Another wording for "sparks flew"?

JennaGlatzer · Feb 6, 2008

I'm trying to write a sentence about how two people met and-- y'know-- "sparks flew." Only not so cliched. Everything I come up with is equally cliched: "love was in the air," etc. Any ideas for a different, brief way of saying this?

TheIT · Feb 6, 2008

Like walking across the carpet wearing socks in wintertime and touching a door handle.

(sorry, got nothing)

JennaGlatzer · Feb 6, 2008

WISEBUTT!

Rolling Thunder · Feb 6, 2008

Nostrils flared.

Yeah...I suck at this kind of stuff.

JoNightshade · Feb 6, 2008

In a single moment, they saw forever?

Wow, that was dumb.

JJ Cooper · Feb 6, 2008

Cupid shot both of them in the ass.

JJ

Rolling Thunder · Feb 6, 2008

"Sweaty things were exposed and sporadic touching ensued."

Um...this is erotica, isn't it?

You opened a can of worms here. Jenna. :ROFL:

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

hearts aligned

souls collided

instant fire

I'm pathetic at this...

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

pssst...guys. This isn't OP.

Vincent · Feb 6, 2008

Something about the air being charged like before a thunderstorm? Static electricity?

*shrug* No idea.

TheIT · Feb 6, 2008

A little more context might help. Whose POV: his, hers, or outside observer? Genre, time period, and location?

SpookyWriter · Feb 6, 2008

JennaGlatzer said:
I'm trying to write a sentence about how two people met and-- y'know-- "sparks flew." Only not so cliched. Everything I come up with is equally cliched: "love was in the air," etc. Any ideas for a different, brief way of saying this?

They were confused momentarily? I'm not sure if pov is important or not, but if it his then "He couldn't swallow." or "His heart wanted to skip the introduction."

Hard to know how, when, or under what circumstances "sparks flew". I like two characters who stumble over each other during that first meeting where something happened. Neither one can quite explain the feelings, so their actions speak volumes.

Take care and good luck with the scene.

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

fate screamed

SpookyWriter · Feb 6, 2008

TheIT said:
A little more context might help. Whose POV: his, hers, or outside observer? Genre, time period, and location?

LOL! I was busy writing my response when you posted.

Rolling Thunder · Feb 6, 2008

KTC said:
pssst...guys. This isn't OP.

Yeah, you're right.

Um...how about:

Their hearts kindled; like white hot flares guiding two forlorn travelers through a fog of desperate loneliness.

SpookyWriter · Feb 6, 2008

KTC said:
fate screamed

Don't date a girl named Fate. Good advice Kevin.

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

Without ever seeing her, he already knew everything about her...

He swallowed his heart

SpookyWriter · Feb 6, 2008

KTC said:
He swallowed his heart

Horror?

otterman · Feb 6, 2008

"He swallowed his heart"
...and it tasted g-o-o-d.

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

In seeing her, his unnamed longing finally ended.

IceCreamEmpress · Feb 6, 2008

Well, you can't have "the floor dropped from beneath her feet like a cheap carnival ride" because I already took that one.

I like "sizzle" as a substitute for "spark" but I'm not sure where to go with that.

Rolling Thunder · Feb 6, 2008

Their hearts sizzled like steaks on a hot grill....

Yeah. I think I best go visit other threads now.

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

her whole being sizzled with the realization that she had found the one.

drachin8 · Feb 6, 2008

With a sharp gasp, her glance turned into an entrapped stare. If she never breathed again, she would die happy because the breath she held now was held for him.

Man, it is hard to do these and not be cheesy!

-Michelle

KTC · Feb 6, 2008

She wept.

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