I'm missing two lines(Help plz)

DeathsLove · Sep 25, 2005

Under the Sun

Looked & saw the oppression
Pain under the sun
>(something)
>(something)

Tears of the oppressed
Comfort for no one
Power’s on the other side
No place to run & hide

Declared the dead
Those who died
Happier than
Those alive

But better than both
He who has not been
Has not seen the evil
Done under the sun

Thanks

Unique · Sep 25, 2005

....fighting this change in direction
....why has this feeling begun

or...

....another war of agression
....benefits no one

or.....

throw them out if they don't suit and try again tomorrow.

Alphabet · Sep 25, 2005

I liked

Unique said:
....another war of agression
....benefits no one

I didn't like

Declared the dead
Those who died

though.

DeathsLove · Sep 26, 2005

perhaps i was being a little non discritive. I wrote this song in like hmm 10 mins...I was writing it for my friends band they wanted to make part of this sciprture into the band. They are going for a Hard rock christian but idk how its going to work but ya....

thank you so much for the ideas i really appriciate them!

JustRite · Sep 27, 2005

the horror and the sadness -
it spared not a one.

OR

the horror and the sadness -
the world come undone.

DeathsLove · Sep 27, 2005

Hey how bout
(i'm taking Just rite's suggestion)

Looked and saw the oppression
Pain under the sun
the horrors and the saddness
{Look what you have done!(jk jk) } actual>> The world has come undone

Whatcha think?

JustRite · Sep 27, 2005

DeathsLove said:
Hey how bout
(i'm taking Just rite's suggestion)

Looked and saw the oppression
Pain under the sun
the horrors and the saddness
{Look what you have done!(jk jk) } actual>> The world has come undone

Whatcha think?

I like "Look what you've done". Good one - works better I think, but ask the experts

kevink · Sep 29, 2005

neverending transgressions

making the weak lies run

martin webster · Nov 3, 2005

Life without the hope of heaven

Lived under a gun

I'm missing two lines(Help plz)

DeathsLove

Unique

Agent of Doom

Alphabet

Aspiring Inspirer

DeathsLove

JustRite

Nano: On target

DeathsLove

JustRite

Nano: On target

kevink

martin webster