"First Person Shooter"
My MC POV is intentional. He is doing his job but the first major event is him doing a parachute jump which it is assumed that he has trained for, but they are doing a special one, special gear. He gets instructed but develops a personal, one sided, conflict with the instructor who is accurate and patient. The MC is suffering from an immediate preceding month of lack of sleep, fatigue and a growing insanity I am very slowly developing the insanity.
So often, as a result of the creeping insanity, which he is not aware of, he rambles in his mind, can't tell if he said "that" out loud, corrects a man whose English is second language but the MC regrets doing it instantly each time he does it. Then he manages to contain himself out loud but is still doing it in his mind.
He is an expert in the field he works in and the technicals of gear he uses so he does ramble thru the schematics of stuff. Hence my issues with info dump and back story.
The point of the works, in the first place, is to make people aware of things in society that occur in our name which seem to being glossed over. I am trying to make a social point but extremely subtly, perhaps too subtle that 99% of people will miss it and even when it is explained, they still won't see it. I am too afraid to make it that obvious as it may then limit the work etc.
I get
Lydia Sharp said:
has to feel relevant or else you risk losing the reader
People don't need to know the ins and outs of a piece of machinery but part of this is me trying to show that his head is out of control, that stuff is running around in there that shouldn't. Normal people should see this as not only unusual, but bizarre.
I don't think it is weird in any shape or form but I am worried that everyone else does.
Me said:
If it doesn't advance the plot ...
If I obey this strictly then I have nothing to write. I find that my plot is singular and linear, not multi stringed. I do see my work as a video in my head which I faithfully transcribe to paper and therefore I do see my work as a full movie. Action, adventure, the adrenalin charged "go get 'em". It is not cunning, a mystery, a thriller or anything but run about and do stuff which you "see" from the MC POV. This is solely done so you see him losing his grip on reality and that his "humanity jar" is close to empty. In later works, this is developed altho I haven't decided if I will drive him insane, and even if I do, it could take 20 years. I do like the guy actually and altho I am trying to make social comment, I do see the work as valuable and going on in daily life even if we are not aware of it.
I know thast every book must be comnplete within itself so the reader gets value for money. It is never their fault if they pick up book four and not book one. Hopefully in later works, the references to the prior activities and disasters should whet the appetitie for them to go and search out book one and read them all. If only we could make that into some sort of law. I am annoyed that in book eight or whatever, I am still having to define the basics but without the prior knowledge, either from the series or the first chapter they will not get full value, still, making them all read from page 1, book 1, would make it a whole lot better for me.
Am I just being ponsy, a pansy or precious?
I don't really want you to answer that.
