Are we writing an elemental piece, with air as the theme?
Could be a good idea...
Air#3 is the best, a little slower so that the vocals can be dragged or stressed with more refinement and I think we've got a great start.
As for the lyrical content, I'm in two minds of how to write them,
the traditional form would be cynghanedd;
using stress, alliteration and internal rhyme in pre-designated order, there are 4 types:
(1) groes -- All consonants which appear in the first line are repeated in the following line in the exact same order using the structure A/A for the first two lines and continuing to B/B in the following and so forth. No rhyme.
e.g.
money or passion/ many are pissing
(2) draws -- the same as above but only a few consanents are repeated depending on how the second line is intended to read and with what words. No rhyme.
(3) sain -- has three sections; the first and second sections rhyme; the consonants of the second section are repeated in the third section.
e.g
of all my fame/throughout my shame/the rought mishampered man
(4) lusg -- first accented syllable in the line rhymes with the second-to-last syllable of the line, this is a singular section form, each following line is a new section.
e.g.
wonder of you as I ponder
The syllable count and line length is decided by the melody.
Less traditionally we could create our own form to fit the piece using the vast array of devices available or even combine the traditional forms/styles into one.
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Would like some feedback on this.
Maybe we should get Tessa involved, man, that girl can be our voice, and God knows she's got a great one!
