WritingFool
09-18-2005, 12:20 PM
Talk about formatiing issues. Copied and pasted from Final Draft. go figure.
Oh well. Try keeping up if you can. Started at last minute and had to finish it even though it was late. Many formatting issues, i know. I just went with it
"Occupational Hazards"
EXT - OCEAN - NIGHT
Crystal Dolphin lettered on the front right side of the mid-sized yacht, rides the sea.
Two men, VINNIE, tall and thin, EDDIE, shorter and stalky, both stand in the main room, with Vinnie at the wheels helm. Both listen to the voice over the intercom
V.O.
(Strong Italian Accent)
”theres a big ****en storm headed your way..a ****en hurricane. I dont know what else to tell you guys, accept good luck”
BEAT
EDDIE
“you want to stay, or you want to go?”
VINNIE
“****en coast guards, theyre closing in...only a matter of time”
EDDIE
“I dont know, what should I do”
VINNIE
“Looks like we’re gunna be ****ed either way...if that storm dont get us, the coast guard will..take your pick”
Across the bow, past the small yacht’s lights, nothing but the vastness of the sea, and strong waves crack against the boat.
EDDIE
“you gotta promise me, you’ll take care of Rosie, dont let nothing happen to her okay”
VINNIE
“I will..youll do the same for me, okay”
VINNIE (CONT’D)
“I need you to do something first...fill the raft. Put as much **** as you can in it, and throw the rest overboard...**** it..Leave the cash...take as much as you can..if I get caught..when I get caught, I can explain the cash, but I cant explain the dope”
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK - FISHING SHIP
A picture perfect sky. Every star in the sky can be seen. TEDDY, 25, high and tight hair cut, lies on deck, next to ARTIE, 24, long haired surfer looking dude, who’s sliding his pocket knife over a sharpening stone.
TEDDY
“What she say?”
ARTIE
“She said if I was thinking of staying another 6 months here, I should have just stood in the marines...then the whole song and dance about how a newborn daughter needs her father..la da da”
TEDDY
“yeah..margie said the same thing to me when Stephanie was born last year..I told her shes making the decision if she wants to go to have a daughter without a father. Its not like Im some ****en ******* partying on the streets cheating on her, neglecting my family. Im working hard now so I dont have to waste my life working working for someone else, whos gunna pay me whatever they fell like to give my family the things they want. Another year of this, and Ill have enough to put that down that 10%, get my SBA loan and open up my shop. Let uncle sam do something for me for once, ****. Then Ill be a ****en stay home dad, or whatever she wants. She didnt like it, but she couldnt argue. And thats what you gotta do man...just..just, grab your nuts, and speak up”
ARTIE
“who would have thought we’d be here like this, talking about family..**** I feel old”
TEDDY
“Long way from egging cars, and selling pot”
BOTH
(in unison)
“Oregano”
Both start laughing
TEDDY
“****en stemmerick, he actually thought he was smoking pot all that time too”.
Laugh out loud some more.
ARTIE
“Yeah. couple of baldhead little cheries, didnt know their *** from a whole in the ground”
Both smile,and touch bottles
BOTH
(in unison)
“Playboys!”
ARTIE
“Drill Seargent Mills..smoothest cat on the Island”
TEDDY
“I miss that bastard. I miss all the guys”
ARTIE
Yeahhh!
Laughter fades to silence, and both stare off to see their foundest memories of boot camp within the sky.
CUT TO:
INT - CRYSTAL DOLPHIN DECK
White bags splash into the darkened sea. Vinnie tosses over the last two. Opens a chest, that exposes giant stacks of shrink racked $20 bill cubes.
Tosses the 3rd one into raft, and looks down for more. Confused look, as he looks again into the now empty storage chest.
Grabs a glock pistol from within the raft, cocks it, and stuffs it down the front of his pants, and makes sure his shirt covers it.
Turns and heads up the deck.
CUT TO:
INT - STAIRWELL TO ENGINE ROOM
Engine Room. Rummages though the shelves till he comes to a long screwdriver. Continues looking. Finds a hammer.
reads over the labels. ‘Fuel tank’
Sets the driver, and starts to bang it with the hammer just enough to puncture into the steel. Liquid squirts out, and he shakes it off his hand.
Throws the tools to the side. “Die you ****!”
INT - SHIP - MAINROOM
EDDIE
“Ill stay. you’ll have a better chance with the storm. You havent done time, and you never will”
VINNIE
As he attempts to step to take control of the ship, Vinnie refuses to give up wheel.
VINNIE
“If youre going to stay because you think I have a chance of getting away here, **** you. You take the boat! Ill take my chances”
EDDIE
“Im not gunna let you stay and get caught, man”
VINNIE
“Youre like the little brother I never had. Think I could live with myself, if I got away and you didnt. GO. GO! Get the **** outta here”
EDDIE
“I dont want to do this man..I cant leave you here” “GO! OR Im gunna throw you off this ****en boat”
BEAT
Eddies shows a sad face, as he says his final farewell. When Eddie turns his back, camera switches, to reveal a small grin, as he whispers ‘sucker’ followed with a light chuckle.
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK
Eddie drops the raft into the sea, and raises a farewell hand, whispering to himself “I love you man, but I aint going back in for nobody”
Show Vinnie in the distance, raising his hand while we hear Eddie whispering “Dont worry, I’ll take good care of Rosie for you..like I have been”
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK
TEDDY
“So what are you gunna do?”
ARTIE
“don’t know. Cant see myself doing anything else right now.”
::Deep sigh::
“I dont want to be 50 years old, working behind some desk, and I know she wont stay with me if I become a cop”
Tom, Ships Captain takes seat besides Teddy, and steals the beer out of Teddy’s hand.
CPT TOM
“Hey guys, another summer coming to an end. you gunna stay onboard, or you gunna let your wife grab you by the nuts and tll you how to live the rest of your life”
CUT TO:
INT - YACHT - BELOW DECK
Vinnie sits picking his nails, within the modestly decorated bedroom below deck. T.V. shows a football game, and theres beers and chicken on the table.
In walks RED. 34, face of a goofy-looking teenage boy
RED
“Still cant believe you let that **** go? Especially after hes been nailing your wife”
VINNIE
“How grateful you think shes gunna be when she finds out I know”
Confused look from Red as he takes a drink from his beer
VINNIE (CONT’D)
“Shes gunna do anything I want..whenever I want..threesome, foursomes, ****, she’ll do exactly what I tell her to do from now on..no questions asked”
RED
“**** that...I wouldnt be able to look at my wife again, if she ever did that to me”
VINNIE
“you dont have kids do you”
BEAT
RED
“why didnt you just kill him?”
VINNIE
“Shooting that bastard would be too easy. He thinks we were 10 miles off the shore of Georgia’s shore, but hes 40 miles off the coast of Mexico, and heading in the wrong direction.”; smiling proudly “hes gunna end up in the damn bermuda triangle..somewhere out there”
RED
“If he runs into somebody”
VINNIE
“I give a ****. He tries going back home, hes a dead man, what’s he gunna say anyway? ‘we’re caught or we’re dead’ He can run with few hundred grand, how long’s that gunna last him. We got 5 mil to spend, and all the time to spend it in.
DAWN - EXT - FISHERMANS SHIP
Its work on the ship as usual. Men with their shirts off on deck, nets being raised, and the days catch is plentiful.
INT - FISHING SHIP - MAIN ROOM
BILLY, 19, playing solitaire on the table, is started by the intercomm
V.O.
“Ted..Starburt SideWhat the **** is that?..YO TED..Starburt side...is that someone on a raft?”
Billy, immediately grabs his binoculars to look
CUT TO:
EXT - SEA - RAFT
Eddie stands waving hands
INT - VINNIES YACHT
V.O.
“Yo Vinnie, you there?”
VINNIE
presses the intercom
“yo”
V.O.
“Eh...looks like there really is a storm coming. They just issued a warning, we gotta head back”
VINNIE
“Awe fuk”
V.O.
“yeah..and uh, we’re in trouble here man. Damn fuel light just went on. We’re low on fuel”
VINNIE
“What? hold up, Ill come up”
VINNIE (CONT’D)
“****er cant even read compass and steer a boat”
EXT - FISHERMANS YACHT
Billy, and RICK, 27, help Eddie on board.
BILLY
“you got anything down there you need?” Rick leaves.
EDDIE
“leave it there”
VINNIE
“Nah, Ill get it”
EDDIE
“I said leave it there”
BEAT
BILLY
“Okay!..the currents picking up, its gunna drift capsize”
EDDIE
“FINE!.GET IT! and hurry up”
(draws gun)
“yell out and you die before anyone hears.”
BEAT
EDDIE
“How many on board”
Doesnt like the delay. Pokes barrels tip into Billy’s chest.
BILLY
“Me, and..uh .7 other guys”
EDDIE
“you know how to drive this thing?”
BILLY
“Uh..drive”
EDDIE
“Can you drive this thing and bring us into a dock, without sinking this ****en boat”
BILLY
“yeah..but..Im not the captain”
EDDIE
“Shut the **** up..get down there...dont come up till I come for you. I see your head peek up, or you scream out, you’re gunna try swimming with the fishes with a bullet in your head..got it. Go”
VINNIES YACHT
VINNIE
“smart mother ****er”
RED
“Its everywhere down there. We gotta shut down right now. A spark, radio transmission anything can set this **** off..Im surprised were not out over the water in a million pieces”
VINNIE
“Yeah, what the **** we gunna do then ... cast a ****en sheet and sail to mexico you moron”
RED
“we cant keep going”
VINNIE
“Shut the **** up okay...we’re moving fine, everything stays as is, no one does anything different”
RED
“We cant call for help either..we use the intercomm again, we’re dead..we gotta shut it off”
VINNIE
“No ****, genius...say another ****en word, Im gunna give you a ****en smack”
EXT - FISHING SHIP MAIN ROOM
JOE, working intercom. LEO, the navigator plots course on map, Steve having just entered stands quietly as Cpt Tom’s hand is held in a quiet gesture, allowing him to hear transmission concerning hurricane warning.
Sunlight shines in, as door opens, and heads turn
CUT TO:
EXT -- ON DECK
Teddy and Artie scrubbing the deck. Both turn abruptly towards the two gun shot sounds.
Turn to the other, and exchange “pistol” “9 mil, maybe a 45?”
INT- MAIN ROOM
Gun pointed directly at JOE
EDDIE
“wheres the guns on this boat” tell me or Im shooting him”
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“EH! too late”
BAM!
EDDIE
“Last chance..where are the guns on the boat”
STEVE
“uh...in the drawer theres a pistol..and a shot gun in my closet”
EDDIE
“where are we right now?”
STEVE
“50 miles off Florida”
BAM!
EDDIE
“wont be needing you anymore”
BAM!
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“one, two, three, four” flashing over each of the fallen bodies.
Oh well. Try keeping up if you can. Started at last minute and had to finish it even though it was late. Many formatting issues, i know. I just went with it
"Occupational Hazards"
EXT - OCEAN - NIGHT
Crystal Dolphin lettered on the front right side of the mid-sized yacht, rides the sea.
Two men, VINNIE, tall and thin, EDDIE, shorter and stalky, both stand in the main room, with Vinnie at the wheels helm. Both listen to the voice over the intercom
V.O.
(Strong Italian Accent)
”theres a big ****en storm headed your way..a ****en hurricane. I dont know what else to tell you guys, accept good luck”
BEAT
EDDIE
“you want to stay, or you want to go?”
VINNIE
“****en coast guards, theyre closing in...only a matter of time”
EDDIE
“I dont know, what should I do”
VINNIE
“Looks like we’re gunna be ****ed either way...if that storm dont get us, the coast guard will..take your pick”
Across the bow, past the small yacht’s lights, nothing but the vastness of the sea, and strong waves crack against the boat.
EDDIE
“you gotta promise me, you’ll take care of Rosie, dont let nothing happen to her okay”
VINNIE
“I will..youll do the same for me, okay”
VINNIE (CONT’D)
“I need you to do something first...fill the raft. Put as much **** as you can in it, and throw the rest overboard...**** it..Leave the cash...take as much as you can..if I get caught..when I get caught, I can explain the cash, but I cant explain the dope”
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK - FISHING SHIP
A picture perfect sky. Every star in the sky can be seen. TEDDY, 25, high and tight hair cut, lies on deck, next to ARTIE, 24, long haired surfer looking dude, who’s sliding his pocket knife over a sharpening stone.
TEDDY
“What she say?”
ARTIE
“She said if I was thinking of staying another 6 months here, I should have just stood in the marines...then the whole song and dance about how a newborn daughter needs her father..la da da”
TEDDY
“yeah..margie said the same thing to me when Stephanie was born last year..I told her shes making the decision if she wants to go to have a daughter without a father. Its not like Im some ****en ******* partying on the streets cheating on her, neglecting my family. Im working hard now so I dont have to waste my life working working for someone else, whos gunna pay me whatever they fell like to give my family the things they want. Another year of this, and Ill have enough to put that down that 10%, get my SBA loan and open up my shop. Let uncle sam do something for me for once, ****. Then Ill be a ****en stay home dad, or whatever she wants. She didnt like it, but she couldnt argue. And thats what you gotta do man...just..just, grab your nuts, and speak up”
ARTIE
“who would have thought we’d be here like this, talking about family..**** I feel old”
TEDDY
“Long way from egging cars, and selling pot”
BOTH
(in unison)
“Oregano”
Both start laughing
TEDDY
“****en stemmerick, he actually thought he was smoking pot all that time too”.
Laugh out loud some more.
ARTIE
“Yeah. couple of baldhead little cheries, didnt know their *** from a whole in the ground”
Both smile,and touch bottles
BOTH
(in unison)
“Playboys!”
ARTIE
“Drill Seargent Mills..smoothest cat on the Island”
TEDDY
“I miss that bastard. I miss all the guys”
ARTIE
Yeahhh!
Laughter fades to silence, and both stare off to see their foundest memories of boot camp within the sky.
CUT TO:
INT - CRYSTAL DOLPHIN DECK
White bags splash into the darkened sea. Vinnie tosses over the last two. Opens a chest, that exposes giant stacks of shrink racked $20 bill cubes.
Tosses the 3rd one into raft, and looks down for more. Confused look, as he looks again into the now empty storage chest.
Grabs a glock pistol from within the raft, cocks it, and stuffs it down the front of his pants, and makes sure his shirt covers it.
Turns and heads up the deck.
CUT TO:
INT - STAIRWELL TO ENGINE ROOM
Engine Room. Rummages though the shelves till he comes to a long screwdriver. Continues looking. Finds a hammer.
reads over the labels. ‘Fuel tank’
Sets the driver, and starts to bang it with the hammer just enough to puncture into the steel. Liquid squirts out, and he shakes it off his hand.
Throws the tools to the side. “Die you ****!”
INT - SHIP - MAINROOM
EDDIE
“Ill stay. you’ll have a better chance with the storm. You havent done time, and you never will”
VINNIE
As he attempts to step to take control of the ship, Vinnie refuses to give up wheel.
VINNIE
“If youre going to stay because you think I have a chance of getting away here, **** you. You take the boat! Ill take my chances”
EDDIE
“Im not gunna let you stay and get caught, man”
VINNIE
“Youre like the little brother I never had. Think I could live with myself, if I got away and you didnt. GO. GO! Get the **** outta here”
EDDIE
“I dont want to do this man..I cant leave you here” “GO! OR Im gunna throw you off this ****en boat”
BEAT
Eddies shows a sad face, as he says his final farewell. When Eddie turns his back, camera switches, to reveal a small grin, as he whispers ‘sucker’ followed with a light chuckle.
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK
Eddie drops the raft into the sea, and raises a farewell hand, whispering to himself “I love you man, but I aint going back in for nobody”
Show Vinnie in the distance, raising his hand while we hear Eddie whispering “Dont worry, I’ll take good care of Rosie for you..like I have been”
CUT TO:
EXT - DECK
TEDDY
“So what are you gunna do?”
ARTIE
“don’t know. Cant see myself doing anything else right now.”
::Deep sigh::
“I dont want to be 50 years old, working behind some desk, and I know she wont stay with me if I become a cop”
Tom, Ships Captain takes seat besides Teddy, and steals the beer out of Teddy’s hand.
CPT TOM
“Hey guys, another summer coming to an end. you gunna stay onboard, or you gunna let your wife grab you by the nuts and tll you how to live the rest of your life”
CUT TO:
INT - YACHT - BELOW DECK
Vinnie sits picking his nails, within the modestly decorated bedroom below deck. T.V. shows a football game, and theres beers and chicken on the table.
In walks RED. 34, face of a goofy-looking teenage boy
RED
“Still cant believe you let that **** go? Especially after hes been nailing your wife”
VINNIE
“How grateful you think shes gunna be when she finds out I know”
Confused look from Red as he takes a drink from his beer
VINNIE (CONT’D)
“Shes gunna do anything I want..whenever I want..threesome, foursomes, ****, she’ll do exactly what I tell her to do from now on..no questions asked”
RED
“**** that...I wouldnt be able to look at my wife again, if she ever did that to me”
VINNIE
“you dont have kids do you”
BEAT
RED
“why didnt you just kill him?”
VINNIE
“Shooting that bastard would be too easy. He thinks we were 10 miles off the shore of Georgia’s shore, but hes 40 miles off the coast of Mexico, and heading in the wrong direction.”; smiling proudly “hes gunna end up in the damn bermuda triangle..somewhere out there”
RED
“If he runs into somebody”
VINNIE
“I give a ****. He tries going back home, hes a dead man, what’s he gunna say anyway? ‘we’re caught or we’re dead’ He can run with few hundred grand, how long’s that gunna last him. We got 5 mil to spend, and all the time to spend it in.
DAWN - EXT - FISHERMANS SHIP
Its work on the ship as usual. Men with their shirts off on deck, nets being raised, and the days catch is plentiful.
INT - FISHING SHIP - MAIN ROOM
BILLY, 19, playing solitaire on the table, is started by the intercomm
V.O.
“Ted..Starburt SideWhat the **** is that?..YO TED..Starburt side...is that someone on a raft?”
Billy, immediately grabs his binoculars to look
CUT TO:
EXT - SEA - RAFT
Eddie stands waving hands
INT - VINNIES YACHT
V.O.
“Yo Vinnie, you there?”
VINNIE
presses the intercom
“yo”
V.O.
“Eh...looks like there really is a storm coming. They just issued a warning, we gotta head back”
VINNIE
“Awe fuk”
V.O.
“yeah..and uh, we’re in trouble here man. Damn fuel light just went on. We’re low on fuel”
VINNIE
“What? hold up, Ill come up”
VINNIE (CONT’D)
“****er cant even read compass and steer a boat”
EXT - FISHERMANS YACHT
Billy, and RICK, 27, help Eddie on board.
BILLY
“you got anything down there you need?” Rick leaves.
EDDIE
“leave it there”
VINNIE
“Nah, Ill get it”
EDDIE
“I said leave it there”
BEAT
BILLY
“Okay!..the currents picking up, its gunna drift capsize”
EDDIE
“FINE!.GET IT! and hurry up”
(draws gun)
“yell out and you die before anyone hears.”
BEAT
EDDIE
“How many on board”
Doesnt like the delay. Pokes barrels tip into Billy’s chest.
BILLY
“Me, and..uh .7 other guys”
EDDIE
“you know how to drive this thing?”
BILLY
“Uh..drive”
EDDIE
“Can you drive this thing and bring us into a dock, without sinking this ****en boat”
BILLY
“yeah..but..Im not the captain”
EDDIE
“Shut the **** up..get down there...dont come up till I come for you. I see your head peek up, or you scream out, you’re gunna try swimming with the fishes with a bullet in your head..got it. Go”
VINNIES YACHT
VINNIE
“smart mother ****er”
RED
“Its everywhere down there. We gotta shut down right now. A spark, radio transmission anything can set this **** off..Im surprised were not out over the water in a million pieces”
VINNIE
“Yeah, what the **** we gunna do then ... cast a ****en sheet and sail to mexico you moron”
RED
“we cant keep going”
VINNIE
“Shut the **** up okay...we’re moving fine, everything stays as is, no one does anything different”
RED
“We cant call for help either..we use the intercomm again, we’re dead..we gotta shut it off”
VINNIE
“No ****, genius...say another ****en word, Im gunna give you a ****en smack”
EXT - FISHING SHIP MAIN ROOM
JOE, working intercom. LEO, the navigator plots course on map, Steve having just entered stands quietly as Cpt Tom’s hand is held in a quiet gesture, allowing him to hear transmission concerning hurricane warning.
Sunlight shines in, as door opens, and heads turn
CUT TO:
EXT -- ON DECK
Teddy and Artie scrubbing the deck. Both turn abruptly towards the two gun shot sounds.
Turn to the other, and exchange “pistol” “9 mil, maybe a 45?”
INT- MAIN ROOM
Gun pointed directly at JOE
EDDIE
“wheres the guns on this boat” tell me or Im shooting him”
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“EH! too late”
BAM!
EDDIE
“Last chance..where are the guns on the boat”
STEVE
“uh...in the drawer theres a pistol..and a shot gun in my closet”
EDDIE
“where are we right now?”
STEVE
“50 miles off Florida”
BAM!
EDDIE
“wont be needing you anymore”
BAM!
EDDIE (CONT’D)
“one, two, three, four” flashing over each of the fallen bodies.