Realistic superheroes for a beta that can go the distance

I've spent several years editing and/or completely rewriting THE RESISTANCE and haven't found anyone to really sink their editorial teeth into it so I've started querying this without it having gone through a real thorough beta. A bunch of people have read it to the end (multiple times even <3) but no one's edited through to the end of it and the edits I have gotten have just been spelling here and there, nothing really thorough unless I specifically prompt someone and if it's something that obviously wrong I'm already rewriting it in my head.

So, if you like "Heroes" or the comic book/new series/movie TMNT and consider yourself a thorough editor head over to my website www.zellie.info There are 3 chapters up in the Novels section and if it strikes your fancy, let me know and I'll get you the rest.

Captshady... I'd be happy to hear your likes/dislikes PM me your email (and format preference if you don't use MS Word) and I'll send it along. haha especially dislikes... I'm aiming to shorten it.

Like I said, the first 3 chapters are on my website here:

http://zellie.info/?page_id=3

Your choice of text or audio!

The formatting is a bit better there than pasting on a forum but I'll paste the first page below for your convenience:

Jared didn’t want to be here with the doctors. He hated their invasive prodding and they told him he was too old for a lollipop. He was tough; he could handle a shot but Dr. Gandon’s rancid breath made him sick. He wished he could get up and leave but Mom wanted him to be here so he lay still in a long chair that belonged in a dentist’s office. Jared tensed when Dr. Gandon’s assistant Reyes strapped him down.

“Don’t move. The process is delicate,” Dr. Reyes warned.

“Damn it, the equipment is still upstairs,” Dr. Gandon said. Two pairs of shoes quickly clacked against concrete as the doctors left the basement.
Stale-smelling darkness that was not darkness surrounded Jared. He was blind. Mom had told the doctors to fix his eyes. Of course, she was probably just falling for another scam like the credit lines and diet pills. She was on a new pill this week-she never learned and never listened. Blindness couldn’t be cured. But this process was new, experimental. Maybe it was possible. Mom liked that it was free.

“Free?” Jared spat. “It’s gotta be a scam.”

A woman’s voice emerged from the darkness, “Oh God, I am so sorry I couldn’t stop him from tying you down. I’m so sorry you’re here.”