What, besides story, disqualifies a query?

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We all know that agents who specialize in fantasy will not want historical fiction, that nonfiction agents who love cook books will probably not be gaga over your coming-of-age tale that takes place in Tibet, and those looking for thrillers will not be head over heels for poetry, no matter how thrilling it may be.

And we also know that, if they just plain don't like the story, agents won't spring for that either.

But what formula items disqualify a query? Like, small mistakes... There's the big ones such as "Mr. Agent" and "To whom it may concern," or "Dear Literary Agency"... But there's small ones, too. For example, I just realized that on two queries I, somewhat ironically, missed the word "word." I said, "you may be interested in my 86,000 novel ______."

Now, while this is one small sentence out of a great many, and story has not even been touched upon yet, I have to wonder if that immediately sends the agent's mouse cursor towards the "delete" button for an e-query, or if it causes their fingers to curl, balling up my snail mail query and ejecting it firmly into the nearest trash can.

Would this qualify? If not, what would?
 

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It could. A query is only a couple of paragraphs and if the writer hasn't proofread something this short, what will the novel look like? The utmost care must be taken with your query. It's your one shot at attracting an agent.
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Actually, now that I've checked this has happened on three other occasions and they've all asked for partials.

I guess this goes to show A. I'm a damn idiot and B. something this small doesn't quite qualify, I suppose. That or C. it's up to individual taste.

My, what a subjective industry.
 

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According to agents I've talked with, there are four basic rules for a successful query.

1) Treat it like business correspondence
-Put the letter in business letter form, complete with address blocks, date, etc.
-Proofread it. Then have someone else proofread it.
-Do not use slang or textspeak


2) Do your homework.
-Make sure you're sending it to agency that handles your genre.
-Direct your letter to a specific person. Spell that person's name correctly.

3) Be polite.
-Observe the agency's submission policies and follow them.
-Handle rejection or criticism rationally.

4) Don't act like a crazy person.
-Pretty much speaks for itself.
 
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Or so it seemed for a long time.
 

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It could. A query is only a couple of paragraphs and if the writer hasn't proofread something this short, what will the novel look like? The utmost care must be taken with your query. It's your one shot at attracting an agent.
Linnea
That's a good point, although I think poorly constructed sentences would be more damning than a simple typo.

Some of the agents who blog say that they'll gladly overlook typos if the story concept is great. But of course it's better if both are flawless.

ETA: on Nathan Bransford's blog, he gave an example of a good query letter. Apparently, few other agents had used this same letter as an example of a solid query. It was indeed a very good letter. But the author herself pointed out in a blog comment that she'd used the phrase "Several of my several short stories have been published." No one had noticed.

I didn't even notice until I read her comment.
 
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Yeah, I do think it depends upon the typo. Misspellings are bad, as are name mistakes, and bad sentence construction isn't good by any stretch of the imagination. Passive voice is also bad. I think slight grammatical errors aren't quite damning as all hell, and I think that my mistake may not immediately appear like a mistake to those who read it.

It's interesting to think about, though.
 

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That's a good question right now.
For example, I just realized that on two queries I, somewhat ironically, missed the word "word."

Look, I can't speak for anyone other than myself, and I'm not much of anyone, but when I was managing Coyote Wild's submissions, I wouldn't have even noticed a small mistake like that unless the author wrote me back to apologize for it. The human brain is an amazing thing. It flies right past things like that, inserting what it believes should be there.
 

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I once got a request for a partial when I'd gotten the agent's name wrong. Of course, that was as far as it went, so maybe she was just toying with me in retaliation.
 

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I think bragging without justification probably gets queries rejected.

"This will sell more copies than Harry Potter and The DaVinci Code combined."

"I write like the love child of Toni Morrison and Ian McEwan."

"My book is the best book ever. I know this because my mother loves it, and she, like, totally loved The Bridges of Madison County before it went, like, completely huge."

Of course, justified bragging is OK. For example, you're in good shape if you can honestly include this (run-on) sentence:

"My last five stories were published in The New Yorker, I was recently awarded a MacArthur genius grant, and, as a neurosurgeon with Doctors Without Borders, I usually write in between emergency operations performed in conflict zones on war refugees."
 

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I once got a request for a partial when I'd gotten the agent's name wrong. Of course, that was as far as it went, so maybe she was just toying with me in retaliation.

This has happened to me, too. I have also gotten a partial request entitled to a Ms. Bennett.

I am not a Ms. Bennett I checked.

EDIT: Thanks, Birol. That's pretty much what happened to me. I just read what I wanted to read. ...:(
 
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Don't use smilies and background borders/colors just because some email software has it. Black type, white background, keep it simple.
 

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I accidentally repeated a sentence, word for word, in one query letter. Still waiting for the response on that one...for some reason it hasn't been immediately rejected.



Here's something, though--when I was fourteen, dumb to the particulars of the publishing world, and still submitting directly to publishers, I queried a (very legitimate) publisher with a query that

a. was addressed "To Whom It May Concern"
b. said very little about my story
c. said why my story was amazing
d. said why I was amazing
e. did NOT include my age

and I got a partial request.

anything can happen...maybe I'll get representation from my repeat sentence query? :p
 
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