Advancing Scenes

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Hi All,

My MC's husband just found out that the child he thought was his, isn't. Because he's so in love with his wife, he wants to forgive her and try to work the marriage out.

I want to advance the scene a little,
- Should I start it in a new chapter
- Should I start a the scene in the current chapter with hard returns, writing "Four months passed since they got back together..."
- OTOH, should I advance the scene

I'm looking for ways to move the story along.

Thx for your help!
 

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It depends, how long has this current chapter been? You can do the "four months past" thing but try and make sure you do it so that it is the MC who is "thinking" about this. You don't want to go omniscient.

Honestly, write it different ways and then step back and look at it and see which way sounds best.
 

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Chapter and scenes breaks probably shouldn't be used as a "passage of time" tool. This is a natural stopping point for the reader, and you don't want to give them a easy out to put your book down. If you can end every scene and chapter with a "question" (cliffhanger, foreshadowing, questions, mystery, shocking revelation, etc) they want to know the answer to, you keep them reading and wind up with a book they just can't put down. (Which usually means a winner on the publishing front)

If you're ending your chapter on the revelation that the baby isn't his, that's a pretty good spot. If this is new info to the reader as well as the hubby, they'll turn the page to see how the wife and hubby react to this news. I personally, get very annoyed with authors who drop a great plot bombshell in my lap then skip ahead and don’t let me see how it plays out. The conflict is where the fun is. So I’d be wary of skipping the resolution or reaction to this conflict and moving ahead four months.

If you need to jump ahead those four months, I’d probably resolve your conflict, but leave something to foreshadow or hint or more trouble so the reader knows forgiveness isn’t going to be all that easy. Or whatever your next problem is. Leave them with a carrot to turn the page. Then you can skip ahead if need be.

How you advance it will depend a lot of what your protag's next goal is. What does she wat and what does she do next to get it?
 

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I could be totally off base, but if you were going to advance the story by starting it in a new chapter, I'd do a little bit of backstory giving some insight into how the character has come to grips in the past four months with this revelation. You have to be careful though. You don't want to disrupt the forward progress of you story too much.
 

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My first reaction is that four months is a long jump for a scene break and would be better as a chapter break. However, there's a lot of "it depends" attached to that thought. One is that if you have many long jumps in time, then the weight of this one becomes less, so it could go either way.

Another relates to the length of all your chapters and how far into the current chapter this occurs. If you're trucking along with a consistent chapter length, suddenly having a very short chapter would be conspicuous, so a scene break might be better.

Yet one more depends on how closely the scenes immediately before and after the break are related. If it's a direct follow-on, except for the elapsed time, then that favors a scene break over a chapter break. But if the scene following the break deals with a different plot thread, it doesn't really affect the decision one way or the other.

Chapter and scenes breaks probably shouldn't be used as a "passage of time" tool. This is a natural stopping point for the reader, and you don't want to give them a easy out to put your book down. If you can end every scene and chapter with a "question" (cliffhanger, foreshadowing, questions, mystery, shocking revelation, etc) they want to know the answer to, you keep them reading and wind up with a book they just can't put down. (Which usually means a winner on the publishing front)

Actually, a scene or chapter break is exactly the right place to make a jump in time or space. Yes, you need an unresolved question to carry the momentum over the break, but there's nothing wrong with an unresolved question hanging in limbo for some time before being answered. If nothing important happens during those four months, don't write four months worth of nothing.

If you're ending your chapter on the revelation that the baby isn't his, that's a pretty good spot. If this is new info to the reader as well as the hubby, they'll turn the page to see how the wife and hubby react to this news. I personally, get very annoyed with authors who drop a great plot bombshell in my lap then skip ahead and don’t let me see how it plays out. The conflict is where the fun is. So I’d be wary of skipping the resolution or reaction to this conflict and moving ahead four months.
I agree you shouldn't use a jump to dodge writing an important scene, but the OP didn't give enough information to assume this. It's equally possible the immediate aftermath has already played out, and the chars are in a stalemate until something triggers a new move.
 

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If you're ending your chapter on the revelation that the baby isn't his, that's a pretty good spot. If this is new info to the reader as well as the hubby, they'll turn the page to see how the wife and hubby react to this news. I personally, get very annoyed with authors who drop a great plot bombshell in my lap then skip ahead and don’t let me see how it plays out. The conflict is where the fun is. So I’d be wary of skipping the resolution or reaction to this conflict and moving ahead four months.

If you need to jump ahead those four months, I’d probably resolve your conflict, but leave something to foreshadow or hint or more trouble so the reader knows forgiveness isn’t going to be all that easy. Or whatever your next problem is. Leave them with a carrot to turn the page. Then you can skip ahead if need be.

How you advance it will depend a lot of what your protag's next goal is. What does she wat and what does she do next to get it?

Danthia

This is very good information. It really helps a lot. You've let me know what to do.
 

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Actually, a scene or chapter break is exactly the right place to make a jump in time or space. Yes, you need an unresolved question to carry the momentum over the break, but there's nothing wrong with an unresolved question hanging in limbo for some time before being answered. If nothing important happens during those four months, don't write four months worth of nothing.

FennelGiraffe;

This really helps.

Thank you all.
 
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