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MY MC is an amnesiac and their friend tells them about their past. There will be a lot of this, whole chapters. Do I keep to 3rd person, limited or do I write it as the friend is telling it... 'MC, you did this. You did that.'
I'd rather keep it to 3rd person limited because the other way sounds like the friend is telling the reader 'you did that'. What do you think?
 

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There have been some wonderful stories with amnesiac characters. The movie Memento, for example, is told in a series of backward-running vignettes, because the main character cannot form long-term memories and so only holds onto about 5-10 minutes of reality at a time. It could get gimmicky easily, but I thought the movie was great.

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Many, many, aspiring authors (myself included) have FAILED miserably at writing amnesiac characters. Given that you don't have a clear vision for how you want to do this, I would advise scrapping the idea completely. 3 chapters of backstory/infodump/exposition is probably not a good idea.

To be clear, you can make it work if you have a great idea, work hard, and are really talented. But 99% of the time I've seen someone try this (including myself) it has not worked.
 

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I would shoot for the retelling to be all second person, just to infuriate the reader. I know that it would drive me up the wall, but I would connect with the character being told the story on a much deeper level. Why not? Try anything.
 

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3 chapters of backstory/infodump/exposition is probably not a good idea.

Sorry, I should've said that the past is going to be a running story which is important to the present day events. No infodumping. I hope.
 

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I think that could be interesting use of 2nd person.
 

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Try writing it in third, then in second. See which you think works best for the story you're telling.
 

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I think at some point, your MC should start remembering things him/herself. It gets a little dull if it's always someone else who's telling the MC's tale.
 

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You could make it more interesting than just an infodump by a character, maybe they only gain scraps of information at a time, maybe the other person is an amnesiac and they suddenly forget what happened! Something that twists what happens and makes the story different will give you a greater chance of success. But i advise you read little e's post carefully before continuing.
 

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Oh yes, MC will be remembering things himself. I think I will try both 3rd and 2nd person. I am leaning towards 3rd as 2nd might be jarring.
I know there is a great chance of failing but this story is bursting to get out of me.
 

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If you did write in first person, I would make sure to include the MC's confusion. For example, say the BFF says she went out with X. MC could mentally be thinking "I did?? I don't remember that. Cool!"

I myself have never written an amnesiac character, but I know what I'd want to see in a book containing such.
 
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