When a loved one leaves

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[FONT=&quot]I believe it’s a feeling all people experience in their lives; the separation from a loved one. Yes, it can be felt by those who lose someone from their own grasp. These people mistakenly think that they’ve ever had that person as their own. They may have held them in their arms, and felt a sense of deep closeness. The conversation you just had with them the other day, is now only a memory. The feeling may not be because of a death. It may be like the feeling you get when your brother leaves home for college. The feeling will be felt by most in this world that live and breathe. It is the same but unique feeling felt by those of the past. Everyone feels and thinks, you can’t possibly know what I’m feeling, but you must not forget that were all human beings who know a little about how life is. We know about the reality that comes from being apart from someone. [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]Support is the key now. You and I may not completely see eye to eye or have the same soul, but we can be comforted to know that we’re not alone in what we are feeling.
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[FONT=&quot]What do you think? I wish i knew how much time i spent on this, but i wrote it quite a while ago. Like a few years.
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Yeah. SYW is the only place to post work for crit -- and new members need fifty posts to start a new thread in SYW.

Nonetheless, I see a large number of grammar and sentence-construction problems in the paragraph you've posted. I recommend some good books on writing fundamentals.

Closing this, now.
 
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