization. Don't stray off into a lullabye about how your character perceived the infinite beauty of the pattern on the drapes.
Show, dont' tell!
Don't say, "Ever since she was a child, she'd been fearful of clowns. Her own uncle had been a clown, and he'd burned all her stuffed-animals in a drunken rage. That was years ago, and her Uncle had died in a sky-diving accident, but she still carried the scar. That scar that now underpinned the secret meaning of her question to Carl. Carl had no idea that Clown College would upset her like this. He thought she was being her usually rude self. Anybody would attest that Clarice was a high-strung individual..."
That's all tell, and it's a big snore-fest.
You need to show these facts, one by one, through action and dialogue. Perhaps in chapter one she has an adverse reaction to seeing a clown. Perhaps later she has a flashback to her drunken uncle. When we read the dialogue between Carl and Clarice, it should speak for itself, without a bunch of "helpful info" to clarify what's going on.
Okay, there's my crash-course for ya. If you really want to learn how to write, read the "Learn to Write with Uncle Jim" thread... (and no, he's not and evil clown, he's a man of true wisdom).
Good luck, and God speed!