Hi all! I'm looking for a beta/critique for one chapter that is giving me a bit of a headache. I'm still on the first draft of this story, about a dozen chapters in but chapter 2 has become a major roadblock for me. I could really use some input and suggestions on it as while I'm not focusing on edits right now, it's just driving me a little crazy and is by far the weakest point in my story.
The genre is fantasy... kind of urban fantasy/alternate reality. The chapter focuses on my MC being kidnapped and brought to an alternate version of our world and imprisoned. There is very little dialogue and I feel like I just can't seem to show instead of tell. Seriously, the more I try to tweak it, the worse I'm making it.
Any help would be much appreciated, just let me know if you're interested. I am of course willing to beta anything for you to repay the favor
The genre is fantasy... kind of urban fantasy/alternate reality. The chapter focuses on my MC being kidnapped and brought to an alternate version of our world and imprisoned. There is very little dialogue and I feel like I just can't seem to show instead of tell. Seriously, the more I try to tweak it, the worse I'm making it.
Any help would be much appreciated, just let me know if you're interested. I am of course willing to beta anything for you to repay the favor
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