This is driving me nuts! I'm writing a scene in my memoir where someone is laughing while talking, between speech. I would normally write: she laughed, giggled, smirked, something to that effect. But this particular scene needs the laughter "heard" and not told. What's the way to show laughter in dialogue?
Showing Laughter in Dialogue?
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How about: "I heard that joke... ha ha... why did the chicken cross the road? Heh heh..."
I know, it's infantile, but that seems to be the only way I can think of to include laughter directly in the dialogue.
I know, it's infantile, but that seems to be the only way I can think of to include laughter directly in the dialogue.
Yeh. That's what I wrote: hahaha. But I wasn't sure if that was the way to do it, falling victim to "text-messaging" syndrome. I didn't dare put "LOL."
Hi,
I have a line of internal dialogue, where a nutter is breaking into my female MC's house, and It goes something like... 'She hasn't even bolted the door. Oh, wait a minute, she's such a short-arse, she can't, can she! ha ha'. It works for me, as we do laugh to ourselves sometimes
Elodie
I have a line of internal dialogue, where a nutter is breaking into my female MC's house, and It goes something like... 'She hasn't even bolted the door. Oh, wait a minute, she's such a short-arse, she can't, can she! ha ha'. It works for me, as we do laugh to ourselves sometimes
Elodie
Hi,
I have a line of internal dialogue, where a nutter is breaking into my female MC's house, and It goes something like... 'She hasn't even bolted the door. Oh, wait a minute, she's such a short-arse, she can't, can she! ha ha'. It works for me, as we do laugh to ourselves sometimes
Elodie
Hehehe. Okay, another problem. Should I break up the "He he he." or "Hehehe." That's what I'm faced with now. Writers (I'm) so anal.
I should imagine it depends on how the person is laughing. He he he would be a slow and deliberate kind of laugh, sort of sarcastically, like my nutter and his ha ha. But if it's an excited little laugh, then I guess it would be the hehehe
Hehehe. Okay, another problem. Should I break up the "He he he." or "Hehehe." That's what I'm faced with now. Writers (I'm) so anal.
Whew! Thanks. I just wrote three seperate scenes and I didn't realize how much giggling was in there, 'til now. I guess it never bothered me before.
Hehehe. Okay, another problem. Should I break up the "He he he." or "Hehehe." That's what I'm faced with now. Writers (I'm) so anal.
Depends on the rhythm, doesn't it?
Heh hehe he! (Or maybe not.)
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