kitt said:
I am writing a romedy, and i want to do a series of shots to show the passage of time. More aptly put falling in love over the passage of time, not to long, maybe a few weeks. This scene comes right before the big reversal so I really want to make it good. I just don't want cliche scenes. I've done pretty good avoiding them so far, but I don't know if my creative juices are down or what. All I can think of are the usual kissing, laughing, blah blah blah predictible scenes. IT"S DRIVING ME CRAZY. The scenes can't envolve other people, they are isolated so to speak. Any ideas or even a point in the right direction would be greatly appreciated.
We've all seen this kind of sequence so many times it does indeed become difficult to write one and make it original, and original is most assuredly what you need. It absoloutely cannot be anything we've ever seen or even a version of what we've seen.
This makes it a rather supreme challenge.
Calling for a MONTAGE and then describing it is challenging for this kind of sequence too because in its simpler form anyway, you only get a paragraph to describe the action. You can, however, use the more complex form of montage, which looks like this:
MONTAGE - JANEY AND HARRY FALL IN LOVE
-- Harry assists a kid who falls from his bicycle; Janey observes;
-- Janey helps Harry get the kid on his way; but he falls again.
-- Both Janey and Harry help the kid up, bump heads in the act, boink!
-- As the kid takes off, Janey trips, scrapes her knee; Harry helps her up;
-- Harry insists and applies a band aid to a reluctant Janey's knee;
-- Harry looks up, Janey looks down; eyes explore, seek, find;
-- Love explodes, pours out, a tsunami;
-- Hand-in-hand, Janey and Harry run to the beach, skipping brightly and laughing uproarously.
NEXT SCENE
Obviously this selection of scenes isn't what you want or need, but they illustrate the point of using this form.
I'd say if your creative juices are flowing at less than full steam go by this now and come back to it later, when you are refreshed and ready to go boom!
What you show will also, I assume, be predicated upon what we have already seen of these characters and their interactions, however subtle or direct they may have been. So it isn't like you're starting from absolute ground zero here. Or, if it is, you have one big mountain to climb (!).
Truth is, for me at any rate, something like this would require many interations and a lot of development before I'd be happy with what I had. I'd probably start by thinking about it several days before even writing something. Then I'd take a whack at it, see what I had, and keep revising, rewriting, editing until I was satisfied.
Probably not gonna get it in one pass.
Cheers!
