In my current WIP, one of the MC's, Colin, has an ability that I'm having a problem trying to describe.
Colin can turn into a black cloud, reforming at will. He does this often. He can't stay as a cloud too long, but when it's a choice between "turn into a cloud" or "get shot/punched", he always goes with the cloud, $VERBing several times in a fight.
I've tried misted, voidskated (it's what Colin goes through whenever he uses it), turned into mist, turned into a cloud, and I'm not liking any of them.
On one hand, I may not like any verb used for the ability, and will have to stay with the verb I hate the least. On the other hand, I may just not be thinking of the best word. On a third, mutant hand, my dislike of the verbs I choose may just be sticking to one, and I should try a variety of words that balance between "readers still get it's the same ability" and "readers aren't bored by that word again."
So, anyone have any advice?
Colin can turn into a black cloud, reforming at will. He does this often. He can't stay as a cloud too long, but when it's a choice between "turn into a cloud" or "get shot/punched", he always goes with the cloud, $VERBing several times in a fight.
I've tried misted, voidskated (it's what Colin goes through whenever he uses it), turned into mist, turned into a cloud, and I'm not liking any of them.
On one hand, I may not like any verb used for the ability, and will have to stay with the verb I hate the least. On the other hand, I may just not be thinking of the best word. On a third, mutant hand, my dislike of the verbs I choose may just be sticking to one, and I should try a variety of words that balance between "readers still get it's the same ability" and "readers aren't bored by that word again."
So, anyone have any advice?
