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OK, I just read "The Invited" and here are my thoughts. For anyone else, don't read this if yu don't want to know the plot. Despite my snaping here, I did enjoy the story.

1. I kno it is a short story, but slo the pace a bit. I felt like I was being shoved from one scene to another. A few more paragraphs to add a little depth wouldn't hurt

2. "Only a small number of the smaller fighter ships had gotten away, none of the evac shuttles had cleared the ground before being destroyed, and had joined up with the last two battle cruisers left in Earth Fleet in full retreat from Mars." ... I'd rearrange this. The clause in the middle doesn't flow. Yu hav another one like this later on.

3. The plot twist at the end didn't make sense given the actions of the Kutsani. If their goal as to take the females of Earth and breed them, then why the bio-warfare that only killed off the females? Why not a bio-agent that killed the men and left the women for them?

4. Why no female clones in a sterile, isolated umwelt to provide more eggs?

5. I find it hard to believe that the docking bays of a warship wouldn't have point defenses ... and likely automated with AI to prevent boarding parties from eath access.

6. Cracking the enemy's computer was too easy. A little setup that that maybe intelligence thought they had the codes or something ... or at least say that the info was on open computers rather with no protection.

7. If Rogers could sneak away from a meeting in San Francisco, hop in a fighter, reach the enemy fleet in only minutes then the reverse is true ... The enemy could have reached SF in minutes.

8. Which brings up my next point. The distances were covered too quickly.

9. Space is 3D. If the Kutsani had the numbers to invade Earth, they would hav bypassed Mars. Mars, or any other planet, would only be needed for staging ... if that were needed.

10. The numbers didn't seem to match. You had Earth entirely devoted to the fight with about 4 billion men available but with only about 60+ ships?

That should be enuff for yu to think about.