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What are some of your favorite beginnings for a science fiction or fantasy novel? For example I like the 'character starts attending a new magic/space/whatever school' beginning, the 'someone attempts to force an arranged marriage onto someone else' beginning, the 'magical accident results in two characters switching bodies/being glued together/whatever' beginning, and the 'character is surprised to find themselves kidnapped or otherwise suddenly in a different world' beginning. :)

On the other hand I hate the 'character's friend/relative/lover gets murdered causing them to resolve to get vengeance' beginning, and the related 'character's entire village gets massacred leaving them to wander alone' beginning. I also can't stand the 'birth marked by miraculous portents' or 'earth-shaking prophecy made' beginnings. And let's not even talk about the 'character assigned to go look for a foozle' beginning. :rant:
 

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I'm probably biased... this is my favorite fantasy opening:

http://randomsynapses.com/valiant.asp


But if I can't vote for myself, I gotta go with "In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty, dirty, wet hole, filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell, nor yet a dry, bare, sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat; it was a hobbit hole, and that means comfort."
 

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I think may favorite first line is:
"The man in black walked accross the desert and the gunslinger followed him."

I have always considered King's Dark Tower series more fantasy than anything else.
 

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"In the land of Ingary, where such things as seven-league boots and cloaks of invisibility really exist, it is quite a misfortune to be born the eldest of three. Everyone knows you are the one who will fail first, and worst, if the three of you set out to seek your fortunes."

That's the first paragraph of Diana Wynne Jones' Howl's Moving Castle. I love it because it's such a blatant slap in the face to the traditional fairy-tale formula. It tells me this time around will be different.
 
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I've started my WIP with three shipwrecked soldiers in a lifeboat getting washed up on the shore of an unknown land.

I liked the way David Eddings started The Diamond Throne, with an older knight returning to his homeland to find that the bad guys' villainous plot is already well under way.
 

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I guess I'll plug myself too, even if this is a short story:

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=32442

In the opening, the female MC gets run through the stomach from behind, kills two men anyway, and calmly pulls out the sword while chatting about treasure. She then climbs a mountain to go to a feast. It just captures what my girl Rose is all about, hehe.

A similar thing happens in the beginning of the first Rose novel:
http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=33670

As for other authors, I recall enjoying several of Terry Prachett's beginnings (especially the one where the watch captain goes back in time).
 

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Hmm... thinks...

Edmond Hamilton's The Weapon From Beyond - first book in his Starwolf trilogy. The cold stars looked down upon him and whispered, "Die, Starwolf, die." (Futz, I bet that's not right. I'll have to reread it this weekend. First book I ever read. Influenced my tastes forever.) Morgan Chane is human by birth but was raised on Varna, the heavy gravity homeworld of the dreaded Starwolves, space pirates whose tiny, fast-moving ships can't be caught. But a fatal falling out with the Starwolves leads to Chane's fleeing for his life aboard a stolen ship after being wounded... and his joining a band of mercs on their way to pick up a contract that involves getting to, and stealing, a heavily guarded mysterious alien artifact. Chane's superhuman strength and reactions come in useful, although the mercs remain suspicious of his origins. But the Starwolves are out for revenge, and Chane can't hide forever...

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If we're all plugging our own writing (I feel shame) I guess I'd go for Adjustments which roach's JACKHAMMER e-zine published in November 2000, earning me the princely sum of $25.00 (which bought a cheap meal for two, my other half was most impressed).

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They had begun to torture the priest when the stranger stepped from the shadow of the trees.
"You stole my horse," he said quietly.
The five men spun around. Beyond them the young priest sagged against the ropes which held him, raising his head to squint through swollen eyes at the newcomer. The man was tall and broad-shouldered and a dark leather cloak was drawn about him.
"Where is my horse?" he asked.

The opening to "Waylander"

RIP David Gemmell
 

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I remember Waylander... I think. It sure sounds familiar. Was unaware the author had passed. :(
 

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*twitch*

I'm confused...
sunandshadow said:
What are some of your favorite beginnings for a science fiction or fantasy novel? For example I like the 'character starts attending a new magic/space/whatever school' beginning, the 'someone attempts to force an arranged marriage onto someone else' beginning, the 'magical accident results in two characters switching bodies/being glued together/whatever' beginning, and the 'character is surprised to find themselves kidnapped or otherwise suddenly in a different world' beginning. :)

On the other hand I hate the 'character's friend/relative/lover gets murdered causing them to resolve to get vengeance' beginning, and the related 'character's entire village gets massacred leaving them to wander alone' beginning. I also can't stand the 'birth marked by miraculous portents' or 'earth-shaking prophecy made' beginnings. And let's not even talk about the 'character assigned to go look for a foozle' beginning. :rant:
Strangely, these seem more like plots than just narrative intros.

As for narrative intros, there are a million good ones and how "favorite" one might be just depends on whether it matches my mood that moment. Pastoral, explosive, philosophical... they're all good flavors.

Plots, though... the ones you like are pretty good, but even the ones you're not so fond of can be compelling if done right. Heck, "The Hobbit" was all about an unlikely hero assigned to go look for a 'foozle.'

Are you talking intros or plots?
 
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"Once upon a time" usually works for me. OR "The government has determined this book is a moral toxic-waste site, there is nothing of any socially redeeming value beyond this point.
 

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Ordinary_Guy said:
I'm confused...

Strangely, these seem more like plots than just narrative intros.

As for narrative intros, there are a million good ones and how "favorite" one might be just depends on whether it matches my mood that moment. Pastoral, explosive, philosophical... they're all good flavors.

Plots, though... the ones you like are pretty good, but even the ones you're not so fond of can be compelling if done right. Heck, "The Hobbit" was all about an unlikely hero assigned to go look for a 'foozle.'

Are you talking intros or plots?

Nah they're not plots, they're only the initial incidents of plots. A complete plot has to have the initial incident which presents a problem followed by some attempts to solve the problem, a climax which finally solves the problem, and a resolution which ties up loose ends.

I never liked the foozle-ish-ness of The Hobbit and The Lord of the Rings.
 

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I've said it before, but, I really really like:

This is the story of a man who went far away for a long time, just to play a game. The man is a game-player called "Gurgeh". The story starts with a battle that is not a battle, and ends with a game that is not a game.
Me? I'll tell you about me later.
This is how the story begins.


That's the start of Iain M. Banks' The Player of Games.

And, one favourite fantasy opening:

I didn't know how long I had been in the king's prison. The days were all the same, except that as each one passed, I was dirtier than before. Every morning the light in the cell changed from the wavering orange of the lamp in the sconce outside my door to the dim but even glow of the sun falling into the prison's central courtyard. In the evening, as the sunlight faded, I reassured myself that I was one day closer to getting out. To pass time, I concentrated on pleasant memories, laying them out in order and examining them carefully. I reviewed over and over the plans that had seemed so straightforward before I arrived in jail, and I swore to myself and every god I knew that if I got out alive, I would never never never take any risks that were so abysmally stupid again.

That's from Megan Whalen Turner's The Thief.

I have other favourites, but... I do really like those two.
 

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waylander said:
They had begun to torture the priest when the stranger stepped from the shadow of the trees.
"You stole my horse," he said quietly.
The five men spun around. Beyond them the young priest sagged against the ropes which held him, raising his head to squint through swollen eyes at the newcomer. The man was tall and broad-shouldered and a dark leather cloak was drawn about him.
"Where is my horse?" he asked.

The opening to "Waylander"

RIP David Gemmell


This opening makes me want to get hold of the whole book. Catchy :D
 
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dclary said:
But if I can't vote for myself, I gotta go with "In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty, dirty, wet hole, filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell, nor yet a dry, bare, sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat; it was a hobbit hole, and that means comfort."

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Shweta said:
This is the story of a man who went far away for a long time, just to play a game. The man is a game-player called "Gurgeh". The story starts with a battle that is not a battle, and ends with a game that is not a game.
Me? I'll tell you about me later.
This is how the story begins.
That's the start of Iain M. Banks' The Player of Games.

... Banks's Culture novels are wonderful. He put me off writing Sci-Fi for almost a year... mine just wasn't good enough. David Gemmell did the same thing with Fantasy... mine just wasn't good enough. Luckily they didn't nobble me at the same time. But I still suffer a bad case of inferiority complex when I read these authors.

Edit to remove "spoiler" - ;) to Shweta

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Here's one:

Seven rented nights in this coffin, Sandii. New Rose Hotel. How I want you now. Sometimes I hit you. Replay it so slow and sweet and mean, I can almost feel it. Sometimes I take your little automatic out of my bag, run my thumb down smooth, cheap chrome. Chinese .22, its bore no wider than the dilated pupils of your vanished eyes.
-- William Gibson, “New Rose Hotel”
 

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Huh, that's not the Gibson opener I'd have chosen. I think either Neuromancer or Johnny Mnemonic start more strongly.
 

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Shweta:

Yep. I like both of the others, too, but "Johnny Mnemonic" went away for me quickly. "New Rose Hotel" lingers still. It's the pathos of that one that sticks.

The sky above the port was the color of a television, tuned to a dead channel.

The above line from Gibson's SF classic, Neuromancer, is a good one, too, though I kind of get something more out of Pynchon's opener for Gravity's Rainbow:

A screaming comes across the sky. It has happened before, but there is nothing to compare it to now.

Sky the color of a TV, okay, striking image, but nothing's happening there yet. Pynchon's line puts something weird up there in that sky.

Nonetheless, I like these and plenty more...
 

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Yeah, all good starts. The one you picked is just a bit too eyeball-kicking and fragmented for me. I'm going "Okay, nice Gibsonness, now what's going on already?"

This might just be me :)
 

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I think that it's important that a story have both an attention-grabbing first paragraph and an appealing set-up and initial incident, so let's not only talk about one and ignore the other, okay? Especially since first paragraphs already have more than one thread in the archives of the novel writing forum but setups and initial incidents don't and are more specifically sfnal.
 

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Maybe this will be inspiring.Building on the Levi-Strauss I've been reading (very slowly), I decided to take his technique for comparing different versions of the same myth and apply it to a batch of my own story idea summaries. Basically this technique takes two or more story synopses and lays them side-by side to identify what pieces and structure they have in common. The result is something like an equation for a story, which different variables can be plugged into. This has interesting applications for a writer to analyze what is subconsciously important to them, and also applications in story generation, where modularity of story elements is of the utmost importance.

Anyway, the first variable I identified was one which is essential to starting every story, because it is a keystone of creating conflict. This is the Disjunction. A disjunction is something which is wrong. Maybe it has been wrong for a long time, maybe it has been gradually getting worse over the past few years or months, or maybe it has suddenly gone wrong. And this wrongness provides the motivation for the initial incident - a character reacts emotionally to this wrongness and tries to do something about their feelings.

But what are these mysterious disjunctions anyway? Basically, anything which a character feels ought to be one way, but is in reality some other way. And this disphoria, this impression that something is not the way it ought to be, causes the basic character motivations: ambition, fear, loneliness, desire, boredom, disgust, and all those other feeling that make a character want to change something. Specifically disjunctions may be misperceptions (an AI is perceived as a machine and struggles to show people that they are a person), misexpectations (a pacifist is expected to be a soldier), lacks (a person may be unhappy because they lack self-confidence, they may be lonely because they lack a lover, they may be frustrated because they lack permission to pursue their desires), and transformations (a person is placed into an unfamiliar body, job, world, which seems wrong because it is unfamiliar and they don't understand it and can't anticipate how it will behave. Transformations are essentially a lack of information or experience.)

Some example disjunctions:
Adult perceived as Child
Sexual Being perceived as Neuter
Person perceived as Pet Animal
Person perceived as Dangerous Animal
Person perceived as Freak
Non-Dominant perceived as Dominant
Mother perceived as Soldier
Human is transformed into Alien
Human is transformed into Computer
Person is transformed into Different Gender
Lover lacks Beloved
Lover lacks Requitement
Type of Attraction lacks Permission
Natural Follower lacks Leader
Destined Leader lacks Self-Confidence
Closeted Gay lacks Safety to Come Out
Ship lacks Pilot
Barren Person lacks Trigger of Fertility
Young Adult lacks Trigger of Maturity
Person perceives Good Instincts as Bad Instincts
Person wants Closure but rejects both Forgiveness and Revenge
Father lacks Respect from his Family.
Religious Fundamentalist discovers that he now lacks Faith.
 

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