Any such thing as a good adverb?

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So as I've been writing, I obviously have done my best to avoid adverbs. I think as a rookie writer who's learning to craft a story, its right to ignore them.

But I've ended up in a position where sometimes I feel like the adverbs are stronger than any verbs.

My recent examples:
Wistfully
Emphatically.

Perhaps I don't have a good enough vocabulary, but the desire for someone to look wistfully at someone, (or cast a wistful glance) or shake their head emphatically seems important.

At what point can you ignore the adverb rule and choose strong adverbs?
 

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They are still going to be 'telling' instead of 'showing', but sometimes that's the best for what you are trying to do. It depends on why you chose them, imho.
 

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I see some new authors trying so hard to use a "strong" verb that they write themselves out of sounding natural.

I very, very rarely use adverbs, but some of them just sound correct.
 

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Adverbs are part of your Writer's Toolbox. They exist for a reason. As sp said, if it works, use them.

Exactly. No part of the language should be off limits. Of course adverbs are fine, better than fine, they're perfect, where and when they fit the best.

I don't understand the aversion to using any part of speech. I understand the thought behind why adverbs scattered page to page look awful, messy, unthoughtful (often there are stronger verbs) but I think an overall avoidance of the part of speech isn't going to help a writer.

My personal advice is to note what the though process is behind the rule, and apply it where it works. Don't feel guilty about using an adverb that works.

And there's more reason than strong verbs to form a sentence one way or the next. Too much prose cutting can leave sentences feeling overtightened, stiff, voiceless, rhythmless.

I prefer to write my prose how it sounds most natural, gives a human voice to the background, then I'll cut where it's fatty. But not so much as to take the voice away or chop the natural flow from it.

So in short, adverbs are no more evil than verbs or nouns or adjectives or articles....etc....
 

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I see some new authors trying so hard to use a "strong" verb that they write themselves out of sounding natural.

I very, very rarely use adverbs, but some of them just sound correct.

Beat me to it. and more succinctly :)
 

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I see some new authors trying so hard to use a "strong" verb that they write themselves out of sounding natural.

I totally agree. And too much 'showing' can get silly and bog the pace, depending on how that's done.

Adverbs are handy in the mix, but don't be lazy with them.
 

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Every word is acceptable...until you try to get it past an agent. :)
 

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Don't worry about adverbs till you've finished the whole first draft. Then read it out loud. If it sounds good with the adverbs in, just leave 'em be.

Trying to take all the adverbs out while you're writing is like trying to wipe down the bar while you're lifting weights.
 

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Use a thesaurus for a while to see if there are better verbs than the one you are using. After a while you'll know if you need to keep on using it.
 

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What is this? Some kind of stalker question?
This whole thing just reminds me of a fad that has gone too far. I am not looking to be an anorexic writer, cutting all the curves out of my work. We cut pronouns, adverbs and dialog tags. What's next, those pesky nouns?

Write it the way it lives in your head. Edit it later.
 
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I use 'em...and nobody better have a problem with that!

Seriously, I write. Later, I edit. Many adverbs die, many stay. Whatever works for/helps my story.

Interestingly (snicker...), I have read no fewer than 4 "bestsellers" recently (hehehe...) all of which used adverbs judiciously (hahahah...THREE!). Oh and lots of exclamation marks.

Whatever floats yer boat.
 

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Adverbs are part of your Writer's Toolbox. They exist for a reason. As sp said, if it works, use them.

Exactly. (See? An adverb!)

You shouldn't never use adverbs. You should only use them when they'll make the most impact or serve the narrative best.

The reason why so many people say you shouldn't use them is because many writers rely on adverbs to describe action rather than choosing more appropriate verbs. If you can find a verb that flows well with the story and also describes the action accurately, use it. If you can't, use an adverb.

Too many adverbs shows that you're not caring much about how you communicate with the reader. It's sloppy and lazy to rely on them all the time. And, as others have pointed out, overuse of adverbs is a major component of the "telling" curse (as opposed to showing, which is preferable.)

Telling is when you create a boring wall of separation between the reader and the action in your book. Think of a kid telling you about their day: "This happened, and then this happened, and then this happened." Too many adverbs can make the reader feel like they're listening to a child rattle off a story.

Showing draws the reader in more, as if they're watching the action on a movie screen or, better yet, are actually experiencing it themselves. Think of a skilled storyteller reciting a tale in front of an audience. They use their hands and their face to convey expression. They vary the pitch of their voice. They move around. They keep the audience on the edge of their seat, because the combination of their words and how they use their words is so engrossing.

"Look at that bear," Sam said quietly. He sounded scared.

"Look at that bear," Sam whispered, a sharp edge of fear in his voice.

Big difference between these two sentences. You can see for yourself which is telling and which is showing, right? The lack of adverb has a lot to do with how you feel when reading the sentences.

Many times, you can replace an adverb with action that will show the emotion or action you want to convey better than an adverb would show it.

"I wish I could see my mother again," Vera said wistfully.

"I wish I could see my mother again," Vera said. She turned the brittle pages of the photo album with care. Now and then she paused, tracing a knobby old finger over the sepia faces, smiling to herself as if she could feel the smooth, cool skin of her mother's cheek.

The first one tells of wistfulness. The second one shows wistfulness, and is more interesting to read.

But it isn't taboo to use an adverb just because it's an adverb. Adverbs have their place. Use them when you need to. When you don't need to, don't. :)
 
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If it isn't slathered in buttery adverbs, I shan't eat it.
 

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i hate the bad rap that some words get here. sure...a manuscript filled with them will not be a pretty picture. But do not NOT use them. When it is needed, it works. People kill their shit dead by following all the rules.
 

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I am a novice myself, but the ban on adverbs baffles me. I think good prose needs adverbs, and as much as I try to heed the show-don't-tell rule, I can't help but use adverbs. Some of my favorite prose out there is replete with adverbs, so I don't really let Strunk and White ruin my fun.

Here is a good bit from the Language Log about this: http://158.130.17.5/~myl/languagelog/archives/000469.html

Those who lard their prose with juicy, slobbering, adjectival modifiers... write stupid little books like The Elements of Style that tell you not to. The second word in Roger Angell's Foreword to the 4th edition of Strunk and White is an attributive adjective. In E. B. White's introduction to the book, the 6th word is an attributive adjective and there is another in the 4th line and so it goes on. The first two chapters of the main part of the book both have titles that begin with an attributive adjective.

And another one from the same: http://itre.cis.upenn.edu/~myl/languagelog/archives/001905.html

...there are 52 adjective and adverb tokens in White's 406 words. That's almost 13 percent of the total word count (the adjectives alone make up about 8 percent of the word tokens)....
 
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