WritingFool
09-18-2005, 12:30 PM
Eh, in case you want to see how i finished it.
since i knew i was already late, and because it was very late in the night, I let this go. Ill come back and clean it up some time.
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“one, two, three, four” flashing over each of the fallen bodies. finger gestures outside “five....six-and-seven..okay”
CUT TO:
ARTIE PEEKING HEAD OVER THE WINDOW TO LOOK IN
BAM BAM BAM -- SHOTGUN pellets shatter windows and blow wood into pieces.
Artie dashes over the rail, like hopping over a fence. Both men dart down starburt deck, as two shot gun blasts just miss them.
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK
Eddie, turning the corner, with full view of both men running away, with teddy trailing slightly.
Aims and shoots, and we see a distant teddy grabbing his thigh, start to hobble, then stumbles to the deck.
Next sound is just a clicks, as we hold barrels view, that shows Teddy stop and helps Artie to his feet and open a door
Vinnies draw for his pistol isnt fast enough as both men have disappeared as the door has closed with the deckway empty
CUT TO:
INT - SHIP ROOM
Teddy guides Artie to the floor, against the wall. Barracades the door. Then looks around for a soiled towel, and tears it into strips.
Teddy flips open his pocket knife, and tears open arties pant leg. Examines to see if the wound is severe
TEDDY
“didnt get the artery, good..just stay calm okay.. you’re guna be alright”
Ties a turnaket knot around his thigh.
CUT TO:
MAIN ROOM
At gunpoint Eddie forces Billy inside.
EDDIE
“How long to get to Florida?”
BILLY
“3 maybe 4 hours”
EDDIE
“you help me out, you live..anything funny...I’ll kill you slow..got it!”
Billy nods obediently
EDDIE
“how do I talk so the other guys can hear me”
BILLY
“just push that thing, and talk into that..”you have to hold down the button”
EDDIE
“Eh dickheads...Im gunna give you one chance to make things easy on yourselves, before I start hunting through this ship for you...then Im really gunna be pissed. you come up to ...wherever the **** I am...you know where I am right now...and I wont kill you”
BEAT
CUT TO:
ARTIE AND TEDDYS FACE
V.O.
“you dont come up in 5 minutes, Im gunna shoot Billy, right in the head. Then Im gunna find both of you...and I WILL find you...then youre gonna wish you were dead...your 5 minutes starts now”
TIME CUT:
VINNIE
(Holding transmitter )
“times up..youre not here”
CUT TO:
SHOT SOUND OVER SPEAKER
Both mens faces
V.O.
“We do it the hard way then”
Grief strickened faces.
CUT TO:
EDDIE
“think Im ****en stupid kid. think I want to stand up and drive this boat myself.”
(stands)
“but dont think I wont, if you try anything cute..got that”
billy nods
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“Wheres the food?”
CUT TO:
SHOW THE LEG
Towel removed.
TEDDY
“Its not clotting. You cant stay like this for too much longer”
ARTIE
“what are you gunna do? We dont know how many are out there man? We cant do ****, I know cant do anything”
TEDDY
“I gotta get to that radio, man”
ARTIE
“If you can get away dude...go overboard, do what you gotta do, get back to your wife and kid okay, dont stay for me”
Pause as they lock eyes. both eyes tear alittle
TEDDY
“youre not gunna die here”; nods with angry exhales; “Im not leaving you”; tries holding in his tears “Siempre Fi”
offers out a closed fist, that artie touches with his
ARTIE
“Siemper Fi”
Grabs his knife, and heads to the barracade on a sneaky foot.
INT - MAIN ROOM
Eddie, sits in a thinking posture. fingers touch and hands cover over his nose and mouth. And we see a small grin form as he lets out a sarcastic “Are we there yet?”
BILLY
“About another hour..winds picking up..there was a storm heading this way, thats why we were heading south”
EDDIE
“I dont give a ****...just get me to Florida, and youll live to see another day. Im going to get something to eat. you gonna try anything stupid if I leave?”
Nods a no, like a young dutiful son would.
Stands and heads out the door.
A few seconds go by, and he peaks his head in, mocking Billy with another grin
CUT TO:
ARTIE SNEAKING, SNEAKING THROUGH A ROOM.
picks up an axe off the wall, and approaches the opened door path cautiously. Peeks his head out, and returns in back in. Does it a few more times.
CUT TO:
INT - KITCHEN AREA
Eddie prepares a few sandwhiches.
INTERCHANGE:
Artie Sneaking, with knife and axe, tiptoeing around.
Loud horn sounds. Then again.
FLASH through each of the faces. Even show Artie’s head raises sharply.
CUT TO:
KITCHEN AREA
Eddie’s newly made sandwhich spills off its plate, as he draws his pistol and aims it frantically around the room.
Then locates the intercom. Pushes a button and speaks into it.
“Billy...Billy, what was that?”
“we’re coming up on a small yacht, port side, what do you want me to do?”
Eddie goes to one window, which faces the starburt side. Nothing but ocean. Frantically heads out room.
CUT TO:
TEDDY, LOOKING OUT TO SEE A BOAT, WITH 3 MEN ON ITS DECK, WAVING.
Vinnie’s one of them, raising his hand
since i knew i was already late, and because it was very late in the night, I let this go. Ill come back and clean it up some time.
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“one, two, three, four” flashing over each of the fallen bodies. finger gestures outside “five....six-and-seven..okay”
CUT TO:
ARTIE PEEKING HEAD OVER THE WINDOW TO LOOK IN
BAM BAM BAM -- SHOTGUN pellets shatter windows and blow wood into pieces.
Artie dashes over the rail, like hopping over a fence. Both men dart down starburt deck, as two shot gun blasts just miss them.
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK
Eddie, turning the corner, with full view of both men running away, with teddy trailing slightly.
Aims and shoots, and we see a distant teddy grabbing his thigh, start to hobble, then stumbles to the deck.
Next sound is just a clicks, as we hold barrels view, that shows Teddy stop and helps Artie to his feet and open a door
Vinnies draw for his pistol isnt fast enough as both men have disappeared as the door has closed with the deckway empty
CUT TO:
INT - SHIP ROOM
Teddy guides Artie to the floor, against the wall. Barracades the door. Then looks around for a soiled towel, and tears it into strips.
Teddy flips open his pocket knife, and tears open arties pant leg. Examines to see if the wound is severe
TEDDY
“didnt get the artery, good..just stay calm okay.. you’re guna be alright”
Ties a turnaket knot around his thigh.
CUT TO:
MAIN ROOM
At gunpoint Eddie forces Billy inside.
EDDIE
“How long to get to Florida?”
BILLY
“3 maybe 4 hours”
EDDIE
“you help me out, you live..anything funny...I’ll kill you slow..got it!”
Billy nods obediently
EDDIE
“how do I talk so the other guys can hear me”
BILLY
“just push that thing, and talk into that..”you have to hold down the button”
EDDIE
“Eh dickheads...Im gunna give you one chance to make things easy on yourselves, before I start hunting through this ship for you...then Im really gunna be pissed. you come up to ...wherever the **** I am...you know where I am right now...and I wont kill you”
BEAT
CUT TO:
ARTIE AND TEDDYS FACE
V.O.
“you dont come up in 5 minutes, Im gunna shoot Billy, right in the head. Then Im gunna find both of you...and I WILL find you...then youre gonna wish you were dead...your 5 minutes starts now”
TIME CUT:
VINNIE
(Holding transmitter )
“times up..youre not here”
CUT TO:
SHOT SOUND OVER SPEAKER
Both mens faces
V.O.
“We do it the hard way then”
Grief strickened faces.
CUT TO:
EDDIE
“think Im ****en stupid kid. think I want to stand up and drive this boat myself.”
(stands)
“but dont think I wont, if you try anything cute..got that”
billy nods
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“Wheres the food?”
CUT TO:
SHOW THE LEG
Towel removed.
TEDDY
“Its not clotting. You cant stay like this for too much longer”
ARTIE
“what are you gunna do? We dont know how many are out there man? We cant do ****, I know cant do anything”
TEDDY
“I gotta get to that radio, man”
ARTIE
“If you can get away dude...go overboard, do what you gotta do, get back to your wife and kid okay, dont stay for me”
Pause as they lock eyes. both eyes tear alittle
TEDDY
“youre not gunna die here”; nods with angry exhales; “Im not leaving you”; tries holding in his tears “Siempre Fi”
offers out a closed fist, that artie touches with his
ARTIE
“Siemper Fi”
Grabs his knife, and heads to the barracade on a sneaky foot.
INT - MAIN ROOM
Eddie, sits in a thinking posture. fingers touch and hands cover over his nose and mouth. And we see a small grin form as he lets out a sarcastic “Are we there yet?”
BILLY
“About another hour..winds picking up..there was a storm heading this way, thats why we were heading south”
EDDIE
“I dont give a ****...just get me to Florida, and youll live to see another day. Im going to get something to eat. you gonna try anything stupid if I leave?”
Nods a no, like a young dutiful son would.
Stands and heads out the door.
A few seconds go by, and he peaks his head in, mocking Billy with another grin
CUT TO:
ARTIE SNEAKING, SNEAKING THROUGH A ROOM.
picks up an axe off the wall, and approaches the opened door path cautiously. Peeks his head out, and returns in back in. Does it a few more times.
CUT TO:
INT - KITCHEN AREA
Eddie prepares a few sandwhiches.
INTERCHANGE:
Artie Sneaking, with knife and axe, tiptoeing around.
Loud horn sounds. Then again.
FLASH through each of the faces. Even show Artie’s head raises sharply.
CUT TO:
KITCHEN AREA
Eddie’s newly made sandwhich spills off its plate, as he draws his pistol and aims it frantically around the room.
Then locates the intercom. Pushes a button and speaks into it.
“Billy...Billy, what was that?”
“we’re coming up on a small yacht, port side, what do you want me to do?”
Eddie goes to one window, which faces the starburt side. Nothing but ocean. Frantically heads out room.
CUT TO:
TEDDY, LOOKING OUT TO SEE A BOAT, WITH 3 MEN ON ITS DECK, WAVING.
Vinnie’s one of them, raising his hand