The Faces I Have Seen

DreamWorks · Dec 15, 2006

Please enter, sorry about the delay

Thank you my dear critters... thank you for your great suggestions

DreamWorks · Dec 16, 2006

back in business!!! any thoughts?

moblues · Dec 16, 2006

I like this, DW. I don't think this is too preachy. I also like that you have three forms within the piece. Obviously, the chorus would have its own form. That means you have two distinct verse forms. Nice.

Mike

Scarlett_156 · Dec 16, 2006

Actually this type of lyric lends itself well to metal. Just sayin! I think you're making excellent progress.

jbal · Dec 16, 2006

Once again DW, you're coming along quickly. This seems very heartfelt and was easy to connect to. I'd agree with Scarlett that this would work very nicely as metal. "Die for my Sins" by Sanctuary was what kept coming up in my mind. Good work.

DreamWorks · Dec 16, 2006

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The Faces I Have Seen

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