Adding length and bulk to a story (without padding and fluffing, of course)

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I have just written a 15k novella (or shall I say ultra-long short story). I'd like to expand it into a novel, just to practice the act of managing lots of scenes, characters, incidents, subplots, etc. My question is - how does one add genuine content and plot to a story that seems already complete? I feel like my story is finished, complete, done, but on the other hand I feel it needs more flesh. The problem is I don't know how to add flesh. How does one add flesh to what seems a story that is complete in itself?
 

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How does one add flesh to what seems a story that is complete in itself?

I don't think it is a good idea to 'flesh it out'. You need new action. Could the 15k be entwined around another equal or longer story? Can there be other side-stories woven into it? If not, why not write another story that will be much longer and leave this as it is?
 

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I believe a novella would be about 50K words, and a novel would average 70-100K words. If it's complete at 15K, would you really want to add more than twice or even three times its weight in filler and bulk? That's like opening a big Christmas present full of packing peanuts, with the real gift buried somewhere underneath it all.

You could submit it to a magazine. Or else, take a look at your main conflict and resolution, and add more obstacles between the two, and look at your most important character and what else they stand to gain from this story.
 

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If it's complete at 15K, would you really want to add more than twice or even three times its weight in filler and bulk?

I dunno - it SEEMS complete to me, but I feel like I need to add a new tangent to the story - it sort of finished too quickly for me. I just don't know HOW I could add a new tangent.

Although throwing in new obstacles would be good, yes.
 

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Maybe what your story needs is a fire-breathing ninja dragon. A CRIME FIGHTING fire-breathing ninja dragon. And also, someone takes her top off.


Another helpful comment from Tomothecat! *victory music*

I dunno - it SEEMS complete to me, but I feel like I need to add a new tangent to the story - it sort of finished too quickly for me. I just don't know HOW I could add a new tangent.

Although throwing in new obstacles would be good, yes.
 

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If it seems complete chances are it IS complete. Padding it out with more material would, I fear, be just that -- padding it out.

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At 9,000 words I was sure my novel was complete. At 19,000 I knew it was finished. 25,000...47,000, 60,000, 84,000. Finally at 106,000 the story was done. It's now been pruned to 70,000.

What happened, you say? Plot twists and sub plots kept popping up.

But, never, and I mean never, pad a good story that's comnplete.
 

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You can add 'wrinkles' to the plot...complications, red herrings etc etc.

Most stories are totally scaleable. I mean...consider the Bourne Identity, you could sum that up as...

CIA hitman loses his memory whilst on a job. He eventually recovers memory as his employer chases him down, and realises he doesn't want to be cold-hearted killer working for them any more.
 

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I'd have to see the story to know whether it could benefit from lengthening. Possibly it could benefit from shortening. Go over 5000-6000 words, sadly, and your choice of short story markets plummets.

If what you have now is really a too-short novel, it's likely you've rushed through the action and given the characters little of the breathing time which is necessary for them to come alive and grow. You might even have what's essentially an outline, as someone above has suggested.

Maybe you could give us a synopsis of what you have now, and we could try to give more specific advice.
 

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You are contradicting yourself, Exir. Either the story is complete or it's not. And most first drafts are too long - not too short.

Is this the first draft of the story you wrote in two weeks? Why risk wrecking a perfectly good short story simply to practise what you could learn just as well by starting a fresh story?
 
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If you had said you have 40k novella, my advice would be completely different, but considering you're working with a long short story, I suggest you leave it as is, and totally rethink the idea from a larger scope. Don't even look at the short story again until you've finished the novel. Some other tips:

-Consider carefully the starting point for the novel. It doesn't have to be the same point at which your story started.

-Think broad and throw in more obstacles, more characters, and more relationships. Build up your characters and give them lots of feelings and emotion and dreams and goals.

-Be sure to get into your antagonist's mind as well, add some new locations, more conflict, more everything.

-Outline, if you think it would help, or just keep a page of notes.

-Add texture and detail to your setting, and give your world an interesting history.

Use your story as inspiration not as some sort of outline for a novel. For me, that's the most helpful way to think about it. I used inspiration from a 4k story and turned it into a 85k novel. There's one scene that's similar between the two, the one that kicked off the whole idea, and it appears about halfway in the novel now. The rest I salvaged for great details and worked in nice textures.

That's about all I can think of right now. Good luck!

Nicole
 
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Okay, let me put in the general plot synopsis

Ben is a ten year old child who has been separated from his sister since the age of 2. He lives with his adoptive mother, and his life shows almost no trace of his past family. His only ties to his old family were a photograph, and a song.

Then his life changes - he finds that Rodriguez, his best friend, is moving away. And taking his place was a girl named Jade, who was confined to a wheelchair. Though at first he didn't like her very much, he begun to discover more about her past. She had been through a lot more than he thought she was. She, like him, showed a longing for a sibling, a brother or sister. She could sing very well.

And she knew the song that his old mom had taught him. He believed he found his sister, until he discovered that Jade was handicapped since birth. His sister was standing in the photograph that he had. It was evident that they had been wrong.

While he digested this sudden shock, he decided that he would keep pretending as if he was Jade's brother, knowing how it feels to long so badly for a sibling - a family. They then discovered others who needed a family, too. They discovered that Sean, the bully who has bullied them so badly, was an orphan who was in turn bullied by his older "housemates" in his foster home. Ben finds a piece of maple leaf in Sean's room.

He immediately suspects that Sean is Jade's brother, even though he is not sure. But asking Jade about it would mean revealing what he has been doing all along - keeping a white lie. He struggles with this dilemma, until he decides that he cannot let Jade remain ignorant any longer. It is time for them to find her REAL family.

When he finally musters the courage to tell Jade, he finds, to his surprise, that Jade has been doing the same to him all along - she knew she was not Ben's sister, but she decided to pretend, to keep him happy. She reveals that she had kept a piece of maple leaf that her brother has left her. Ben knew immediately that Sean was her brother.

There remained only one more mystery. How did Jade know his song, when only his old family could've taught her? Jade shows her a tape she had from her days in the orphanage. In the tape, some twenty orphans were all singing The Song. And standing in the middle was Ben's sister. Jade tells him that when his sister was teaching them the song, she said, "I only teach this song to those in my family." Jade tells him that she no longer knows where Ben's sister is, but Ben concludes with saying that it no longer mattered anymore. He thought about the twenty children, all with different skin, different hair color, different eyes, all different in appearance. All singing the Song. And he realizes that it no longer matters whether he finds his "real" family or not, for everyone around him was his family.

Sorry if my grammar wasn't too good - I had to type that out in a short amount of time.
 
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You are contradicting yourself, Exir. Either the story is complete or it's not. And most first drafts are too long - not too short.

Is this the first draft of the story you wrote in two weeks? Why risk wrecking a perfectly good short story simply to practise what you could learn just as well by starting a fresh story?

Lol. It's a really weird feeling to describe. On the one hand, the story seems complete. On the other hand, I feel like it was supposed to be enough material for a novel. I feel like it is complete, yet I feel like when I read through my first draft, I rush through it - it ends too quickly.

I feel like the material is worthy of a novel, yet it ends up too short.
 

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You described that well, Exir.

All I can say is try and write the novel if that's what you feel it should be. But start afresh - don't fiddle with what you have.

To be honest, seems adequate to me that you covered it in the short. For a novel you can't just stretch out the time element - there has to be something 'happening' in the time.

You say ends' too quickly' or ends 'too short'. If you covered everything that needed to be covered it can't end too quickly or be too short.

So the question you have to answer is - what do you think you glossed over or missed out on?

Good luck.

Lol. It's a really weird feeling to describe. On the one hand, the story seems complete. On the other hand, I feel like it was supposed to be enough material for a novel. I feel like it is complete, yet I feel like when I read through my first draft, I rush through it - it ends too quickly.

I feel like the material is worthy of a novel, yet it ends up too short.
 
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You could add some characters. Think of the events that occur early in the story, and ask yourself what kinds of people your existing characters are likely to meet at that point. Then, ask yourself which of those new people might complicate things a bit.

This should provide quite a bit of new and relevant content. It might change the entire story. Or, it might be a perfect fit with your current plot, and could end up supporting what you already have.
 

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That sounds like an appropriate topic for a short story. I think it would be too spare for a whole novel.
 

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If you do want to make it into a full blown novel then you need a bigger event that intertwines. Length wise you're just starting. You're not even a quarter way through the lower page count.
 

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What you currently seem to have is a first act and a conclusion.

Jade tells him that she no longer knows where Ben's sister is, [blank] but Ben concludes with saying that it no longer matters anymore, for everyone around him is his family.

The [blank] is where the rest of your story goes. Essentially, your second act, as well as some extra meat for your first and third acts. In a sentence, the story would be: Ben searches for his sister, and learns the true meaning of family on the way.

Your current version has Ben immediately learn the lesson that you're expressing with this story (your theme, if you will). The theme is: The people you get close to in life are your family, not necessarily the people you're biologically related to.

This 'theme' is the lesson that Ben (in a longer story) would learn over the course of many trials and tribulations (and other characters can learn it to, or not learn it if you want to show counterpoints), but the way you have it now - Ben concludes it immediately, without going on any quest or adventure. That's what's making the story so short.

If you add what I'm suggesting, your story structure becomes something more like this:

[After your current story, in which Ben longs for his real sister, while getting to know other kids who slowly become more and more like family to him] One of his new friends, Jade, turns out to have known his sister, which compels Ben to reconnect with her, but when Jade tells him that she no longer knows where his sister is, he leaves his new home to search for her. He encounters many trials and tribulations (perhaps finding his sister, perhaps not) and finally concludes that it no longer matters anymore, because everyone around him is his family.

Just my too sense.

Cheers,

Adam
 
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