Favorite bits of dialogue in your WIP

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Epsilon

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I'm not sure about this, but I think brackets aren't commonly used in dialogue? Again, not sure.

I saw parentheses in dialogue when I was reading The Brothers Karamazov, which is a great book by the way. I figured I'd throw them in my WIP. In retrospect though, it may flow better with some other substitute. Maybe this convention has just fallen out of use in contemporary works, I really don't know. Perhaps someone can shed some more light on this.
 

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“Enough of your insolence. I had my suspicions when I’d heard of your arrival. Now my suspicions are confirmed. In his panic, the Scotsman has realized my threat and sent an assassin to dispatch me.”

“If King James perceived you as such a threat, I’m sure he would have sent along with me a doctor and a priest as well. You, my good sir, are in serious need of a demonic exorcism followed by a good bleeding.”
 

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“I’m going to leave for a bit, but first I’m going to do what I can to conserve the oxygen in the breathers. At least we know now that we’ll need to refill them before we head out. Or maybe there’s air in the tunnels. I don’t know. But at any rate we’ll need to add that to our list of things to think about.”
Beige nodded her head. “What should I do until you get back?”
Pierce nodded back. “Stay alive.”
 

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I may have gotten a little carried away with one of my character's rants about what it's like to have the soul of an artist.

“Curse, you say? Let me tell you about curses. A curse is when you wake up in the middle of the night, unable to fall back asleep because you can’t get a tune unstuck from your head. Or you’ve had a dream that would make a fantastic story. Then when you do finally drift off you find it all gone in the morning. A curse is when personal relationships fall by the wayside because you isolate yourself from the world. A curse is when you lose everything and turn your back on what most consider life’s essentials, simply because you have no interest in anything other than the next word, sentence, paragraph, and on, and on, until you’ve turned stacks of pages into imprisoning castle walls, so high it’s considered treacherous to be in your vicinity. That my friend is a curse; one that cannot be broken because the truth of the matter is there are no perfect last lines. So you keep writing and writing until your fingers bleed, and hope that one day you’ll find solace even though you know solace will be forever hidden. And the only gratification you can take from your obsession is ripped from the hearts of the few who recognize your torment.”
 
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