Proper punctuation/caps for this sentence

bluejester12 · Jul 2, 2006

"One, two, three--" as he counted past ten his hands sprouted more fingers "--thirteen, fourteen."

reph · Jul 2, 2006

bluejester12 said:
"One, two, three--" as he counted past ten his hands sprouted more fingers "--thirteen, fourteen."

This is one way, but it doesn't look very good: "One, two, three, . . ."--as he counted past ten, his hands sprouted more fingers--"thirteen, fourteen."

allion · Jul 3, 2006

I would go with:

"One, two, three. . ." As he counted past ten, his hands sprouted more fingers. "Thirteen, fourteen."

JMHO,

Karen

reph · Jul 3, 2006

I like allion's version. Breaking the quotation into two sentences solves multiple problems.

bluejester12 · Jul 4, 2006

reph said:
I like allion's version. Breaking the quotation into two sentences solves multiple problems.

I'll go with that. Except there is one more period after the ellipses, right?

Thanks!

reph · Jul 4, 2006

I would have spaced after "three" and used only three periods because the sentence is incomplete. A fourth period would be the one to complete the sentence, and it'd be the first in the series, with no space before it.

Whatever punctuation you use, it might go to an editor who has different preferences and will change it.

Proper punctuation/caps for this sentence

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