My full MS is being looked at by a few publishers, but in the event of rejection, I was wondering if I should revise the plot.
The current premise:
On September 11, physical therapist Mariel Savan Leeds loses her father, former 10th Mountain Division member Aaron Savan. In the years that follow, she suffers from depression and survivor's guilt, only to come out of it when she visits Colorado, where her father trained as a member of the 10th Mountain Division.
When her husband, Jonathan Leeds sees a physical therapy clinic for sale in Breckenridge, he buys it for his wife. Caveat: he will stay in NYC until they know that the clinic will be profitable. Once in CO., Mariel's loneliness and insecurity makes her vulnerable to the attentions of ski in structor David La Vecchia. You can read more plot details here:
http://www.freewebs.com/skinovelist/
In the original manuscript, Mariel is in her 40s. I'm thinking of making her in her 30s. Jonathan would not be her husband. Instead, he'd be a Wall Street banker who decides to bankroll her PT clinic, in hopes that she'd agree to marry him.
David La Vecchia would be a Desert Storm veteran who is involved with the Wounded Warrior's program. (see website link for details) He is also invlolved in making a film about the 10th Mountain Division. He asks Mariel for help in this project.
The Kate character (see website link) stays the same.
In the original, the conflict arises from Mariel's doubts about the strength of her marriage. Jonathan has been known for his infidelity, and now that they are living in different palces, she does not know if she can trust him. Her own attraction to someone else confirms her doubts about the marriage.
In the proposed re-write, Mariel does not want to marry Jonathan because she thinks he will be unfaithful. David is attracted to Mariel, but does not want to mess up her relationship with Jonathan. He is also dealing with his own post traumatic stress disorder from his time spent in Iraq.
I though about making him a disabled vet, but that semed to take things too far.
So, whadda ya' think?
Should I sell out?
Of course, if the original sells, the question is academic.
Thanks!
The current premise:
On September 11, physical therapist Mariel Savan Leeds loses her father, former 10th Mountain Division member Aaron Savan. In the years that follow, she suffers from depression and survivor's guilt, only to come out of it when she visits Colorado, where her father trained as a member of the 10th Mountain Division.
When her husband, Jonathan Leeds sees a physical therapy clinic for sale in Breckenridge, he buys it for his wife. Caveat: he will stay in NYC until they know that the clinic will be profitable. Once in CO., Mariel's loneliness and insecurity makes her vulnerable to the attentions of ski in structor David La Vecchia. You can read more plot details here:
http://www.freewebs.com/skinovelist/
In the original manuscript, Mariel is in her 40s. I'm thinking of making her in her 30s. Jonathan would not be her husband. Instead, he'd be a Wall Street banker who decides to bankroll her PT clinic, in hopes that she'd agree to marry him.
David La Vecchia would be a Desert Storm veteran who is involved with the Wounded Warrior's program. (see website link for details) He is also invlolved in making a film about the 10th Mountain Division. He asks Mariel for help in this project.
The Kate character (see website link) stays the same.
In the original, the conflict arises from Mariel's doubts about the strength of her marriage. Jonathan has been known for his infidelity, and now that they are living in different palces, she does not know if she can trust him. Her own attraction to someone else confirms her doubts about the marriage.
In the proposed re-write, Mariel does not want to marry Jonathan because she thinks he will be unfaithful. David is attracted to Mariel, but does not want to mess up her relationship with Jonathan. He is also dealing with his own post traumatic stress disorder from his time spent in Iraq.
I though about making him a disabled vet, but that semed to take things too far.
So, whadda ya' think?
Should I sell out?
Of course, if the original sells, the question is academic.
Thanks!
...and therein lies the crux of the matter.
