A bit of a pickle

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Ryan K

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Good Morning All,

The project I am working on is a fantasy, but the way I am framing it is proving a little awkward at the moment.

In a nutshell, the way I am telling this story is as though a modern day historian (Emily Bestau) is researching a character known in modern culture as "Jack Bastard" - a character that is sort of like Robin Hood or King Arthur, where it is largely unknown if there is any real basis for their existence in reality, and to what extent. Emily digs deep into the mythos and is rewarded by an amazing discovery; she has made contact with an elf (Sarave) who was alive at that time and knew the character (actual name: John Bowen) intimately. Conveniently, being an elf, she has what we consider hyperthymesia and has herself accumulated a lot of primary resources from the era. So, Emily pops over to visit her and undertakes a (long) series of interviews with her, which forms the basis of a series of books that serves to debunk certain myths about Jack Bastard/John Bown, explores some of the causes for why some myths have been created surrounding him, and provides a huge insight on what events in history occurred during his time alive and what place he took in them.

So, my problem:

I have a large backstory for Emily, regarding her upbringing that aren't exactly pivotal, but better show and validate why she took such an interest in the Jack Bastard legends, and I know the series of events that took her from a curious researcher to being able to have an audience with Sarave. These sections will be told in the first-person.

Then there are the sections that placed as a transcript, in interviewer and interviewee.

And of course, the meat of the story, that occurs in the world of John Bowen, told in the third-person.

My first approach was to have Emily's story told as part of a Foreward, but as non-protagonists tend to do, she started leaping off the page, doing and saying all sorts of interesting things and it would have been a crime to resign her to just the opening paragraphs to my (and hers, now) book and only to be heard from again every so often.

I worry that if I tell to much, I tell too little. The modern-day aspects intrigue me greatly and serves to contrast how much (or little) things were different in the older days. I fear confusing the heck out of my readers if I am bouncing all over the place with points of view and timelines.

So it's a bit of a juggling act, and any ideas, suggestions or recommendations to help me along would be greatly appreciated.
 

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Well, first things first. Write it all out and worry about the details later. Get the whole story out and then whittle it down and re-arrange things during the edits. You'll be able to tell where you've told too much or can interject with other things once you have the whole story down in front of you and you can read through it without having to worry about how much information you're giving.
Good luck!
 

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It seems to me that you have two protagonists. There is no reason they cannot share the spotlight equally. Maybe if you go ahead and write it, as Caledonia Lass suggests, you'll find that what you have is two different stories combined into one book.
 

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I want to make a small point

Backstories are nice, but if all the content is in the backstory, start with it.

Start in the action and move out. Time skips are a 1000X better then flashbacks.

One of my main rules is to never put flashbacks in. Have the character speak of the backstory or just start in the backstory. Otherwise, it's very difficult to pull the reader to enjoy that flashback.
 

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All of your options here are good ones: you can make the story work by focusing on Emily, focusing on Jack/John, or balancing between the two. It really boils down to which story actively moves you and keeps you motivated to write it (if you don't care about the story, it'll come through in the writing).

If you're looking for models that do interesting stuff with framing devices, I'd suggest looking at:
- Patrick Rothfuss' Name of the Wind (a very readable framed fantasy told primarily in flashback),
- Steven Brust's The Phoenix Guards (an excellent Dumas-inspired fantasy, framed as a piece of historical research), and
- Justine Larbalestier's Liar (which is a really compelling YA story with the world's most unreliable narrator).

In general, I think flashbacks can be a risky device because they take us out of the story's forward momentum (I love the apocryphal Hemingway advice for doing flashbacks: "Don't."). But if you pull them off, they can work well. Time jumps are a more common device (especially "ancient history" and "contemporary events'), but unless your story involves time travel it really means you'll be writing two parallel stories with limited overlap that at some point you'll need to resolve (ideally in the same resolution/climax).

Basically, I'd suggest going with your gut and writing the story you want to write. If you make a wrong turn somewhere, you'll be better able to identify it after setting the finished story aside for a couple of months and coming back to it cold.

Hope this helps!
Chris
 
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