Pronouns

I try to stick to pronouns and the characters' names. As long as it's clear who's doing what, readers won't notice an abundance of pronouns.

eustacegirl said:

How do you put your character through action without using so much pronouns?

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Either on purpose or by serendipity effect, pronouns smooth reading (and speech) by making it unnecessary to repeat names of persons, places and things.

Otherwise, Eustacegirl would have to repeat Eustacegirl's name every time Eusticegirl is needed.

Instead of:

Otherwise, she'd have to repeat her name every time it's needed.

Focus on the external events and actions instead of what the character does. "She dropped the glass" becomes "the glass hit the ground and shattered." "She opened the door" becomes "the door creaked open." Also, try to cut unnecessary actions such as "she walked to the cabinets; she took out a cup; she poured some water in it." Using conjunctions and other sentence structures (such as participial clauses) could eliminate pronouns as well. But try not to stress it too much. Usually pronouns are not a problem.

One of your issues might be "filtering". It's hard to tell without seeing an example of your writing, but if you have a lot of "he saw X, he heard Y, he felt Z" kinds of sentences, you're doing unnecessary filtering through the character POV. This is often a problem in 1st person POV, but it can be equally there in 3rd. If your POV is clearly from your protag, you don't need to be constantly telling the reader that he saw or heard stuff. The stuff happens, and the reader will transparently assume the character saw or heard it happen, because that's the only way he the protag could know about it.

Filtering can happen in a passive way, too: It appeared to her... it seemed to him... it dawned on her... it was clear to him...

I have found that "filtering" and "unnecessary action" are two of the biggest challenges in my writing, particulary in the first draft. My advice about writing action without an overload of pronouns? -- keep rewriting and revising until it sounds right. Once you get to the point where you don't notice a glut of pronouns, let someone else read it and see if they notice too many pronouns.