Okay I'll be a bit more precise about my work here; I'm writing a sort of crime noir/urban fantasy with a few cyber-punk/religious over tones. It's focused on the misanthropic Gabriel Thrisc, a private eye who might as well be a vagrant and his murky past, depressing present and unenviable future as savior of the world. It's an interesting little piece set in a parallel world. I'm looking for someone to beta read it and help me identify any problems/weaknesses as well as strengths.