but mentioned that she would like to see more of the "urban" part of urban fantasy in the hook.
Yay, mine's up now (#2 in the second round of Urban Fantasy hooks). She seemed to like it
Well, I don't know about more flattering. From his daughter's POV, he's mostly a jerk who doesn't care about his children's feelings. But he does what he does for what he thinks is the best, & he has received the respect & loyalty of most of the Angels, so he must be doing something rightNice work, Sage! And your novel looks like it's right up my alley. I'm crazy about urbanizing monotheistic dogma, which I'll admit probably makes me weird. I have a take on Azrael in my story as well, but I suspect your version is more flattering. In my mine, he comes off as a bit antisocial
I think the "ew" was just a response to the situation the MC has to face. "Ew, I don't want to face that," instead of, "ew, this plot is just plain icky." I'm glad you were this "ew" instead of another I read
I suspect you didn't get responses from people on the blog, 'cuz the sf aspects weren't really highlighted in the hook, & most of the people reading & responding were probably looking specifically at them from a sf/f reader viewpoint (like, I didn't read the hook posts in genres I don't write, or at least read).