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I thought it might be fun to post one of my first short stories, something I no doubt labored over for hours with my No. 2 pencil and special hardcover notebook. I must have thought it was quite glorious because the Title Is Underlined.
Go ahead, have a laugh at my expense. I was about 9. I'm not posting in SYW, 'cause I sure don't want a crit on this baby!
(I understand if the mods want to move it elsewhere, though.)
Anyway, if you'd like to keep me company here in the writing hall of shame, share a little something you wrote when you were a little kid.
Midnight, the Best Horse at the Farm
Once upon a time there was a nice little red barn with a little blue house next to it. In the house lived a happy family named the Browns. There were two boys and three girls. One of the boys was named Jerry, and the other boys name was Johnny. One of the girl’s name was Crisi, and the two other girls names were Lisa and Lynn. They had horses on their farm too. Johnny’s horse’s name was Blacky and Jerry’s horse was Spot. Crisi had Haxaul, and Lisa had Thunderbolt. But best of all the last horse’s name was Midnight. Midnight was a very shiny black Horse.
One morning all the brown kids decided to have a race. They set up two signs that said Start and Finish. They lined up on their horses, and Jerry was the oldest so he called out, Go! They all were ready to go, except Lynn. She wasn’t ready. She didn’t make Midnight run. He just stood there while the other horses were about a half mile away.
Suddenly Midnight started to run. He was running faster than the other horses, but he wasn’t caught up yet. Lynn closed her eyes and when she opened them she looked back and there she was, ahead of all the other horses. She was so exited he started to walk. But when they almost caught up Midnight started to run again. They caught up and almost went past her, but Lynn went faster. She was about a mile away from the finish.
Jerry was behind Lynn trying to beat her. Johnny was always last but this time he started to pass everybody up. He was running so fast he passed Lisa up. But he didn’t pass Jerry up. He was beside him though Lynn was almost there. There was only a half a mile to go. Now, Jerry was beginning to think that Lynn would win. While he was thinking, Lynn was about a yard from the finish line. Everybody tried to win. But while they were, they found themselves the last one’s to the finish. Lynn won, sighed Jerry. They all went home to lunch.
After lunch they went and fed their horses. While the horses were eating, they went exploring. By the time they got home it was time for supper. After supper they watched TV. Then they went to bed.
In the morning, they had breakfast. And then they went outside. They all got on their horses and took a walk. Then they had a picnic. They had hot dogs and French fries. Lisa and Lynn were twins and their birthdays were in July. Five more days and we’ll be nine, said Lisa and Lynn together out loud. And sure enough, on Friday, they turned nine.
A few days after that, they had another race. Lynn won again, and they discovered that Midnight was the best horse on the farm.
Go ahead, have a laugh at my expense. I was about 9. I'm not posting in SYW, 'cause I sure don't want a crit on this baby!
(I understand if the mods want to move it elsewhere, though.)Anyway, if you'd like to keep me company here in the writing hall of shame, share a little something you wrote when you were a little kid.
Midnight, the Best Horse at the Farm
Once upon a time there was a nice little red barn with a little blue house next to it. In the house lived a happy family named the Browns. There were two boys and three girls. One of the boys was named Jerry, and the other boys name was Johnny. One of the girl’s name was Crisi, and the two other girls names were Lisa and Lynn. They had horses on their farm too. Johnny’s horse’s name was Blacky and Jerry’s horse was Spot. Crisi had Haxaul, and Lisa had Thunderbolt. But best of all the last horse’s name was Midnight. Midnight was a very shiny black Horse.
One morning all the brown kids decided to have a race. They set up two signs that said Start and Finish. They lined up on their horses, and Jerry was the oldest so he called out, Go! They all were ready to go, except Lynn. She wasn’t ready. She didn’t make Midnight run. He just stood there while the other horses were about a half mile away.
Suddenly Midnight started to run. He was running faster than the other horses, but he wasn’t caught up yet. Lynn closed her eyes and when she opened them she looked back and there she was, ahead of all the other horses. She was so exited he started to walk. But when they almost caught up Midnight started to run again. They caught up and almost went past her, but Lynn went faster. She was about a mile away from the finish.
Jerry was behind Lynn trying to beat her. Johnny was always last but this time he started to pass everybody up. He was running so fast he passed Lisa up. But he didn’t pass Jerry up. He was beside him though Lynn was almost there. There was only a half a mile to go. Now, Jerry was beginning to think that Lynn would win. While he was thinking, Lynn was about a yard from the finish line. Everybody tried to win. But while they were, they found themselves the last one’s to the finish. Lynn won, sighed Jerry. They all went home to lunch.
After lunch they went and fed their horses. While the horses were eating, they went exploring. By the time they got home it was time for supper. After supper they watched TV. Then they went to bed.
In the morning, they had breakfast. And then they went outside. They all got on their horses and took a walk. Then they had a picnic. They had hot dogs and French fries. Lisa and Lynn were twins and their birthdays were in July. Five more days and we’ll be nine, said Lisa and Lynn together out loud. And sure enough, on Friday, they turned nine.
A few days after that, they had another race. Lynn won again, and they discovered that Midnight was the best horse on the farm.
