Need opinions on tagline from erotica writers/readers

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Two issues converging here for me. One, I am a video game consultant "in real life" and most of my friends and colleagues are male. This has warped my sense of humor. Two, I did a pre-launch social media workshop with my publisher yesterday, wherein we were advised to think of ourselves as a brand when we're setting up webpages, blogs, etc.

It's too late for the blog - I am who I am when I'm blogging - but I'm just now working with a techie to set up the website. So I'm trying to do my tagline, and I need feedback badly.

Visually - there'd be an avatar of a brunette with her face half hidden by a book. She is winking. (I'd use this avatar on Twitter and Facebook as well.)

The tagline would read:

Kathleen Dienne, Erotic Romance: Because Everybody Likes a Happy Ending.

I like this because my stories all have humor in them, they do end happily, and my characters are often just a little... dorky. Hot and horny, but dorky. (The submission I just mailed off features a former choir geek seducing a research librarian, an alpha male type in beta male disguise).

However, I also like this tagline because I'm basically a twelve year old boy when it comes to humor and the double entendre made me smile. Hence the second-guessing.

Is the double entendre off putting? Too childish to sell books? Is this something female readers would find vaguely icky? Would it be better if it were "Erotic Romance: Love With a Happy Ending"? Am I better off going with something more serious and entirely different? How badly am I overthinking this?

Thanks so much for reading this - I'm incredibly anxious about it and don't know anyone in person I could ask.
 

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I like it. It's not super-original, but it's cute, and I think it seem like a pretty accurate reflection of what you write - if I read that, I would assume that the writing was going to be a bit cheeky, unashamed about sex but also seeing the lighter side of things...does that sound like what you're writing?
 

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Thanks, you three. I'm also asking my author loop, but I figured if it was really horrible, someone here would say so and save me from myself.

I'm probably overthinking. It's just that I like to begin as I mean to go on, which gives these early decisions more weight than they deserve.
 

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I think including your name and the genre makes it a bit clunky. Odds are, by the time they get to see the tag line and the picture they would have some idea what the genre is?
 

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Well, it made me smile, and definitely gave me a clear general picture of your writing style (which jived well with what you said about it in the next paragraph) so thumbs up from me too. ^_^
 

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I like it fine, but Veinglory is right. ...because everyone wants a happy ending. is plenty.
 

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Thanks more :)

I probably shouldn't have called the whole mess o' text the tagline - that's the entire header. The tagline itself is just the little joke about happy endings. My mate (conveniently, I married a graphic designer) is playing with laying out the text - we may cut "erotic romance" from the header if it looks too cluttered.

So far everyone has either liked it, or not gotten the joke. /whew

I really do appreciate the feedback.