Too many hers?

Taylinn woke to mother calling she and her sister down for dinner.

That looks okay to me. (though I'm bad about the order of reflexive pronouns and nouns, so it could be Taylinn woke to mother calling her sister and her down for dinner)

The hers are fine but loose the comma

bkwriter said:

Taylinn woke to her mother calling her, and her sister down for dinner.

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To make this technically correct, all you have to do is remove the comma.

But it's a little ungainly, as you noticed, and it tells rather than shows (which is perfectly all right if it's of little importance). If I were asked to rewrite this, which I have not been, I'm pretty sure I could make it all show with the same word count, maybe even shorter.

Maryn, good at small rewrites, bad at big picture

Taylinn woke to her mother calling her and Sharon down for dinner.