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Hey........if anyone could help me out with this part in my story. It's a scene, one of the most important ones, between my two main characters. It's their first scene together, and it has to be real dramatic, emotional, and how I have it in my head. My characters are talking, and moving but my brain is on mute, and I can't hear what they are saying.

Could someone help me fill in the blanks? If you private message me, I could tell you more about the scene and where I'm going...

This will REALLY help me out because it's been bugging me for so long and the part in my story I am stuck on because I want it to sound just right.

So........anyone? PLEASE?????!!! :Hail:
 
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Not necessarily cussing....since both my MCs are in an emotional tangle with the other....

as in who they are....uh, my hero is (was) married to my (heroine) MC's best friend who killed herself, and the hero blames the MC for his wife's death. I guess you can call them enemies...but not really. They all grew up together, but the hero and MC weren't all that close even then.

This fight just needs to be powerful where the MC is practically speechless while the hero is letting her really hear it. :)
 

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You might want to look to occupation and background too. A lawyer and an actor would probably argue in very different ways, for example. A geeky kid and an older, wizened person would also argue differently. I think the individual characters are more important factors than the relationship between the two arguing.

Also, a witty or very original argument is better off than one that is just melodramatic. In other words, what does the reader feel at the end of it?

So you might start by making an outline of the individual characteristics, what you want from the scene, and then outline the scene, filling it in with details that are original (funny, thought provoking, poignant, etc.).

Good luck!
 
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So is death the cause of the fight or are they just going at it & he's throwing that in cause he needs someone to yell at?

And I really didn't mean swearing....sorry;). (Although I am great at that!)

I'm at a loss - I don't know what to yell for you. Need input...

All I have for the sister in law is "Why the hell did we move & leave our friends to be by you when you never want us over and never come to our place? We saw you more when we were 4 hrs away! I could care less for your attitude - I moved so my daughter could grow up by her cousins not so you could pull a power trip. You treat me like I'm a door to door crack salesman and I'm sick of it. Eat Shit & Live!"

Whew - didn't help your cause but I feel better!
 
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:ROFL:Oh my Lord I love it!!!!! Especially the end....

But not exactly what I was going for. However, you did give me a good voice POV. :)

Death is the main part of the argument, and blame. It's all about the blame, and the hero is basically pouring his anger out on my heroine and she's quiet, mute, doesn't know what to say. But the end of the dialogue I am shooting for that she asks for his help, and he basically tells her to get out of his life forever.... that blunt, that's what I need.
 

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SuzyB said:
It's all about the blame, and the hero is basically pouring his anger out on my heroine and she's quiet, mute, doesn't know what to say.
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Why is she quiet? Does she feel guilty? Is she too angry to say a word? Does she think he's blinded by rage and can't see the truth so it wouldn't matter what she said to him? Is grief for her own loss blocking her voice?

She's going to have differing responses based on her motives for staying quiet.

Why not try playing with the scene based on a variety of those (or her own) motives, then shift her motives around and see if the voices get louder.
 
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