I could be wrong, but it sounds like you're maybe falling into the trap of describing a scene as if the reader is watching a movie. Novels are quite different from films--each has its own strengths and weaknesses. You shouldn't write a novel as if it's a screenplay, nor should you write a screenplay as if it's a novel.
I once beta-read for someone with a history of writing screenplays and it was obvious in their work. Their novel had lots of dramatic visuals, but very little of what makes a novel unique. In a novel, you have the rare opportunity to get inside the MC's head, to show what they're thinking and feeling, to explore their motivations, to experience things from their intimate perspective. Use this to your advantage! Don't visualize the story as if you're watching it from outside--that only distances the reader from the action. Instead, delve deep and show what happens from the MC's POV.
Is the MC the one screaming? Then perhaps end the scene with: "A scream tore from my throat." Or more succinctly: "I screamed." If the MC is hearing the scream from a distance, then maybe: "A scream ripped through the night, chilling my blood."
Hope this helps!
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