50 Pages

WildScribe · Dec 12, 2006

I have heard that agents will ask for the first 50 pages of your MS if they are interested. Since I am SO HAPPY to have accomplished 50 pages, I thought it might be fun to share what we have written.

What's the first sentance that appears of page 50 of your WIP?

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Stacia Kane · Dec 12, 2006

"The three of them trooped up the steps to the porch, where the men waited and did that peculiar looking-at-the-sky thing like strangers in line at the ATM while she unlocked her door."

Allynegirl · Dec 12, 2006

"He stared back at me."

This is my first novel and the first draft. I tried to have the reader ask a question from the first sentence -- who?

Zolah · Dec 12, 2006

John crouched over his little pile of rubbish and wood fragments, struggling to grip the stolen pieces of flint in shaking fingers.

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WildScribe · Dec 12, 2006

Exciting, Zolah!

aadams73 · Dec 12, 2006

The little twerp hadn't even broken the skin with his baby Reeboks.

TwentyFour · Dec 12, 2006

The squad car squealed around the corner of Cranks, Kentucky in pursuit of a 1940’s Black Ford delivering moonshine through the back hills and hollows.

Shadow_Ferret · Dec 12, 2006

Over the years the family had sold it off piece by piece until now the family was one of the richest in the state.

I see that sentence needs work.

Maryn · Dec 12, 2006

To James’ credit, his tone didn’t contain a trace of I-told-you-so.

Meh.

Melanie Nilles · Dec 12, 2006

Neat thread

I'll have a go...

"Dragon!" Marjan hesitated, feeling odd about talking to such a beast, despite the intelligence it had displayed.

from Dragon Child (due out July 2009 from Mundania Press--Book 4 of 4).

Melanie

PeeDee · Dec 12, 2006

What a cool thread.

“Three fifty even, love,” said the woman, who wore a name tag saying How Can I help you? My Name Is: Opal. “Looks like it’ll be a good day for hot dogs, what with the storm coming in.”

Zolah · Dec 12, 2006

WildScribe said:
Exciting, Zolah!

Thanks! I really struggled with that scene - it's nice to know at least one person might read on.

janetbellinger · Dec 12, 2006

I put on more than a few pounds during that time, while Maggie became more svelte and sleek with each passing year.

That's the first line on page 50. I know, I know, I should be showing instead of telling, but I've already had the two of them hashing it all out in dialogue in the present, so didn't want to belabor it again in the past.

nevada · Dec 12, 2006

I'm working on two projects right now so here they are:

Project 1

The Office would probably abandon the apartment as well.

Project 2

He sighed and rolled onto his back. “Go then. If this is so terrible, you better go.”

Carrie in PA · Dec 12, 2006

She laughed. “Sounds great. What time should I be there and what can I bring?"

Fun thread!

Prawn · Dec 12, 2006

“But she might be an Israeli Arab. Her picture should be in the Post.”

Diviner · Dec 12, 2006

Before Jay could snarl or throw a punch, Dods raised his hands in mock surrender.

J.S Greer · Dec 12, 2006

White light flared from behind him, and illuminated the street ahead.

Miss Java · Dec 12, 2006

This is a first draft (very rough draft), so more than likely my page 50 will change...but here it is for now.

As she finished her last note, the crowd erupted in cheers. Nolan could see Kael whispering to his men, yet his eyes never left the girl.

Miss Java · Dec 12, 2006

Miss Java said:
This is a first draft (very rough draft), so more than likely my page 50 will change...but here it is for now.

As she finished her last note, the crowd erupted in cheers. Nolan could see Kael whispering to his men, yet his eyes never left the girl.

Wait...that was two...oops.

smiley10000 · Dec 12, 2006

Kalea avoided her father as much as possible for the rest of the week.

10000

TwentyFour · Dec 12, 2006

IM SUCH A BLONDE! I said the first sentence on page one...duh!

Page 50:

“Can’t get enough at home, you gotta come down here looking at the little girls?” Robbie said.

Siddow · Dec 12, 2006

"She's left those kids with strangers before."

AnnieColleen · Dec 12, 2006

Miss Java said:
This is a first draft (very rough draft), so more than likely my page 50 will change

Change 'likely' to 'definitely' for me, as I don't have it all in the same file yet. And the original file isn't in submission format yet.

As it stands, first line is:
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Masud bit back words, surprised at his anger.

Reformatted (just for fun), it's:

There in the mid of night sweet Mary is seen...

(a line from a song)

Hey, this is fun, playing with formatting to see what line comes up!
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Gillhoughly · Dec 12, 2006

When I set the brake and cut the motor the dead man in the backseat of my car shifted, groaned, and straightened up to look around.

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