Looking for a beta for the following YA/UF that I am currently querying. I'm on the 4th revision (it has successfully been through other betas)... however I'm not having much success with querying (maybe it's the query, or the subject, or the writing- who knows)... just looking for some honest help and another set of eyes. High level review or detailed review welcomed.
The following is my current query. Let me know if you're interested in beta reading. thanks.
Chase Whelden doesn't have a problem... he has three: a clan of hostile Full Blood Vampires that get to decide whether he lives or dies, an overly persistent Vampire Hunter, and a new love interest whose over-protective guardian just happens to be a Silver Dragon.
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In order to survive fatal injuries suffered in a car crash that claimed both of his parents, Chase Whelden’s uncle converts him into a non-full blood vampire. Unfortunately for Chase, his uncle is required to get permission from the Vampire Premier prior to converting anyone – something his uncle didn’t have time to do as Chase lay dying on the street.
Now struggling to understand his new life and role as a slave-level vampire, Chase will be forced to face the Full Blood Vampires stalking him, while avoiding Romani Cutliss, the world’s most successful, if not most colorful, Vampire Hunter. Chase’s single ray of light in his otherwise darkening life is a blossoming romance with Laura Mint, an upbeat but shy girl who unfortauntely has a very competitive and over-protective Silver Dragon for a guardian.
SILVER BLOOD is a Young Adult/Urban Fantasy novel complete at 62,000 words.
The following is my current query. Let me know if you're interested in beta reading. thanks.
Chase Whelden doesn't have a problem... he has three: a clan of hostile Full Blood Vampires that get to decide whether he lives or dies, an overly persistent Vampire Hunter, and a new love interest whose over-protective guardian just happens to be a Silver Dragon.
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In order to survive fatal injuries suffered in a car crash that claimed both of his parents, Chase Whelden’s uncle converts him into a non-full blood vampire. Unfortunately for Chase, his uncle is required to get permission from the Vampire Premier prior to converting anyone – something his uncle didn’t have time to do as Chase lay dying on the street.
Now struggling to understand his new life and role as a slave-level vampire, Chase will be forced to face the Full Blood Vampires stalking him, while avoiding Romani Cutliss, the world’s most successful, if not most colorful, Vampire Hunter. Chase’s single ray of light in his otherwise darkening life is a blossoming romance with Laura Mint, an upbeat but shy girl who unfortauntely has a very competitive and over-protective Silver Dragon for a guardian.
SILVER BLOOD is a Young Adult/Urban Fantasy novel complete at 62,000 words.
