Hi everyone,
Okay, here's what I have. A completed 64,000 word novel. I call it sci-fi, but dont think spaceships and portals, and no, dont think robots and underwater cities, either. It's got elements of sci-fi, namely a scientific invention that drives the motives of some of the characters, but it's really just a prop; a means to an end. I'm not sure if that's the best way to describe it, but well, read it and see for yourself.
What I'm mainly looking for:
(a) plot. does it play? are the characters and their motivations believable?
(b) timeline. do i move too fast? does the reader understand the passage of time and so forth, or is it all blurry? is there anything i need to explain better?
(c) what genre would you put it under, after reading through to the end?
(d) do i get to the heart of the story fast enough? did my first chapters give you one idea and the ending another?
(e) as always, suggestions for improvement, corny dialogue, whatever...feel free to point it out.
I've beta'd quite a bit myself over the last few months (yes, you unlucky devils are about to get a PM from me - nothing's free, mwahaha), but really I need as many opinions as possible on anything you can think of. Really. Coz frankly, I dont get it. I've had twelve requests for partials and seven for full mss, and still nothing. Nada. Zilch. Zippo. What am I missing?
PM me if you think you may have an answer! And of course if I havent beta'd for you yet, I will be happy to return the favor when and if you need it.
Ciao,
AFA
Okay, here's what I have. A completed 64,000 word novel. I call it sci-fi, but dont think spaceships and portals, and no, dont think robots and underwater cities, either. It's got elements of sci-fi, namely a scientific invention that drives the motives of some of the characters, but it's really just a prop; a means to an end. I'm not sure if that's the best way to describe it, but well, read it and see for yourself.
What I'm mainly looking for:
(a) plot. does it play? are the characters and their motivations believable?
(b) timeline. do i move too fast? does the reader understand the passage of time and so forth, or is it all blurry? is there anything i need to explain better?
(c) what genre would you put it under, after reading through to the end?
(d) do i get to the heart of the story fast enough? did my first chapters give you one idea and the ending another?
(e) as always, suggestions for improvement, corny dialogue, whatever...feel free to point it out.
I've beta'd quite a bit myself over the last few months (yes, you unlucky devils are about to get a PM from me - nothing's free, mwahaha), but really I need as many opinions as possible on anything you can think of. Really. Coz frankly, I dont get it. I've had twelve requests for partials and seven for full mss, and still nothing. Nada. Zilch. Zippo. What am I missing?
PM me if you think you may have an answer! And of course if I havent beta'd for you yet, I will be happy to return the favor when and if you need it.
Ciao,
AFA
