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The novel I am writing focuses on a young woman - it is essentially a hero's journey that combines elements of greek and roman mythology in a loose allegory of christianity in general.

Here's my problem: I am quite confortable with the character and the story seems to be developing quite naturally. However, I am having trouble finding a way to connect my heroine romantically with another character (a young man) who was written to ultimately serve that purpose, but I am finding that in the writing process there is a natural attraction between my heroine and her friend (another young woman). It is a very confusing time for my heroine, what with the changes in her body and emotions associated with that. I like the idea of working with the sexual tension between them, but I do not know how I should resolve it one way or the other. Please help!

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The following excerpt is not intended to illustrate my dilemma as mentioned above, rather it is simply a sample of the dynamic between the two characters. It is not intended to be read in a sexual context (as far as I was concerned at the time of writing). My dilemma stems from story progression that I am currently developing. Sorry for the confusion!

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Moonlight danced off the amber stone mounted in silver and gold on the face of the circlet. Small laurel leaves spilled from the mounting and twisted about the band like vines. Set with incredible care were dozens of dark jade shards. It resembled the circlet the Queen wore on state occasions and at court. No, Auri corrected herself, it was the same circlet. Queen Cerlain gave Auri her circlet. Auri’s hands shook as she touched the finely worked silver and steel band; her fingers ran along its circumference and came to a rest on the golden stone pinched in the mounting. She starred at the circlet in her hands hoping to divine some meaning from its presence.

Auri jumped when the door swung open to reveal Tellia standing in the doorway. The expression on her face was tentative and Auri realized with belated concern that she had excluded her truest friend. The slight was unintentional and Auri beckoned the young woman over. “My Aunt bid me to open this alone.” Auri explained. Tellia’s eyes went wide at the sight of the silver circlet in Auri’s hands.

“Is that real? I mean, is that what I think it is?” Tellia stammered.

Auri nodded solemnly and handed the circlet to her friend. Tellia held it with great care as if she might snap it in two with the barest touch of her fingers. “It’s beautiful.” She whispered. “But why did the Queen give this to you?”

Auri had no answers and she shrugged in response. The two admired the circlet until Tellia urged Auri to put it on. “No. I can’t; this doesn’t feel right.” Auri wrapped the circlet up in the doeskin cloth and bound it tight. “My cousin and sisters are fist in line for the throne if anything happens to her.”

“You’re worried about the Mineadans, aren’t you?” Tellia fell back into the soft sheets of their bed and stretched her arms past her head until she was almost touching the far edge.

“If the Mineadans attack, they will dispose of the Kels who do not submit. Kel’Amareh will never submit to the Mineadans – ever.” Auri knelt at the foot of the bed and reached under to where a small hole wide enough to slip her finger through, was chiseled into one of the tiles. She lifted the small marble tile and deposited the circlet into the dark recess below. They had discovered the small hide-hole when they first moved into the room. There were other little hiding places like the one in the floor but none were as well concealed. Whatever Queen Cerlain’s reasons for giving Auri the circlet, it would remain safely tucked away in the hole until she could find out.

“What will you do, my Queen?” Tellia grinned but her expression faded when Auri shot her a hard look. “Don’t call me that. Please promise me you won’t call me that.” She bit her lip as she stewed over the mystery and lay down beside her friend. Tellia wrapped her arms about Auri and rested her chin on her shoulder. “What will you do?”

“I don’t know.” Auri closed her eyes, hoping the questions would settle long enough to get some sleep. Kittaman expected her early tomorrow and she needed to be rested for training. Tellia was already asleep when Auri looked over. She gave her friend a soft peck on her forehead and closed her eyes. She resolved to talk to Kemmri later the next day. Auri held to the frail hope that the Loarkynn would have some answers as she drifted off to sleep.
 
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Hrm. I would let it continue developing as it is. I mean, there isn't a problem with your MC being attracted to her friend, is there? Or, it could "resolve" itself in the end to such a degree that your MC ends up with the gentleman.

But...yeah. I'd keep it going as it is. The tension isn't a bad thing, is it?
 

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Id keep on too. The tension keeps the reader going, because theyre curious as to what will happen. Resolve it too soon, and youve lost a good hook.
 

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Sounds like the best sort of thing that CAN happen as you're writing - your characters are becoming distinct, 'real' people, to the extent that they are wanting to take control of the story. I love it when that happens. That doesn't mean you should let them walk all over you, but I'd go with it for a while and see where it takes you. If, eventually, you decide to revert to your original plan of the boy and girl getting together, then it sounds as if you need to make him a little more attractive (both to you and your character). Give him a sense of humour; I find that often helps bring a love interest to life. Or make him kind in small and quirky ways. Or both.
 

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I don't see where's this sexual tension people are talking about ?
 

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If Auri does get together with this chappie, you've got a wonderful opportunity for more conflict instead of less; between the two women, within Auri herself, between Auri and the chappie, between Tellia and the chappie... I say, keep it going for now, you never know where they'll take you.
 

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Thanks for the advice, I may go on a short tangent later on to explore if this tension between one or both of the characters works for the the characters or myself. zenofeller, the excerpt wasn't intended to explicitly illustrate the tension, rather it is just one of a handful of scenes where innocence might eventually turn in other directions. It is the build up to the tension.
 

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It really sounds more like sisterly affection than sexual tension. My daughters hug and give each other pecks all the time. Of course they are 8 and 3.

She could love her friend, without loving her friend.
 

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If your guy character exists purely to be a romantic interest for her, then I don't think he's going to be terribly enjoyable, either to read or to write. I would suggest finding a very important place for him in the plot (and then, if he becomes romantically involved in this love triangle, so be it) or else, I would get rid of him altogether.

So sayeth me.

I think that the relationship between the two gals reads very comfortably. It didn't feel forced at all, so I'd just let it keep developing. If you start putting blinders on your characters and guiding them the right way, you'll lose some of the energy of your story.
 

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I agree

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If your guy character exists purely to be a romantic interest for her, then I don't think he's going to be terribly enjoyable, either to read or to write. I would suggest finding a very important place for him in the plot (and then, if he becomes romantically involved in this love triangle, so be it) or else, I would get rid of him altogether.

So sayeth me.

I think that the relationship between the two gals reads very comfortably. It didn't feel forced at all, so I'd just let it keep developing. If you start putting blinders on your characters and guiding them the right way, you'll lose some of the energy of your story.

The thing about tension is that there has to be more to it than just bringing a likely sex-object into the story...especially in SF/Fantasy contexts where some kind of sexual fantasies hang in the background already. Obviously some kind of sexual fantasies hang around the borders of many types of narrative, but in SF/fantasy I think there is more ambiguity about pinning down just what is going on with sex in the story.
Or (to put it another way), in SF/fantasy, there tend to be more uncertainties about the barriers or lack of them where sex is concerned and this makes the tension hard to calibrate....which as far as I'm concerned means that comic misunderstanding is the best way to get things rolling with sexual tension in SF/Fantasy.

Given all the possible oddities of an SF/fantasy world, setting up tension with a likely sex-object is probably just too simple to work well. Any old twist at all should work better.
 
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Miss Java, thank you so much for the insight -- that is exactly what has been bothering me; I've been trying to identify the dynamic between the two girls and I think you have hit the nail on the head. I do not want to bring sex into this story unless it serves to further the plot instead of some meaningless act thrown in for a cheap thrill.

As for the male character, he does have a considerable impact in the story and I only write characters into plotlines if they serve a purpose, otherwise they are incidentals and I take them only so far.

Thanks everyone for your replies!
 

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It's fun when things veer off in an unexpected direction. My current WIP stated with my MC starting a relationship with one man, but along the way she is falling in love with another guy. Tension is so much fun when you find it. Just explore it and if it doesn't go somewhere beneficial to the story take it out.

Ah, the beauty of the delete key.
 

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Soccer Mom said:
It's fun when things veer off in an unexpected direction.

Isn't it, though? :) One WIP has a pair of supporting characters who have taken on lives of their own. They existed mostly because they had useful powers, and one would eventually become the Judas Ischariot of the group. Then they started developing personalities, sexual tension bounced off the page, and now they are sleeping together and making things even more complicated.

Silly unexpected directions. :ROFL:
 

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zenofeller said:
I don't see where's this sexual tension people are talking about ?
I agree with zenofeller regarding sexual tension. I don’t feel it is sexual in nature especially the setting. What you posted shows a closeness and admiration the women have for one another. I would go with the story and the women might become sexual, but from what I read it isn’t there now.
 

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TrainofThought, you are correct in that observation; the excerpt was provided as a glimpse of the characters and not necessarily in a sexual context.

I am happy with my characters so far, as their personalities have developed to a point where the stories and scenes pretty much write themselves. That is not to say that I do not reign them in when they veer to far off of my outline. On that note, I am finding it quite useful to maintain an outline. The exercise of simply fleshing out the story in broad strokes really helps to organize the direction the characters should go in. How they get there comes from their personalities and the way it affects certain decisions. I have learned that setting goals that are too specific inhibits the character's freedom to make choices save those that always skew to the ultimate goal.

The romantic/sexual aspect of this story serves only as a backdrop for character development. It really bothers me when I read books where the sex adds no value to the plot. R.A. Salvatore tends to do this in more of his gothic/vampire novels, but wisely veers away from it in the Dritz series.
 

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Sexual tension is all about wants and desires and conflicts. My feeling is that the more subtle it is, the better. For example, the sexual tension in Pride and Prejudice is very potent: they both want each other, but they're both too proud to admit and submit.

So if you can work into that conflict and the he wants/she wants, you will have the sexual tension covered without having to beat it to death.
 

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Read the House of Love thread for examples on how NOT to be subtle.



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I think the touching, the peck, and the cuddling are not in any way sexual. My friends and I touch and poke each other all the time... heck, I've bit the end of my dog's tail just to see what she'd do (she's finnicky.) Okay, to be serious, I think the sexual tension is evident in these two moments:

farfromfearless said:
The two admired the circlet until Tellia urged Auri to put it on. --and-- Tellia fell back into the soft sheets of their bed and stretched her arms past her head until she was almost touching the far edge.

There is tension. Just because it's there doesn't mean it's the natural progression of the character though. First of all, both these acts were committed by Tellia. I would say Tellia is attracted to Auri. Auri does not respond in a way that suggests she feels the same way about her friend.

The tension is in the motivation. Tellia's actions are unnatural in a context without sexual tension, which is why they pop out. Girls like pretty things... namely for ourselves, and while we will readily urge our friends to try things on, it's usually only if the item is unpleasing to us, or if it doesn't fit, or if we're broke. I do spend time admiring my friend's clothing, though it's more out envy than a genuine desire for their happiness. Tellia clearly likes the pretty bauble, as she handles it with great care. To turn around, without any display of covetousness and urge Auri to put it on, is a little strange. Not totally strange. I mean, it sounds as if the bauble is politically significant and we are creatures of symbolism, there is power in wearing a political emulate, even if it means nothing in the immediate sense. However, I am not told that this is why Tellia wishes to see the emulate on Auri, I am left with the impression that Tellia wants to see Auri put it on simply because she wants to see Auri. That being said, lounging on someone's bed? I don't do it. I know girls who do; they're prettier than me. If I had cute abs, I might be less hesitant to raise my hands above my head; that being said, the action seemed contrived on Tellia's part. Consider: something extremely momentous has just taken place. Clearly Auri is nervous as she jumps when Tellia comes in. Tellia's reaction to this nervewracking situation, this dangerous situation, is to fall on her friend's bed and stretch. Why? Does the posession of this particular item mean a glorious future with wealth, luxury, does it mean eternal life in paradise, does it mean a delicious little secret? Who knows? I don't know, so I'm left with one explanation for Tellia lounging on someone's bed during an extremely tense moment: she's trying to get Auri's attention, in a physical way.

I know this was long-winded. Sorry. I think if Tellia is interested in Auri then her motives should be made clear; in this scene, because Auri does not respond and seems sexually oblivious to Tellia, the sexual tension is actually between Tellia and the reader as we notice her actions.

I'm not a reader who likes surprises, and Auri does not, in this scene, appear to be naturally progressing towards a sexual interest in Tellia. So I would be sort of ticked if she suddenly turned around and seemed interested in Tellia. Maybe she's not naturally progressing towards anyone sexually. I have characters who are single. Usually because of pressing issues, like royal duty and what not. It happens.

*smiles* Anyway. Good luck.
 

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I'm with eclair on this one. That was the impression I got that it was more of a one sided attraction but something more is there with Tellia and I can already see the smoke of possible bad things happening through her feelings for Auri.
 

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There have been so many great responses regarding this post and I am glad for all the different points of view that have served to give me some perspective on the mater. Miss Java has certainly hit the nail on the head with her observation and Éclairer, your observations are interesting in that it highlights a possibility I have been meaning to explore with Tellia.
 

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farfromfearless said:
There have been so many great responses regarding this post and I am glad for all the different points of view that have served to give me some perspective on the mater. Miss Java has certainly hit the nail on the head with her observation and Éclairer, your observations are interesting in that it highlights a possibility I have been meaning to explore with Tellia.

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I often feel tense. It's the 'sexy' part I have to work on.

Ohhh...you mean characters? Right...
 
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