Story by a newbie

lowvoice · May 21, 2006

Hi i write this story recently not quite a novel only 85 pages and i was wondering if anyone would like too C&C it

http://depositfiles.com/en/files/67213/Gateway_too_Heaven.doc.html

Mike Coombes · May 21, 2006

No offence, but I suggest you first learn the difference between to and too, polish your story and then ask again. When you have a fundamental mistake in the title, it's going to put people off reading the rest.

KundaliniGirl · May 21, 2006

Mike Coombes said:
No offence, but I suggest you first learn the difference between to and too, polish your story and then ask again. When you have a fundamental mistake in the title, it's going to put people off reading the rest.

And you, my friend, should learn the correct spelling of the word "offense" before you criticize the mistakes of other writers!

BuffStuff · May 21, 2006

Ohh, Snap!

@_@

But Mike's using the Brit spelling. And so, as much as I wish he was, he's technically not wrong

KundaliniGirl · May 21, 2006

Oh, well....my apologies! Didn't realize there was a Brit spelling of "offense"!

Peggy · May 21, 2006

lowvoice said:
Hi i write this story recently not quite a novel only 85 pages and i was wondering if anyone would like too C&C it

http://depositfiles.com/en/files/67213/Gateway_too_Heaven.doc.html

You might be more likely to get feedback if you posted the first few pages directly in the "Share Your Work" forum, rather than making people download a Word file.

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?s=&daysprune=&f=26

(PW=vista)

stormie · May 21, 2006

Hi lowvoice!
I agree w/ Peggy. Post a few pages (three, maybe) on the "Share your work" forum. You'll get better critiquing that way.

BuffStuff · May 21, 2006

Don't be sorry KundaliniGirl. Ol' Coombes is always a bit stroppy. He's bound to cock-up one of these days. And when he does, I'll be waiting.

Story by a newbie

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Mike Coombes

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BuffStuff

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Peggy

stormie

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BuffStuff

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