I'm posting up the next chapter for review, because I'm not as confident in that one, and I certainly could use some advice as to what's wrong with it, if you've the time.
Thanks for being so receptive to what I had to say. I'll give the next chapter a once over. It'll be tomorrow at the earliest before I can look at it, though. It may even be as late as Friday, but I will give it a look see.
