POV Switch

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giaaddison

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“She’s fine Mark.” He kissed his cheek.

“Yes.” Mark softly closed the door. “What we going to do with her?”
He looked across the room.

“What do you want to do?” Chris picked him up and placing him on the table, keeping his arms loosely around Mark's shoulders.

“Play with me.”


Leaving Mark, Chirs grabbed something from the cupboard shelf. Tying a silk blindfold over his slaves eyes he clamped his wrists into hard steel cuffs.

Mark let himself be helped off the table.


Is the second paragraph a POV Switch?
 

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No. You are still in Chris' POV when he sees Mark look across the room. You do need a comma after "fine" in the first sentence.
 

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Ummm.... I'm not sure? I would say no, because both seem to just be a semi-generic 3rd person... But with all the pronouns flying around, I can't really be sure.
 

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I don't think it's a change in POV, but my simple mind finds it very confusing to read.
 

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Assuming it's all in Chris's POV, not really. "Mark let himself be helped off the table" may seem like Mark's POV, but again, not really, as long as Chris can still observe Mark.
 
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